Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150213020036/@comment-24181684-20150214161258

Been lurking these OC threads for a while, might as well do something now...

In regards to Josef's OC, I'd have to agree whole-heartedly with Live, sounds very unoriginal and Marty Stu-like. The fact that he's 14 is really pushing the whole "Getting into X early", on top of the fact that this Ripper state you mention sounds ridiculous and if anything would make it less likely to get into Beacon because of the reckless nature you gave it,. Also, the sheer number of abilities and weapons is ridiculous, with a revolver ( which doesn't really increase his fire rate that much, try a more rapid-fire weapon instead if you're going to have 2 weapons, like an SMG), and a main weapon that is edging too closely to a canon characters weapon, except with more Marty-Stu 'improvements'. Lastly, what is it with people and giving themselves two semblences, it doesn't make them cooler, it just makes it harder to take them seriously.

Seriously, if you try to draw out an OC, and it ends up looking like too much is going on, it may not be best to re-evaluate your character traits, especially with your physical description of Carmine's 'Ripper' mode.