Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171207232020/@comment-25396609-20180109235305

Name is a bit on the nose and redundant.

His backstory explains his heritage, no need to list it under race.

Nothing interesting about his looks other than him having the dreaded man-bun.

He is... very short.

I'm confused by one major thing in his backstory; if he is human, nobody would know his dad is a Faunus. So he could just... not tell anyone and it wouldn't be a problem.

So was his dad a Huntsman? A soldier? You provide the races for his parents but give them no details, personality, or even names.

Generic introvert personaity; nothing interesting or damning going on.

Super simple weapons, again not interesting but not impossible.

No actual semblance, just ideas for one.

combat stuff is basic but functional.

The whole thing reads as more of a character concept than an actual character; I suggest putting more work into the backstory to flesh out his parents, go into details on how he interacts with his team and just generally put some meat on the whole thing.