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I've been thinking of making an OC Pirate (Well, more like Privateer) Crew. They are hired by the governments in each kingdom, and sometimes by some groups outside them, to deal with certain maritine problems, sometimes including Grimm. I've gotten some ideas, wanted to know what you guys's opinions about them are. First I'll start with the first 2 members of the crew, then move on after the feedback to avoid making a mega-giant post.

1-Draque.

-Race: Human, Male.

-Age: "24".

-Role: Captain.

-Physique: Average build, though bordering closer to slim.

-Traits: Right-handed, has 3 scars across his back, and another one on his right arm.

-Weapon: A cutlass along with a Dust-powered flintlock pistol that imbues the bullet with the currently-inserted Dust before firing it. Prefers to use Fire Dust.

-Personality: He's calm, direct and most of the time serious. However, he cares about his crew and despises slavery, most of the time setting any slaves he finds free and treating his hostages well, and is capable of having some fun with his fellow crew when possible.

-Background: He was born into slavery, as his parents were both slaves owned by a dreadful, feared pirate known as Draque. He was tortured along with many other slaves for most of his live, gaining his 4 scars that way. That is, until he reached the 20 years. Noticing displeasement among the crew, he anticipated a mutiny and organized a plan. As he expected, a mutiny ocurred, though there were still some members that followed Draque and defended him. In that moment, the slaves ran, and attacked everyone they saw. Although most crewmembers could have easily dealt with the slaves: a)they were distracted fighting each other, and b)there were too many slaves.

During that moment, Draque got hurt and dropped his gun, and our hero took advantage of that to pursue him, grabbing his gun. He eventually caught him and quickly killed him with a shot to the chest. Then he took the captain's body to the deck, and saw that the fight had finished. The pirates had been all killed, though more than half of the slaves had died too. Then, he stole the Draque's clothes and name, kept the ship and gun, before throwing his body off the deck into the ocean along with his crew. He became a privateer, the ex-slaves became his crew.

-Notes: 1)Doesn't know how to read nor write, and as such he must rely on other members of his crew to take care of these things. 2)Draque>Drake>Draco>Dragon.

2-Psittacines Swanne

-Race: Faunus (Parrot), Female.

-Age: 20

-Traits: Hair is made up of feathers, red for the most part, yellow and blue near the borders. Wears an eyepatch to hide her lost left eye. Tends to squawk when nervous. Left-handed.

-Role: Quartermaster.

-Weapon: Gales, a Rapier with.

-Semblance: Feather Jump (got better names, please say them). Spins, and dissapears as some feathers fall, then she appears somewhere else. Similar to Ruby's, only that this is teleporting instead of a dash, has lesser range (7m max), and too much use not only leaves her tired but also causes nausea. She also must have a clear view of the area she's going to teleport for it to work.

-Personality: Even more serious than Draque, but also pretty agressive, brutally honest, and very focused on whatever she does. She's also very devoted to the captain, and can be quite intimidating when mad. She's known for talking too much at times, especially when angry.

-Background: She was born into a rich Faunus family in Mistral (or rather, slightly-above-average by human standards. Wasn't easy). She used to be much nicer back then. She wanted to be a Hunter, and trained in the use of the Rapier almost-every day. However, she never got to enter an actual Hunter school.

When she was 12, one day her family was attacked by a group of Vacuoan slavers. They were captured along with apparently some other Faunus. Her family spent many years in slavery, passing hunger, which eventually killed her mother. Her father was already dead, having been killed when the slavers attacked while trying to defend his family. There she spent the following 5 years of her life which would stay with her forever.

Thankfully for her, a miracle appeared one day. Draque and his crew had been hired by the Mistral government to hunt down and capture-or-kill that group of slavers, who had been causing too much trouble recently. The slavers were found, and Draque's crew fought them, having the upper hand. During the fight, Draque noticed the slavers, and ordered part of his crew to release them. Draque then saw Psittacines, and she inmediately attacked him fiercely, even getting to injure him, and apparently unlocking her Semblance, though it worked erratically. However, the hunger and pain she had were too much for her to handle, and she fell.

Draque took her to his ship after the battle, feeling sympathy for her, and gave her some food when she woke up. He explained what happened after she fell unconscious: While his crew captured some of the slavers and killed the rest, their leader was nowhere to be found. After she rested, he noticed in her eyes the desire for revenge, and after some thinking asked her to become part of her crew, something that she accepted right away, owing her life to him.

-Notes: Psittacines means Parrot.