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And next up is VedranTheII with Capri Stairs

1) Basic Info - 9 points

A...black coin...made out of three pieces that form a T shaped ridge….I am confused. I don’t know how to picture this in my head. And, ack! Hunter instead of Huntsman/Huntress! Boo.

2) Appearance - 18 points

Er...I don’t think you thought her height/weight through properly. She’s 8kg into the overweight range, which even an hourglass body and muscles wouldn’t account for that much weight. Even just 5cm in height would put her only 4kg into the overweight range, which would be acceptable for the extra curves and muscles. As it is, she jiggles. A lot.

Is there a reason for her zippo, or does she just sorta carry it around?

3) Characteristics - 28 points

Pretty simple backstory, nothing too out of place or wrong with it but nothing exciting either. Personality is fun, and her traits are decent enough.

4) Trivia - 5 points +1 bonus point

Ahah! Emblem explanation, +1 point. Nice notes on the allusions too.

5) Weapon - 11 points

How does it fold itself into a flamethrower? Does it like, roll up around itself to create a nozzle that the dust is fired through? I’m confused as to how that part fits into the weapon. The bladed bracers make me think of Fox’s weapon, which sounds cool though.

6) Semblance - 14 points

Pretty standard gravity semblance, but you use it well enough. The Fire Dust interaction sounds pretty neat; I wonder what other types of dust would be like when combined with it. Maybe ball lightning for Lightning Dust?

7) Combat Info - 5 points

That all sounds good to me.

Total: 91 points