Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171116191014/@comment-25110963-20171202024319

Is it entirely necessary for your character to be based on a phoenix? Storywise, not a lot of creativity to put into it. It needs something to start as a base for his story.

Also, "Ikuze!" is a catchphrase from a certain character I remember. His name is Rallen from Spectrobes. Anyone know that?

As for the backstory, what do you mean "retired"? I don't think Huntsmen retire at all unless for a serious reason, and I doubt it's age. Wouldn't a Kingdom call them to service in times of crisis? I think your backstory is too specific in details. You need to leave it more open, that way it won't conflict with canon, but leave enough space for any creative ideas you want.

The wooden katana, a bokken, is interesting, but why that? Doesn't he use a naginata? Wouldn't he use a training spear? And if he uses a sword, he should have a heavier sword, not a katana. Also, he doesn't need the explanation for the scattergun unless important to his story.

If I take away the unnecessary parts of his background, there's barely anything of substance. It needs more. About him. His motives, his strugggles, something.