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Anyways, moving on to the next contestant.

Cyrania de Bergerac with Oria Ronan

1) Basic Info - 10 points Nice faunus trait. I like it. And Lungfish are vertebrates, which is the usual restriction we put on what animals can be faunus or not, so all is good.

2) Appearance - 27 points That is a very long skirt. I mean, it is possible to move in them, but they’re not exactly something you’d want to fight in. If you notice, everyone in the show has skirts above their knees, except in the case of asymmetrical skirts. And even then, it never reaches to their ankles. But I like all the various outfits. Pity you don’t have a gadget though; not even a waterproof watch or scroll.

3) Characteristics - 27 points

Really nice backstory, sweet and makes sense, though I’m not sure why she wants to find out about human culture. It’s not like humans and faunus have different cultures or anything. Perhaps a better thing she could be curious about is city-life and kingdom life, since she grew up outside the kingdoms and in a small village.

You introduce her teammates as Luke, Dolma and Liaden, which meant I had to go looking for the G part of GOLD. Perhaps just call Luke Godfrey in her backstory to avoid confusion.

Backstory total: 18 points

Personality is pretty good, though a note on how easy or hard it is to get her mad would help, as that is an important part of personalities.

Personality total: 9 points

4) Trivia - 5 points Goodness me, you’ve listed everyone important in her backstory perfectly. Well done.

Notes are good, and I knew that about the lungfish (it is why they have lung in the name >.>) but it’s a good disclaimer for those who didn’t know.

5) Weapon - 10 points Sorry, sorry. It’s just – that name is perfect. I love it. Good weapon, really nice way of making it multi-formed whilst not introducing parts that salt water would interfere with much.
 * Spirit breaks down laughing for two minutes.

6) Semblance - 9 points Huh. So basically she has a wingsuit…only it’s a semblance. I can dig it. Mix it with Wind Dust and she can create her own air currents. See my note down the bottom about dust.

7) Combat Info - 3 points Oh, her fighting style isn’t finished. The rest is good though.

Overall total: 91 points

Gosh darn it! If only you’d finished her fighting style, you would have won! This is a public service announcement to PLEASE REMEMBER TO FINISH YOUR CHARACTERS, AS NOT FINISHING COULD BE THE REASON WHY YOU DON’T WIN.

And now for my note about dust and her weapon, as I couldn't help myself. You really made my imagination work when you mentioned dust underwater. Ice, Wind, Steam and Fire Dust are my suggestions for the upgrades. Ice to turn the salt water into ice, duh, and ice travels rather well through water. Wind to create whirlpools underwater. Fire could create superhot pockets of water, boiling whatever’s inside for a sort while before the water gets dispersed or cooled due to the rest of the water, and steam because underwater volcanoes create steam blasts which work like normal anyway.