Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150630215852/@comment-25857155-20150708170737

Now, for our eigth and final entry - '''Vedran TheII’s Bruno Curtis. '''

Anti-kudos for misorganization (not to be confused with disorganization; you did a good job there, just not in the right order by the template.  Perhaps we should reorder a bit, though.)  Also, wth is up with those semicolons? Not complaining, just stuck me as odd.

1)  Basic Info: 19/20 – Interesting Faunus race.  Good symbol, Aura, and all that.  Also, minus one for no CNR explaination anywhere –I’d say brown is fairly obvious, but did not look it up.

2) Appearance: 18/20 - Excellent detail, except on face and hair (minus one for each).

3)  Characteristics: 31/35
 * Background (18/20) – Entertaining background, fairly well detailed despite being short – well done.  Could have stood for a bit more detail, I suppose.
 * Personality (13/15) – “Man child,” that made me chuckle.  You misspelled serious.  Decent likes and dislikes; could use a bit more detail.

4) Combat Info: 16.5/25  - This section made me acutely aware of a need for change in our template for these competitions, and maybe in the suggested template for the OC Foundry (such as it is).
 * Weapon: (6/10) I like it.  I like it a lot, actually.  Not sure about the glyphs, and it sounds a bit OP with the potential length, though that would depend on the user’s skill.  I had to reorder some points to be fair here. The Vorpal Blade reference is appreciated.
 * Semblance: (8.5/10) That sounds quite good.  It’s not really different active abilities; it’s just different uses.  The passive sounds entertaining – I can imagine someone trying to hit him in the head with a ball of paper and it bouncing back at their face. Excellent application of Dust use.  Good limiter.  If it is not shattered, can the Aura used be partially reabsorbed?  What exactly is the difference between a mirror and a looking glass?
 * Fighting Style/landing: (2/5) Good use of semblance in landing.  His preferred fighting style seems a bit at odds with his semblance, though.

5) Trivia: (Plus 2!)  Good detail, and very good note about the semblance.

All this combined grants Vedran TheII’s Bruno Curtis a total score of 86.5/100! Good work.