Talk:Pyrrha Nikos/History/@comment-33293221-20171006002931/@comment-33293221-20171007060432

I see your point. And we probably shouldn't have two paragraphs for the Remembrance scene.

Maybe something more like "Jaune trains to a video Pyrrha once recorded for him, swinging with forlorned efforts as he struggles to deal with loss." There's definitely a better word to use than "forlorned," but you get my point. That sentence can probably carry the weight of the two paragraphs.

I also condensed a few of Team RWBY's personality sections. They were eleven paragraphs each or so, and whichever ones I did I got down to four.