Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171207232020/@comment-25396609-20180113222858

Saidjaleel.guimba wrote: Name: Tao  ShuangZizuo Background: Tao belongs to a family who serves in the military of Vale. Due to this, Tao's parents had expectations for him to be a fighter and was enrolled in a training academy when he was of age. During his time there, Tao read up on the history of the various war in history, especially the Great War. Troubled by there being so much violence in history, Tao developed a disdain for violence and a strong desire to reduce the amount. In his combat school, Tao heard numerous tales of Huntsmen and Huntressess and became fascinated by them as to him, they only fought to protect and not for selfish or material reasons, which he found admirable. As a result, Tao realized he wished to be Huntsman as by doing so, he felt he could reduce senseless violence between people. Vale doesn't have a military. Only Atlas has a standing army, the other kingdoms have police but rely on Huntsmen to serve in a military capacity for defense.

If he's attending a combat school he would already be training to be a Huntsman; that's literally what combat schools exist for.

Poor grammar, no real explanation of who his family members are (it's usually a good idea to give the parents a name at the very least)

Again, you stopped writing before he actually got into Beacon and joined up with his team; thus giving no concept of how he gets along with his teammates.