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Whew, busy day for me today. Gonna have to see if I can double-time it on the rest of these entries. Moving on the the next contestant, SpiritedDreaming is here with her OC Shihab Lellouche.

Basic Info: 15/15. Everything looks good. I suspect this character is from that team you asked for help with regarding theme inspiration over in the theme thread. No actual bio was ever made for him though, so it is allowed. I will say that I was initially going to dock a couple points on the CNR due to "meteor" not initially bringing any particular color to mind (unless you count it as being a giant rock and associate all rocks with the color brown), but thankfully the Trivia notes cleared it up more witht the reference. (This is why you put stuff in the Notes section, people.)

Appearance: 20/20. Holy geez, another red aura. We're getting lots of red in this contest. I mean, it's pale red, but still. Anywho, all the appearance stuff checks out. I particuarly like the outfit; simple, but unique enough to be differentiating. The quirky y-braces habit helps with that.

Characteristics: 29/30. Interesting backstory. One parent dead, the other left, but still a happy kid with a happy life in spite of it. It did strike me as peculiar that most of the backstory consisted of information from  before  he was born (information that he himself is not aware of, for the most part), and that there is comparatively little information from his birth up to him becoming a Hunter student. But not  everyone  can have a riveting drama-filled life, so no harm. Personality fits well with the chosen basis, and makes for a fun archetype in general. Likes and dislikes are pretty basic, but it works out fine.

Trivia: 5/5. Great relationships. And the notes helped out in a few other areas, so cheers for that.

Weapon: 10/10. Yay for tonfa pistols! Admittedly a pretty common and basic weapon as far as RWBY is concerned, but basic doesn't mean bad. Just run-of-the-mill. Points were made up however by tying the coloration of the weapons in with the character basis.

Semblance: 8/10. Hmm... seems awfully similar to the mechanics of Ruby's Semblance, but I can definitely see where the inspiration for this one came from. Shooting stars and whatnot. Still, could do with some more differentiation IMO. Perhaps have it build up the speed as opposed to just a sudden burst (seeing as meteors and shooting stars gain speed on entering gravity, which is why they burn up).

Combat Info: 9/10. Looks good for the most part, though I personally suspect that the fighting style contradicts elements of his personality. It's fast and offensive, which makes sense, and having a hit-and-run style usually works fine for that. But considering you described him as impatient and impulsive, to have him so focused on safety and strategical variance is a bit odd. Granted, if he slowly developed into this more intelligent way of fighting during his training, that would help to explain it.

Overall Point Total: 96. Very good, well-rounded, lots of fine details to flesh him out. Any points taken were by and large due to personal observations and preferences, but my recommendations still stand.