Talk:Haven's Fate/@comment-28171999-20180410174601/@comment-25936766-20180420011552

1) One does not need to be a writer to know when a scene was badly written. Just like how you don't need to be a master chef to know when food tastes bad.

2) People do provide better-written versions of different scenes. In some cases, it's so easy to see the multiple ways a scene could've been better written, that one can't help but end up wondering if Miles and Kerry really write the plot while drunk.

For example: Ruby yells at Yang to go to the elevator during the Battle of Haven after Blake shows up. Ruby has her weapon sheathed despite being in the middle of a fight. Merc and Em never do anything before Yang starts to run. Emerald throws herself stupidly to try to stop her, instead of catching her with her chain-sickles like she did with Ruby before.

That's one of the most criticized moments in all of the Battle of Haven, due to how freaking stupid MK had Emerald be just for the sake of it. There is no excuse, no logic, no reasoning for why Emerald would do that, instead of using her weapons. And the same goes for Ruby having her weapon sheathed as if there was no fighting whatsoever.

How it could've been better:

1) Have Emerald use her chain-sickles to catch Yang, but Yang dodges it. Emerald fails to catch her, but at least she doesn't look like a freaking idiot, while Yang looks cooler.

2) Have Emerald try to use her chain-sickles to catch Yang, but Ruby and/or Weiss interrupt her/deflect her weapons with attacks of their own. Emerald doesn't look like an idiot, while we get to see some actual Teamwork, something that was very lacking in the Battle of Haven.

It's muuuuch better than what we got in the show, it doesn't make Emerald look like a complete and utter moron just for the sake of the plot, the story is not altered in the slightest, it's cooler, and Yang can still get her "Merc moment" when she detaches her arm.

How long did it take me to think this? Less than 2 minutes. So when it comes to writing a scene like that, if I, who am not a "profesional writer", can do it, then MK have no excuse.

The only excuse would be the Animators being able to animate a scene like that (for comparison, the "Crater Face" joke in Vol.1 was a case of the animators failing to follow the writers's vision). And that scene wouldn't be harder to animate than most other things in Volume 5, so they don't have that excuse either.