Board Thread:Episode Discussion/@comment-95.133.42.171-20171108122846/@comment-92.112.51.173-20171128075903

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I just don't like that M&K even don't see the problem! So they don't think that improving is necessary. Let's take Blake's character short. Well, I had a lot of problems with it, I don't think that putting Ilia's backstory there was a god idea. But anyway: even this kind of short could be better if it contained more small details. Let's see...


 * Blake draws her weapon after checking WF member's identity with Ilia's scroll*

BAD THING HERE: she's literally in the middle of the crowd. She actually corners this WF member as a rat. He may loose his temper, he may start shooting the crowd or unintentionally hurt some civillians. Blake and Sun are able to protect themselves - but others may be not. So RT show Blake as either an idiot ot the one who just doesn't care about possible damage to others. Both are OOC, as I see it.

FIXING: Sun could be showed reaching for his weapon. Than Blake stops him - "it's too crowdy here". Then they are noticed by WF member who losses his temper and starts shooting.


 * WF member is running away. He cuts the ropes of the car with his knife; the car is going down*

BAD THING HERE: Blake is just stunned. She stops. Sun is the one who reacts. So Blake literally stands still while Sun uses his clones to stop the car. Though previously Blake has shown a pretty good reaction. Another problem is that the audience does not see any problem with this car, any necessity to, well, stop it.

FIXING: Blake could turn back and see civillians in the way of this car. Maybe little children or old people, or people with some gear - someone who can't get from the car's way quickly... Anything to show that the car could actually hurt someone, if it's not stopped. It also could be some dilemma: either stopping the car from hurting people or catch a WF member. It could be the moment of hesitation for Blake, when she looks at people behind and a criminal ahead. Here Sun could solve this dilemma: "I'll stop it - go! Go and get him!"

*Running across the roof*

BAD THING HERE: it was absolutely unnecessary in that case, as far as THAT SIDE OF THE STREET WAS COMPLETELY EMPTY! Seriously, what was the point of that move? Just to show that Blake has "some cool moves too"? Ridiculous!

FIXING:  making that street more narrow and cluttered with some boxes or different stuff. Making it the one that it's impossible to cross in a normal way. Giving that wallrunning a reason.

*Blake stops WF member with her kusarigama and then...*

BAD THING HERE:  WTF happened with Cambol Shroud there? It looked like someone was pulling it that much that Blake let it go in the hand. She looses her weapon... just to be shown with it again a moment later.

FIXING:  showing Ilia appearing, grabbing the WF member and pushing him away from Blake's side. Show a shot with Blake returning her weapon by pulling the ribbon - or Ilia throwing it to Blake directly.

*Ilia shoots a conterwight with boxes and gets away*

BAD THING HERE:  Blake just stands still. Again. She even doesn't make a single step back - so she doesn't care that all that boxes could fall on her head.

FIXING:  showing that conterwight hanging not that far from Blake's head - but closer to her. Speeding Ilia's reaction a little, so that it caused the impression that the idea of shooting the rope was a momentary desision for her. Showing Blake jumping away from that boxes - and not standing still like an idiot. You could probably say "but it showed that Ilia doen's want to hurt Blake, so it's fine". Well, it's not. They are hunters - or they are at least trained in the same way as hunters are. In the world of Remnant you can shoot someone in the face - and the aurauser even wouldn't get a scretch.

Small details could make the difference. But M&K just don't care.