Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20151020211700/@comment-27122289-20151026215215

This is the kind of input I needed as my head hasn't exactly been in the game for quite some time. By that I mean troubles with writing. Critical input is still good input as long as there is something to be said that enables for growth and ability to rework.

So...with that in mind I can work out something. Reason it took 5 days...I work for a living, can't spend more then a couple hours at best working on this. Plus the reasearch I put in to find something both suitable yet intriguing was also a massive pain. Rewarding and rather fun...but a pain nonetheless.

But from what I understand, I have a few things to tweak/rework/fix up:

-Cut the Fat: Eliminate unused sections if they are unused. Fair enough

-Establish take on Beacon Admittance. After some thought on it, you are right; as far as we know Ruby Rose has been the only student to enter Beacon a year early. This I can rework easily enough.

-Establish Current Year student: Again, that is spot on. I can add this in somewhere to give a better idea.

-Tribal tattoos; Needs narrative and backing. Probably kick it down a notch as well, it will be worked on when not at work.

-Team wise: I'll figure out something to add for this. Whether it is a reclutance to join or there are no openings, I should establish this within his backing.

-Get Phantom a coffee: I woke up literately an hour ago man, I need to wake up as badly as you do as I work soon lol though given your first response was 7 hours ago, you are more awake than I am.

Thanks for the input though you two, this does help me out to be able to better convey my OC to make it trim, proper, and interesting. I am at least happy to hear that the creativy aspect behind him has gone noticed so quite glad to hear I've found an interesting hook to him.