Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-33816423-20180101001645/@comment-33816423-20180124221503

Now for another mammoth of a backstory, its Phantomlink959 with Sabrina Magnus! Let's see if she lives up to her last name.

1) Basic info: 9

Like SpiritedDreaming, knowing the color of the emblem would be a good thing to have.

2) Appearance: 20

That is an absolutely lovely looking outfit, both of them. With such attention to detail and the helpful links to exactly the style of clothing and colors you were talking about. I only wish I could tell the difference between Chocolate Cosmos and Maroon. Lots of love and detail put into her physical design as well brings me to give a perfect score for this section.

3) Characteristics: 29

If I'm going to be perfectly honest I was blown away by her story, and very nearly brought to tears as I connected with the character and her early life. Oliver lives on in her heart forever. I was brought out of the story slightly with one singular grammatical awkwardness, but immediately captured back in. I realize that Yang drives a motorcycle proficiently at 17 but its still extremely irresponsible to give one to a 15 year old >.>. I'd need Onyx's personality to determine if Sabrina's frivolous and whimsical nature would have overpowered the bad idea that is giving a motorcycle to a 15 year old.

4) Trivia: 5

The relationships are very fleshed out and feel alive, very well done.

I)Weapon: 14

Is it just a consistent thing to not include the amount of shots/uses something has before it needs to be reloaded? Clearly its a lot just due to the size of the canisters themselves, but its nice to deal in exacts. Otherwise I love the weapon, its very silly and that fits the personality of the wielder very well. I'm just imagining an entire pack of Grimm being taken out by a cat stamping maul of a hammer.

II) Semblance: 15

Lots of thought put into this, most of the dust reflects the elemental and breath weapon capacities of the Summoner's Eidolon and it's evolutions. A very well done adaptation of the Eidolon mechanic if I do say so myself. I love the slow evolution in tiers to a creature resembling a manticore.

III) Combat info: 5

Love the attention to detail on what each of the strategies entails both from her and from Oliver

I) Day to Day Life: 1

You can only make up the one point here, but everything lines up with the backstory and makes sense for the character.

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">That brings you up to a grand total of 98! Most impressive, I've not been moved by a character's story this much in a while.