User blog comment:Jjripper/RWBY Volume 1 Episode 1 Critique/@comment-25555436-20150605004009

...At first, I thought this was going to be good. But I see all this, and all I see is wasted time. [https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BPydLlQ4ols Your review was really dissapointing. I'm not happy.]

1-Considering other, more oddly-specific words she uses in some WoR episodes, Cortanarrator may not be as reliable as you think. For example, using words that refer to only humans, instead of words like "mankind" which refer to both humans and faunus. I believe that the narrator is racist against them, and while she gets most facts right, she may let her views on them slip at times.

Also, she may have just been using some "flowery", exagerated words at the intro. You know, to make it sound much more like a mother telling a fairy tale to her daughter. Not too different from what Port apparently does during his classes when speaking about his achievements, just more elegant.

2-Man, "born from dust". Again, flowery, exagerated wording. Don't take it literally. Born from dust can just mean "humankind started and developed on the earth" or something like that, which would be correct; while life started in the ocean, we only started resembling anything even remotely slightly similar to a human centuries later, after life reached the earth. Basically, humankind started on the earth.

Also, is it wrong for Monty to include an interesting introduction narration like it's normally done in hundreds of tales, which in case you didn't notice, are an inspiration for this whole show?

3-Yeaaaah, Junior's mooks really looked quite menacing that day, and in the Yellow Trailer.

4-I don't think being dismissive and condescending means one doesn't really value other people's lives (otherwise, I would likely be a serial killer by now). Though he having no second thoughts at all with trying to kill a little girl do show us he doesn't.

5-Well, It's possible that at that moment Roman thought these idiots could at least do something. But then he found out why they were so cheap to buy.

6-Crescent Rose is only effective because Ruby has trained to specifically be able to use it, and thanks to Aura, which likely not just protects, but increases one's physical potentials, to the point that one can become "more than just a man" with enough training and effort. If she lacked both of those things, she would be breaking her arm all the time.

7-Ruby is...not the brightest banana in the bunch, remember? At least back then, she charged when she shouldn't, and didn't when she should, against more noticeable enemies. For example, the Deathstalker.

8-Sigh....you seriously need to have more creativity and theorize about things. Remember: 1)We never saw a Purple Dust back then, doesn't mean there isn't any in Remnant. 2)Could also be Glynda's Semblance if Telekinesis is not it (and in such case it can be explained in another way). 3)Could be multiple Dust combined to simulate a shield, which isn't too different from what Weiss and apparently Neo have done in Vol.2. There is no magic in RWBY, only Dust, Aura and Semblance, which even if it looks magical, is not magic. Got it memorized?

9-"Why does everything Glynda does look like it's done magically?": Because that's how Dust works when being used via one's Aura. Dust only holds elemental energy. Fire, Lightning, Wind, Ice/Water, Earth, probably more. The way it presents itself is up to the user. Weiss could make a big ice crystal because she wanted to use the Ice Dust like that. Glynda made a hailstorm because she wanted to use it like that. Got it memorized?

10-"Abusing a child"? ''Seriously? ''

SURE, let's let the profesionals encourage every single random teenager on the streets to try to fight against any armed criminal they find, no matter how dumb those kids are or how reckless such a thing would be. Dude, Glynda had every reason to be scolding Ruby. Suuure, she was able to fight back, but it still doesn't justify how foolish she was. She didn't deserve to be encouraged, she deserved to be scolded for it.

11-Considering what happened, and how Ruby was successful at stopping Roman from robbing the old man's store, she did do a good job. She may have not catched Roman, but she ruined his plan that day.

12-"Barbara is a pretty cool GUY"......W.H.A.T? Go fix that now, maddam.

13-Yang? Barely dressed? What? You call that barely dressed?



14-Furry? You think Faunus are furries? If you think that's a furry, look at ^. A Furry is an anthropomorphic animal, either a Starfox-like "animals that can stand in 2 legs" style, or "humanoids with animal faces and a body that looks identical to a human's but with much more fur/scales". The Faunus, however, are not Furries. They are just like a human with some small ,single animal trait somewhere. That doesn't make one a furry, ''Not. At. All.''

15-Are you bullshiting or really dumb? "Time of peace" doesn't mean "True, Absolute Peace Everywhere". It means there is no war at the moment, no revolution at the moment, no chaos and destruction of great scale at the moment, no massive amount of people dying of hunger or disease at the moment. There can be people protesting, there's always a complainer. And there can be crime here or there, there's always crime, it can't be deleted. But just because these 2 things are present it doesn't mean we are not in a time of peace. There is one, and just because X is complaining and Y is robbing a single store, it doesn't mean the time of peace has ended.

16-...You may probably be the 2nd, I see. "Victory is in a simple soul"=AURA. Soul. From which one can use a Semblance after enough training. The Grimm don't have that, they lack Souls, they lack Auras, and that's the reason the Hunters can fight effectively against the Grimm.

17-...You are doing a good job at pissing me off. How is Glynda showing Ozpin the footage from the cameras stupid? And he wasn't talking about Crescent Rose specifically, he was talking about the weapon. A Scythe is stupidly impractical, a Sniper Rifle would tear Ruby's arm with just 1 shot if she didn't have Aura due to the sheer recoil, combining those 2 gives you a very dangerous weapon, to both the user and the enemy.

And...finally, you finished this shit.

Alright, first thing I noticed was that this review was filled way too much with your personal opinion. To give a good review you need a more open mind, which you seriously lacked. All you needed to do to understand some things is use your damn head, think for a minute, theorize, look for reasonable possibilities and explanations, turn the damn table and see things from another perspective.

Plus, it's also very clear that most of the things you criticized, you criticized them only because you didn't like them, like Yang's clothes."Barely dressed"? Are you fucking blind? Sure, she's got too little clothing on her, better to use a longcoat with a full-body suit, a mask, a helmet and a turtle shell. Now she's not barely dressed! -__-

At first I thought you did this thing right, but the more I read it the more pissed off I got. Not because I disagreed with you, you did point out good things such as the "Show, Don't Tell" moments. But because of how simple-minded, opinion-based it was.

If I had to score this thing, I'd give it a 4 out of 10, and that's being merciful.