Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-68.11.54.113-20131127160149

Now the real title for this story is Cold Steel and Firery Vengence and, as one would guess by the title of this, the main villian is the Cybermen. Now this is my story but any helpful critiscisms would be appreciated. So we open up in one of the more artic regions of Remnant seeing a hooded figure wondering in a snowstorm. He then walks into something that shouldn't be there, a gigantic metal hatch. He seems overjoyed that he's found it and proceeds to open it. The hooded figure then enters what he calls "the tomb" and sees rows of what could be described as coffins of ice and inside each is a person or what looks like it. He then spots a console that he thinks will bring the "tomb"'s systems back online. He then starts to mess around with the console until finally it sparks to life. The figures begins to move as they begin to thaw. We then transition to Beacon Academy where Team RWBY and Team JNPR are being taught how to deal with a Death Stalker  properly which is to imobolize it then stab it in the underbelly because, like the Boarbatusk, it has no armor there. Thet are then put to the test by actually doing so and they have to do it in less than 5 minutes as a little challenge. The first to try is team RWBY but things do not go as planned. In fact Ruby didn't think it through that much and just rushed ahead and started attacking.They eventually defaet the Death Stalker but Wiess is not to pleased with Ruby. She still belives that she should be the team leader not Ruby. After an argument between them, Wiess storms off. She goes to the courtyard to calm down when someone says" I agree with you Wiess, Ruby is to immature to lead." She draws Myrtenaster to defned herself aginst whoever or whatever is speaking. The mysterious figure emerges and reveals himself to be the same person who activated the tomb. He calls himself the Cyber King. He says that he sees Wiess's true potential and that it is a shame Ozpin won't let her reach it. He then says that he would like her help. He plans to bring about the next step of"human evolution" through "upgrading humanity". He says that before that can happen though Beacon must fall. He says their beliefs would get in his way of bring about a new age of peace. She is hesitant at first but the Cyber King predicted and show her what his plan really entails. He shows Wiess a Cyberman. He explains that the Cybermen will be humanity mark 2.  