Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20150301171157/@comment-25343309-20150312184734

Thanks

Phantom, I read your prologue and the only problem I've got is the fact that you repeated the opening speach scene of initiation three times, when two would have been enough, you could have had Rost thinking about the prospective partner he'd try to get while running through the forest, two repetitions of a scene are enough, three makes it clunky, unless there's some vital detail that each person saw that the others missed, and three repetitions are absolutely necessary to the plot, and don't worry about the changing POVs, I use that all the time, it helps to add detail and as long as you remember to make it clear through whose eyes the reader is seeing then it isn't confusing to most readers