Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27082610-20170424154014/@comment-25936766-20170426010424

Agent ND wrote:

1-Odin was two years ahead of her at Signal when he met her, so they both went to Beacon at the same time. I haven't gone over this in the fanfic, or a whole lot of the background of Odin in the story, though I probably should.

2-The thing with Qrow was, as he and Ruby were friends and hung out now and again, Qrow was around (You know, being protective). He got to know him, and Odin began to admire him, even constructing his weapon in a semi-similar fashion. It's nothing huge, but yeah.

3-One more thing about Ruby, was that in the fanfic I made it so he ended up having a bit of a crush on her, and Yang hinting that she sorta likes him back, BUT HOLD ON before I get shouted into oblivion, I'm not really planning on it going anywhere, not fast anyway. Just to provide a comedic moment now and again. These ideas are cancerous. Here's why:

1-Didn't you say your fanfic was already about 30+ pages long? And in all that time, you haven't gone over that, or even a decent amount of Odin's background? Great, so even though he's yourself, he's nothing. Nothing but an empty plot device with a face.

2-See, if he knew Ruby and was friends with her, as Mary Sueish as that already is, it would be fine if he KNEW Qrow (meaning ACQUAINTANCE, that they knew each other, not any "mentor/apprentice relationship" bullshit beyond what's expected of a teacher and a student).

But making a similar weapon? Which, given your amazing writing decisions, I assume he's about as good with it as both Ruby and Qrow are with their own weapons, even though their skill at using gunscythes, let alone Qrow's sword-gunscythe, has been noted by Ozpin Himself?

You say it's nothing huge, but every single time you say that, it's always huge and blatantly dreadful.

3-This is just bullshit. Unnecesary, needless, serves nothing, and never goes anywhere good. The only good thing I can say is that at least you didn't, apparently, make them a couple yet, and that you used Ruby instead of Yang.

But keep in mind, I'm not blind. Odin Sanchez, the Gary Sue, was based on you, you said so yourself. As such, things like who he has a crush on, reflect upon you, because Odin is you.

By now it's obvious: ''It's a Gary Sue, no better than scrap. Kill it. Erase it. Burn it and start over.''

"But I already made 30+ pages for my fanfic!" <-This is meaningless. A flawed production with a protagonist that already has multiple, big, mistakes from the design alone.

You have an Ultimatum here: If you care about making a good character, about making a good story, regardless of FF.net's community's infamously-unexistent standards, then erase Odin Sanchez, and make another character. Start from Zero.

But if you don't care about making a good character or a good story, if you don't mind pleasing a community that can't distinguish gold from urine, and don't care about making a Gary Sueish glorified Self-Insert, then ignore all this, and go on.