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HookshotHotshot wrote: CushionySiren3 wrote: HookshotHotshot,
 * Sorry, don't know how to properly quote yet*

Here is an ordered response to all of your questions.

How long, ummmm less than 24 hours. A buddy told me about this forum and I thought I'd come on over and show what I've got.

Thanks for the suggestion, but I kind of already came up with a team name. I call them Team TAPE since it's an acronym for all of their initials and technically can be pronounced as Taupe if the "A" were pronounced as a hard "O". The name TAPE also works toward my second goal, making the team sound as unusual and bad as possible. None of the members of Taupe are exceptional in any way and are regarded as some of the worst and most embarrassing huntsman at Beacon that no one can take seriously. I feel the name reflects that as it follows the rule, but is initially passed off as something else that doesn't adhere to the conventions.

The thing is Automne's name is supposed to sound terrible. Just about everyone else has a normal (by RWBY standards) name, while Automne Ombre Noire sounds like paint. Also that is one of the best descriptions I've heard for his name. I will be stealing that.

Didn't realize that was a requirement, will add that.

Sorry, got a bit smarmy on that one. Also there is none, he can fade out of visibility seamlessly.

Automne goes through dozens of landing strategies, but When entering the Emerald Forest: He attempted to build up as much wind resistance as possible by spreading out his arms and legs. Then as he approached the tree line he fired all his handgun's ammunition in the direction he was falling to create more resistance. Quickly he drew his Ninjato and extended it outwards as a mean of hanging onto a tree which he was about to rapidly collide with. When he hit the tree he relied on his Aura to absorb the impact and his Ninjato to hold him in place. This landing strategy resulted in him falling through the canopy and dislocating his arm.

I'll consider making a new one, I'm indecisive anyways.

Automne and his team are all loosely based off the four seasons (I swear, I wrote this before the show revealed the Maidens. Now I'm stuck with having to explain that I'm not ripping off the show.). Automne is Autumn (Big shock there), Eve is Winter, Tyrian is based around Spring, and Petunia is Summer. By their powers combined they make a big mess as their differing opinions and attitudes lead them to ruin everything for literally everyone. Thanks for responding, Here are my response-responses.

Your character is really good, I thought you'd stayed around the thread for a while, looking at what worked and what didn't. Your character wasn't a mary sue, they weren't OP, they weren't sickeningly perfect or edgy; you avoided most of the traps creators usually make. I'm kinda impressed!

No problems, call it TAPE if you want, but you mentioned Team Taupe spelled out, so I thought I'd mention that everything is a color-based acronym.

I meant that his first name, translated to English, sounded like a shade I may pick up if I wanted to paint a wall. Autumn Shadow Black sounded  like a paint color to me, that's all I meant.

Skipping...

We accept smarminess here, don't worry. But, no activation cue? No darkening of the surroundings? No subtle slowing of time? No activation sound? Nothing? Some people may need to know what's happening if this was actually in the show, and that's where the cue comes in.

OK with me for Landing Strategy, then...

Skipping...

Fair enough, provided you do a good job seperating these guys from the Maidens.

Now, I do have another issue, though. are these guys comic relief, screw-ups, bullies, clumsy heroes, what? Thank you, I work hard to really flesh out my characters and make them seem realistic.

(Going to be skipping points we agreed upon and head right to the ones that I feel we can discuss) For Automne's semblance, the lack of a cue is meant to compliment his ability to fade from sight without warning. But if I had to think of one maybe his shadow could disappear before he activates his semblance. What do you think?

To address your final issue: With the exception of bullies, in a sense they're pretty much all of those. Team Taupe are background characters, to the show, who have their own goals and their own plot going for them. The plot being that the team is pretty much the laughing stock of Beacon since they constantly fail team exams and act like complete jackasses. To fix this Petunia, the proud megalomaniac that she is, ropes the team into a dangerous adventure that she believes will earn them the praise of the people of Vale and leave them all satisfied in the end. Problem is though that the adventure is too big for them too handle and between their constant in-fighting and lack of skill they're set up for failure.

The story is, very much so, a dark comedy/drama seeing as characters like Automne can suffer serious, gruesome injuries (i.e. falling onto a piece of rebar that pierces straight through his shoulder) which they will later be mocked for by their own teammates. They're not all horrible people though, and they're not even intended to be viewed as bad people. Eve for example is a wholesome, kind-hearted girl who struggles with the fact that she has to watch her teammates regularly get the shit beaten out of them only for her, the team medic, to be held responsible for their well-being. Even Petunia's quest for social recognition and approval stems from a need to impress an ex-girlfriend and prove that she can stand as her own person.

The intent of Team Taupe is to focus upon the motivations of characters as individuals and show how those individuals struggle to find happiness, satisfaction and balance in their lives. And what better way is there to do that than to throw four hormonally unbalanced, highly armed, extremely dangerous teenagers into one room and tell them they're going to be living and working together for the next four years? None I tell you.