User blog comment:Zathronas/Speculative Author - What's next? part 3 The Adults/@comment-5426254-20160322000259/@comment-24218038-20160322144116

Here's my honest opinion. I think your idea is good, but not the execution. Here's how I would do it:

Start by stating what you believe was good in the episode, then what you didn't like. Finally I would redo the episode explaining why how those changes removes what was wrong while keeping what was good.

One last thing: Some of the changes you make are superficial. I think if you make a list of what is wrong before you change the episode, you would have a better overall story. Ask yourself this for each scene: what was their intention with the scene? What did Monty wanted to show us? Did he succeed? Is there a better way to do what he did?

Don't get me wrong, your idea is good and you should keep at it. Just don't see it from the characters perspective but the writers.

Hope I don't discourage you. It's just my opinion.