User blog comment:Umiishiyama/My new story/@comment-25555436-20150411131755/@comment-25555436-20150418180333

You want criticism? Alright.

Your grammar sucks. Use caps at the begining of sentences. And there are many words written wrong in that comment, not mentioning the lack of auxiliary verbs.

-Trying, not tryna.

-In case, not incase.

-You, not u.

-I'm, not im.

-Don't, not dont.

I certainly don't need a fanfic, if I did I would be at Fanfiction.net or Tumblr don't you think? Asking for criticism is alright, but like I said, non-Canon-related stuff here like fanfiction is often frowned upon.