Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20150801001005/@comment-24993958-20150808121417



 Next up is LiveandSound with his second dead character Tikus Sampah….and no semblance…sec I need to relocate points again. Keep in mind I’ll have to be harsher on removing points in order to be fair with others that did give a complete sheet.

 1) Basic info: 20/25. Little on the nose with the name there, you also did not mention you use green for waste, and although you based him on a gray rat, you gave him brown hair…I’ll remove 3 points for these nitpicks. The tail starting above the waist as opposed to under it, looks off and kind of out of place, I’m not sure if you wanted him to have a more mutated theme, or thought to connect the tail directly to his spinal cord, but either way it doesn’t mesh well for me given where the vertebral column lies, so 2 points for that as well.

2) Appearence: 21/25. WAY underfed for someone that size, no way that person has a fat belly without a condition of some sort that you never make a mention of. No mention on how the tail fits into the outfit; yes the placement of the tail plus the likely loose shirt is easy to imagine, but I penalized everyone so far, I am not giving yours special treatment.

3) Characteristics: 10/40. An infiltrator with that smell fails for all the reasons you mentioned. I find it hard to believe he somehow survived while others didn’t: he’s underweight, non combat trained, no aura OR semblance and due to his stench only an above average infiltrator; honestly he should have at least got hurt that one time he got a colleague killed. Contaminating the waters that badly would have taken a while, at least longer than the average war, and honestly am I suppose to buy neither side looked for the bodies and found him before the river got poisoned? You yourself mentioned when that happened irl it was a conscious effort on the peoples part, that they knew where the bodies where. The faunus not killing him after he got caught makes even less sense if they were fighting for their independence…overall this character might have works better with the post white fang as a living character to showcase the hatred between the 2 sides, but as it is now he just feels out of place, like you took him from some other civil war where hunters weren’t a thing. I guess this character as a whole relies on your head canons concerning the faunus rights revolution…but you aren’t the judge, I am, and without canon proof I’ll rely on mine to judge.

4) Combat info: 5/5. Everything aligns with the character.

5) Trivia: 10/10. Same

All of that gives LiveandSound with his second dead character Tikus Sampah 66 pts. Better luck next time when I won’t be the judge.