Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24534644-20160802001817/@comment-24534644-20160826022735

Alrighty, back tonight with Zubene Schamali, property of SomeoneYouUsedToKnow.

Basic Info: 13/15''. ''As much as I like the name on its own merits (naming the character after a star from the basis constellation is quite clever), I have to say that I can't quite see how it fits strongly with the CNR. Unless of course you associate it with a color by means of pointing at the natural colors of stars themselves. Even so, compared to other names that literally mean a color or what-have-you, this seems like loose second-hand association. I'm not saying that it doesn't work, because it does if you think about it in the right way; it just doesn't work as strongly as other more direct names, and the fact that it requires chaining together associations in order to reach a color docks it a couple points. I also find it weird that you wrote the name as Zubene Schamali and then said that his first name is Schamali. Is it a case like Ren's? Does everyone on his father's side of the family have that trait where the surname comes first? I didn't take any points off for that, I just thought it was weird. Everything else checks out fine.

Appearance: 20/20. Yay, finally, a non-red Aura color. I like the choice; not sure if it was intentional or not, but by making the justice-loving dude have a yellow-based aura you unintentionally reference one of my favorite video games, so props for that (even though it doesn't actually grant bonus points, since that would be unfair). BMI is pretty close to the minimum for being physically healthy; not sure if that was intentional on your part or not, just thought I'd bring it up. I'm also not certain what the Murican comment was about, even if I did chuckle at it. All that aside, everything looks good. Gold star.

Characteristics: 29/30. Cheers, a character that took a different path in life! And... yet... still has Hunter training. I mean, it works, and I certainly wasn't expecting anyone to submit a character that wasn't combat-ready in any way. I just find it amusing is all. All in all, it's an interesting background, and his current age gives everything ample time to happen. I see that you went for a more strict perspective on the justice-personality, which I like. Some of the traits listed more-or-less conflict with those associated with Libra, but the goal isn't to make a character that fits common interpretations of the horoscopes to the letter. You make something unique, and that's work out just fine. The Likes/Dislikes are pretty bland though. They're basically the exact opposites of one another. I know that's how it usually works, but putting it down like that adds nothing to the character; if a person likes something like justice and honesty, then we can reasonably assume they dislikes the exact opposites of those things.

Trivia: 5/5. Good family dynamic, I like it. A bit curious as to whether he had any actual friends growing up, but that doesn't detract from what's here. I also quite like that you drew from so many different aspects of Libra's symbolism, so props there.

Weapon: 10/10. The pata. Excellent choice. I've always liked the pata, but it's sorely underepresented in media, even in the RWBY fandom. As for the weapon here, it's essentially a gauntlet gun-sword. Basic at first glance, but I can get behind it. He's not a full Hunter after all, so expecting him to have a super complex weapon is a bit silly. That does make it seem a bit weird to me that he has a secondary gauntlet weapon for his off-hand though. Backup or not, that just seems to me like more of something that an actual Hunter would carry on their person. It's more my own feelings than an actual flaw though, and the added connection to the character basis again makes it worth it.

Semblance: 10/10. Ah, a Detective-Mode Semblance. How very appropriate. Not much to say here; you did a fine job of explaining how it works, and how it's based solely on the user's opinions and psyche, so it doesn't work as an "identity-good/evil" radar. (I've seen someone try to pass that off as a Semblance before. It was ugly.) Also good job giving him a reason to not have in on constantly, aside from Aura drain. I know that was a complaint in the Batman games. XD

Combat Info: 10/10. Pretty basic. Which, again, makes sense for someone who doesn't make a career out of fighting giant monsters. The landing strat seems particularly bland, considering that it's coming out of free-fall, but the addition of the gauntlet to help out makes it work better.

Overall Point Total: 97. Interesting, well-rounded, and quite feasible. A couple things I would recommend tweaking a bit, but otherwise a solid char.