Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20161205132101/@comment-25396609-20170111021424

Kirito Rose wrote: Phantomlink959 wrote: EMBLEM: Found it somewhere else and recolored it and added the wings. How does she have a used nickname?

Fair enough.

I suck with weighing characters.

Noted.

I was feeling in a hurry.

Got bullied from time to time, but generally weas treated normally.

Like Blake said. "If you can't fight, you can't survive." She was practically a nomad.

FUCK ME UP! I got it mixed up on a different template! Her cousin is Nella Nella Eguzki

If you say so, but I think she ties pretty well with Legolas.

I've been feeling like I haven't been taking enough risks lately, so I figured having her as an aquaintance was 'cool'.


 * Cough cough* Amber's staff and Qrow's scythe handle

When I saw Carolina use that, I could see her a mile away. Never use other people's artwork for your characters; emblem, weapon, any of it, without permission.

She has the nickname "Raven"

She was a nomad... while enrolled in school. Yeah, no, not buying it. Reqrite is in order.

You need to take a couple days and write out an ENTIRE backstory, edit it down from there; because I've got literally no idea what the hell is going on. You got rushed, and sloppy doesn't even begin to cover how messed up the writing coherence is.

I can't tell if she has any legolas because i can't tell what's even going on in her story. She's female, an archer, and has a moon symbol. that says Artemis to me, and I can't determine enough else to try and make a proper call.

Taking risks is honestly something to do once you can reliably maake a character who is accepted by the general public on the first go; until then focus on making the character stand on their own.

Also, having Pyrrha listed as an acquiantance achieves very literally nothing; this is one of those things that you need to stop yourself and ask "why? does this have a purpose?"

Qrow's scythe is just that; a scythe. the pole on it serves to leverage the blade and swing it around; not a staff.

Amber's staff is a straight up collapsable mage's staff. no blade to speak of.