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Next is Anon's: Chloe Ione......Chloe Ione......don't know why, but it sounds weird when spoken aloud.

1)Basic Info:

-Huh, clever naming. Chloe comes from one of the names of Demeter. Ione comes from Io, who at the end of her tale arrived in egypt and became known as Demeter, who the egyptians called Isis. (Now, whether she was the actual goddess, or became the goddess, or was just known as her, it's not really known).

-Oh, she's an old lady....called, Fool...she must have made "more mistakes than any man and woman in this world" to get such a nickname. Unless you were aiming for Tarot, but in such case Fool is just an easy solution, it can apply to pretty much every Hunter. I'll keep her nickname in mind. (Total points: 10, but if the nickname doesn't fit her it will be a 7) (Post review: Ok, it fits her a bit. Only a fool would try parkour with such weaponry).

2)Appearance:

-Damn, she's tall. I'm not sure just how heavy "260lbs" is, but sounds heavy (is she fat, by any chance?). According to the internet, that's barely more than 117Kg....she must be fat, definitely.

-Makes sense for her to be muscular. Considering her weaponry....

-Sounds like you were aiming for a soldier of sorts. Armor at the chest, with a green vest on top. Though there's so much green in her clothes...a green cuirass, with a green vest, and a pair of jeans that I'll assume are blue instead of green. With a tank top instead of the cuirass, she would look good...but when you put a green muscle cuirass with that green vest....the idea just gives me some nausea. (Total points: 9 pts).

3)Personality and Background:

-Loves animals, makes excuses often, and doesn't think much of the future.....that's all? Seriously? Those 3 things that barely take more than 1 line of text? I'm dissapointed (4 pts).

-So her sister is named Daphne, like that nymph that was going to be raped and saved herself by becoming a tree? I think you were trying too hard for "Nature", Anon...

-"Fiery Uranium Core Kopis"......Wait, you're telling me she sold Uranium to both sides of a war? I find that hard to believe, considering that, being Uranium, I'm sure that if someone tries to get Uranium, it would be the government itself, from itself or a corp that works for said government, instead of having to buy it from a third party. Especially if that government is Atlas.

Yes, I'm aware many of those resources are obtained and sold by different corporations, but these tend to be the ones that work for the government, not simple Third Parties. I'm also not sure what "Kopis" means. Sounds greek, but don't know what it is. (Le goes to translator)...it means...manuscript, in indonesian apparently. "Fiery Uranium Core Manuscripts"....what? (Le goes back again) oh wait, it's just a sword.

-Based on the rest of the tale, she apparently made weapons using Uranium + Burn Dust....cool, but the radiation...would actually explain her moment of stupidity that got her killed. But definitely makes me wonder how did the Faunus win?

-So Daphne got herself killed trying to get Dust like if she was fucking Ezio. Conveniently, she had a will and a fake transcript that allowed Chloe to become a Hunter...and...that is all.

-...Wait, so she's a low-ranking Hunter, at 45 years? ...I feel like her sister is displeased.

You really didn't focus on this, did you? Put more effort into it man! (8 pts).

4)Combat Info. Hopefully, you put more effort here to compensate......4 weapons. How boy...

-The kopis, a radioactive flaming sword....ignoring the risk to the user from the radiation, where do the flames come from? I mean, I get it, Dust allows one to create flames and such out of their ass, but they have to be activated, and they only last as long as the Dust keeps providing the energy (I seriously doubt they last forever, otherwise Weiss wouldn't need so much Dust of the same kind). But with that weapon, it sounds like there is no Dust there to start with. I can see Fire Dust being used to forge weapons like that like a blacksmith would, but I doubt that they would give you a permanent flaming sword.

Also, are you telling me she carries that flaming sword all the time on her back/hips? While wearing a cuirass/jeans? Damn, I feel sorry for her.

-So...somehow, her sister, someone who apparently was not even rich, just a normal blacksmith, was not just able to make radioactive flaming swords, but also sheaths that convert the radiation into energy just like that, or even allow one to fire lasers with it?

-Wait, so they also cause nuclear explosions in a range of 50ft, leaving radiation in a range of 100ft? Remind me again how the fuck are the Faunus still alive at this point?

....Wait, that's the only weapon you're describing? I thought you were going to describe the spear too, and the sword (not the kopis). With all this, she sounds way too heavy for her own good. The sword's weight, plus the kopis's, the spear's (even retracted, it doesn't become lighter, just easier to wield and with a different weight distribution), and the shield's, the cuirass's, plus her own's.

Sounds very dangerous, and impractical. The variety of weapons gives her versatility, though. I feel sorry for her back, however. (Weapon(s): 3 pts).

-Now, the Semblance: ....So, she just creates a green mist, from which she can see things, and can teleport to said mist? And becomes dumber the more mist there is? ...Would help with her speed and agility issues, though you could have explained it more. Can she create mist only behind her, like Blake's clones? Or can she create it in a specific location away from her? (7 pts).

-You say the landing strategy she uses is Parkour...but I think you rushed this idea. She's wearing a cuirass, 2 swords of decent size, a spear, and a Hoplos shield (which are far from light and small). She sounds far too bulky and heavy for Parkour to be effective, she would have many problems trying to do Parkour, possibly even break her bee's knees trying. People that do Parkour choose to be light for a reason, at worst a jean, T-shirt and sneakers plus a pair of gloves. (1 pt)

5) Trivia:

-Yes, we know Daphne is her sister. You told us already. Despite being named for a nymph, you say she's based on Prometheus. Let's see, Promy gave fire to the humans, which led to civilizations, but also war and strife, and as a punishment for that, plus teaching humans how to trick the gods, was given a bird that eats his bowel every day and night while chained to a rock. Not nice when you're inmortal.

Prometheus means Foresight or Forethought. Sided with Zeus and after the Titans fell, he and his brother were given the task of populating the world. Epimetheus made the beasts and gave all of his creations to humankind, leaving Prometheus with nothing to give. As such, he stole the fire from Mount Olympus before doing the previously-mentioned-above. Freed by Hercules during his 12 labours.

I see a certain resemblance between Promy and Daphne there; Daphne using Fire Dust-imbuded swords and selling them. She tried to steal the fire, and was punished, in a more kid-friendly way.

-So Chloe, named after Demeter and Io, is based on Epimetheus...."Hindsight", "After-thinker"...sounds like a reckless person that acts first, thinks later. You could have added that to her personality. "The being who represents nature, in the sense of materialism. According to who "thought" comes after the thoughtless bodies and their thoughtless motions". In other words, natural instincts. Which is exactly what her Semblance makes her do...funny. (+2 pts).

-Fun fact: Epimetheus had a daughter with Pandora. She was called Pyrrha.

Total score:10+9+4+8+3+7+1+2=44.

You....may already forget about winning, bro.