Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150213020036/@comment-25857155-20150214200440

Yeah, Baja, it sounds like you tried to cram an entire OC team into one overdone character. Tone it down a lot. If you need references for good character builds, check the old OC thread - there are some good ones there, and examples of bad ones (the list of which currently includes yours, no offense). I also realize it can be difficult to write someone who is in a different age group than you, but 14 is a bit young for college, which is what Beacon is after all, and it has been made clear that Ruby is something of a special case. If your going to have him be 14, you may want to leave him at Signal for a while, y'know?

Yeah, that whole voice thing sounds like a semblance of its own. also, where the heck did this Ripper Project come from? It's too much, man. You didn't even explain who did the project to TRY and make it passable. Also, regardless of what DNA a Faunus may have, we have not seen a single Faunus with aspects of more than one animal. Oh, speeking of Aspect, we were referring to any Faunus traits they may have - clothing goes in the Outfits jurisdiction, I believe.

We're not trying to tear you apart or say you shouldn't write - far from it. We - well, I at least ;) - want you to write more.  However, you need to write more believably.  Yes, it's fantasy/sci-fi/fiction, but you can at least try and follow the rules of Remnant.