Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25555436-20150320010432/@comment-149.61.202.191-20150327015001

73.Anon.52 wrote: @149.61.202.191 I assume "Travers" red is your CNR compliance?... nix the part about 30 clones unless he is to die at some point as 25 kills him already and 5 more clones that can't take a hit are just more characters to account for in that battle... unless each one has a use... but again... suicide.

I'll get to the rest later. 1- I actually don't known what you mean by The CNR compliance thing. I feel as though this a faux-pas on my part.

2- The whole 30 clones thing is for two reason; the first is that I just like having easily dividable numbers and although 25 is divisble by five, it doesn't leave to many options for small groups. The second was because a (i blieve i am using this wrong) mcguffin in the story is a sort of steriod that is infused with dust that is supposed to boost ones aura ability and semblance. The idea is that its still the early alpha stages of development as so it has a chance of death do to over-productive aura. He can only achieve 30 clones after inject himself with the stuff (still looking for a nifty drug name) which in-it of itself is a risk.

Phantomlink959 wrote: first things first, i have no idea what's up with your formatting. second, not bad. maybe explain the weapon a bit more, semblance isn't all the great but is at least balanced pretty well. bacjstory needs a lot of work, Beacon is an entirely voluntary thing, if he wants out he can literally go to the headmaster, say "I quit" and leave with no repercussions.

that's my quick scan analysis, i leave details up to the others. As I said, something in between first to second draft of this guy. Thanks for the general input. What i mean by the whole 'escaping Beacon' is that the choice is he either stays in Beacon to become a Huntsmen, or he is sent to Juvy. If he asks to leave than he is accept the charges and going straight to Juvy. No courtroom discusion or stuff of that nature, its a plane ride straight to Juvy.

To get out of both means he would basically ave to 'escape' Beacon as they have patroling guards and security cameras.