Talk:Blake Belladonna/@comment-24113789-20150316035208

"Even though she is the quieter of her team, Blake is seen to only do stuff with her team and has a great amount of trust in them, confiding with them several secrets, such as her past, that being her previous affiliation with the White Fang, as the same goes to Sun, who is the only other character to know of this." This sentence is extremely sloppy, and in places grammatically incorrect.

Suggested revision:

"Even though she is the quietest of her team, Blake is seen to primarily hang out with her team and has a great amount of trust in them, confiding with them several secrets; these include her previous affiliation with the White Fang.  The same goes to Sun, who is the only other character to know of this." I don't think this fully revises the errors; but frankly, the original sentence was so unclear that I honestly didn't understand what it was supposed to be saying.