Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20160331235054/@comment-26397825-20160412053414

Last, but certainly not least.

Hookshothotshot with Blaize Cerrubel.

1) Basic Info - 9 points Please see thiscomment about symbols. No physical trait either, or occupation. But you get a bonus point for a clever way of tying the three dogs from the story into her name.

2) Appearance - 23 points She’s an entire kilo underweight, and muscle weighs more than fat. Even if she’s lean, she’d still be within a healthy weight range simply because of the weight of her muscles. Nothing firey about her appearance, but you can tie the black of her hair to smoke or soot, so you’ll get half marks for that.

Just a t-shirt? Or is it a polo shirt? Short or long sleeves? And no shoes for her dance outfit? And you’ll get half marks for specifying she has no gadgets instead of just deleting the section entirely.

3) Characteristics - 28 points

Nice sweet backstory, though I’m curious about the disease and why Blaize wasn’t affected since she lived with her parents. And it’s nice to see that she had a good family after being adopted, and a look at people who may not exactly like the idea of sending kids off to fight Grimm.

Backstory total: 18 points

Good personality, really like it. Good detail, explains her very well.

Personality total - 10 points

4) Trivia - 2 points Mentioning of her adoptive parents would have been a good idea for the relationships part, since they are technically still her guardians. Also, perhaps Pheobe’s parents as well, since they put her up while she attended Sanctum.

5) Weapon - 9 points What stops the sword blade from bending as though she was reloading shotgun shells? Other than that, it’s a good weapon.

6) Semblance - 9 points Ahah. Very interesting semblance, I like the dust interactions.

7) Combat Info - 5 points Good landing strategy, making use of her semblance rather well. I had to check her height vs the height of the dogs, but she’s just short enough to ride a large dog without it being too awkward so that’s fine.

8) Civilian Extension - Ahah. Bonus points for fleshing out the rest of her relationships here, bring your trivia section up to 5 points, instead of only 2 points.

Overall total: 88 points

So, round off.

Phantomlink959 with 79 points

Whitennerdiest with 76 points

Maki Kuronami with 92 points

JokersWitch with 87 points

VedranTheII with 92 points

Arkantos95 with 91 points

Cyrania de Bergerac with 91 points

and Hookshothotshot with 88 points

Welll, it seems we have a tie between Maki and Vedran. And now we shall go into the tie break round: I will be grabbing both of your characters and both of your stories, and I will be doing a tally of how many direct references to your story I can find. We are being CinemaSins here. Please stand by.

(ThatOneGuy...I am literally running the tie breaker round right now. Please stand by.)