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1) Basic Info - 15 points. CNR itself is worth 5 of said points. Character Basis is worth 0 points, it's just there to tell me who the OC is based on and from there I start judging.

2) Appearance - 15 points. 5 of said points come from the Outfit.

3) Characteristics - 30 points overall. (Backstory is worth 20 points, Personality is worth 10 points, Likes/Dislikes are worth 0 but can lose a person up a few points each if they really don't fit, though I'm willing to give a few extra points if they help flesh out the OC).

4) Trivia - 5 points: Relationships are worth 5 points. Notes can be used to boost your score in other sections, but by themselves give no points.

5) Weapon - 10 points      6) Semblance - 10 points

7) Combat Info - 10 points Landing strategy is worth 3 points, Fighting Style is worth 4 points. Class/Position is worth 3.

Alright, let's begin. First is Phantomlink's George Pavlov

-1) Basic Info: 14/15, I confirmed for myself the CNR about a week ago, it works for me. Interesting Faunus trait choice. Sloth Bear Ears....feels weird.

-2) Appearance: 15/15, my god he's a titan. The outfits seems rather....simple, though. Kinda the classical "Hunter" clothing. But I get the intention: To evoke the imagery of a bear.

-3) Characteristics: Backstory 13/20, let me rectify what I said: He's a sovietic Titan. His father just.....collapsed one day, all of a sudden, even though he seemed perfectly healthy? I can hardly believe that. I could've understood if it was caused by exhaustion from overwork, or if he got killed in a WF attack, or some disease, but "perfectly-healthy guy collapses and dies for the sake of plot" hurts my willing suspension of disbelief. The rest seems mostly okay, nothing outstanding enough to point out, except for some liberties here and there, such as the "granted entry to the Vytal Tournament". Given that ABRN managed to enter, despite only having 1 truly-good member, the rest being mediocre-to-useless, I feel it's not a matter of being granted entry, but rather any official team can join if they want.

And finally, given his love's name, I would felt it more fitting for him to find him in that tribe he spent a full decade with. I don't mind at all that he's gay, actually would wish to see it more often, though the sudden-ness at which this is introduced makes it feel......thrown in. "Gay for the sake of being gay".

Personality: 10/10 Badass Winnie Pooh.

Likes/Dislikes: +2, liking how it fleshes him out somewhat, but feel it also makes him feel a bit more....stereotypical. And I expected him to like Honey, given how Sloth Bears are known for not just eating, but being very fond of Honey.

-4) Trivia: 2/5, to be honest, the relationships left me rather dissapointed. There was nothing about the father. Would've been nice to flesh out his relationship with Umuthi too, which was lacking in the background.

-5) Weapon: 9/10, Mmm....I like the weapon itself, makes him look less like an stereotypical hunter.....but I can't help but focus on the contradiction. You say in the design, that he named it for it's metal plating's honeycomb pattern.......but you also literally say it's name means Black Bear. It's something small, not world-breaking, but still, -1 point there.

-6) Semblance: 6/10, I give you a yellow carnation for the name. There's also the matter of general practicality: It basically makes his hair tough as hell for protection, which in itself is good, but there are 2 problems: 1) People don't really have much hair. You didn't say he was a hairy wookie so I assume he isn't. Even if it was woven together and all, it's just not enough space covered to be an effective shield anywhere besides his head. Earth Dust mitigates this, but still.

And 2) His clothes. They cover him from head to toe. Head included thanks to the Ushanka. Since his Semblance affects his hair, which is completely covered under that mountain of clothes, his Semblance then becomes effectively useless.

Given the way it reflects his personality, there were more practical alternatives available.

7) Combat Info: 8/10, Class and Fighting Style fits and works, but the Landing Strategy fails because of the points I made for the Semblance.

Total score: 14+15+13+10+2+2+9+6+8= 79