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Next up is WC-83 with Shadow Enlit.

1) Basic info: 6

I really just do not like the name, it seems lazy and the making up of enlit when various other options from proper languages exist rubs me the wrong way.

2) Appearance: 15

What you have here is a good base, but the lack of an outfit outside of the armor lost you points. I'd also like to know what he has on his banner.

On an unrelated note, they call them Marks in Destiny.

3) Characteristics: 23

I like the nod to Icewind Dale, a large chunk of my childhood was spent playing that and Baldur's Gate. I would have liked a bit more detail to his tale but it's enough to give me an idea of what he's like.

Personality wise and likes and dislikes wise is where you really shine in this section, you give him feelings and emotions for me to relate to and show an evolution in the way he thinks about the world as life goes on. Incorporating more of that feeling of your writing into his backstory would go a long way.

4) Trivia: 4

I would have liked to see a few more notable relationships here, other than that everything is solid.

Don't be too discouraged, with a little bit of polish on the name and backstory he'd be a very strong character!

I)Weapon: 14

I love the incorporation of the various options the Fighter class has here, makes for a very versatile weapon. One point off just for not listing how many shots he can get off before reloading.

II) Semblance: 15

I like the semblance a lot, even if its niche and not going to come up often. Gaining a moment of clarity in battle can turn the tides of a war. Also reminds me a bit of the Bravery class feature that Fighters in Pathfinder have.

III) Combat info: 4

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">I'll give you a pass on the landing strategy since he'd not attended an academy and may not have encountered a need for it. More power attack references please me. I'm not really a fan of him outright not using certain functions of his weapon, even if it is what a lot of fighters tend to do with their proficiencies >.>

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">I) Day to Day Life: 0

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">That brings your grand total up to 81! A valiant effort WC, I hope to see you further improve.