Thread:SpiritedDreaming/@comment-31658041-20170403022506/@comment-4010415-20170405020855

The first place we saw Creeps was in a cave, as in a place where the walls are made of stone. That is their natural habitat. Why hadn't they broken through the stone or the tunnel's cement walls before Torchwick and the White Fang blew holes in it? Well, Mountain Glenn's underground had been abandoned for a long time. There was no point. Torchwick's group hadn't been there very long, and even Oobleck forgot about the underground portion.

Also, my point about your OC's name was that your OC is basically Bane from Batman, and you literally named him Bane. That's like if I made an OC who is basically just the Joker from Batman and named him Joker. That aside, the overabundance of black associated with your OC only contributes to the edginess. While Batman is a perfect setting for edgy characters and OCs, RWBY is not. You can have a character whose name points to black for the color, but they shouldn't be covered in black and have black Aura as well. That's just too much. Even Mercury Black's Aura isn't black - it's white.

I understand that you want your OC to be awesome and badass, but you have to find a balance, a good way to accomplish that without making him incredibly edgy and dark.

And it's generally frowned upon to make your OC related to a character from the show, so if you still want his mother to have been killed by his siblings, you should come up with a new character for his sister instead of using Cinder.