Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26018514-20150401033018/@comment-27603392-20150401154440

Phantomlink959 wrote: Crystal Nelde:

personality:Bit airheaded, but also intelligent? I can understand that. I personally find ditzy and shy to pair poorly, but that's just me.

background: The one parent missing, other is abusive is kind of an overdone thing in fiction, but fairly good execution. pairing that with only having 1 friend takes it a bit further into the cliche, but not too bad so far. assuming her and peri were teenagers when they snuck onto that ship, I highly doubt that they would use any sort of fatal weaponry, morel ikely they would capture them and lock them in an empty cloet until they got to their destination. dial down the tragic backstory, it's a bit too far mary-sue ish. I can understand wanting some tragedy, but i feel lke you overdid it.

weapons: I really like faith, it has the certain simple elegance. not much else to be said on that one. Not sure how I feel about trust, feels a bit childish but i suppose it fits her personality and inspiration.

seeing a lot of minor speling and grammar issues. the spelling won't be picked up on spellcheck, because it is words, just not the right ones.

combat:

I'm not really sure the environment itself in Remnant as any particular elemental affinity, if it were something like magic the gathering, where different regions have a natural mana flow it would be different, but so far we have seen no indications that remnant functions in that manner.

will do Carol Dempsey in a few minutes, after I eat breakfast.

Nah, intelligence isn't the correct word. She picks up on things quick, though, but at the same time she get distracted easily.

As for a backstory, there is a reason and story plot behind it, so I dont want to spoil much. But hey, at least she's not a lone wolf Faunus :P