Board Thread:Administrative Requests/@comment-24032889-20180227035303/@comment-24032889-20180228010751

SomeoneYouUsedToKnow wrote: I agree on 6 paragraphs being a good amount of paragraphs, but a related point to this is (since we're talking about condensing them), how long should each paragraph be, on average? Using Cinder's personality section as an example, it has currently 8 paragraphs.

For a total of a whoping 43 lines. Do we need so many lines of text to describe her personality? At least for now? And that's after it was who-knows-how-many before I shortened it. As I said, it's still got a way to go. I noticed there was a lot in Cinder's section describing her relationship to her own humanity in terms of seeing it as weakness and wanting to be distant from it. I didn't know exactly how to shorten that. I think I didn't touch it much for fear of getting something wrong in the rewrite or leaving something important out.