Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27447621-20160508230102/@comment-27966940-20160519035131

Blu3 Fir3 - V2.0 wrote: Just redo the character, Kirito. If you really, really, really want Sean to be an OC of yours, I would suggest you change his first name, so he isn't perceived as a self-insert; changing his Semblance to something that fits his personality; changing said personality to be far less perfect/edgy; and giving him a far less cliche backstory (It's an overdone concept nowadays). His physiology is also unattainably perfect for most people, so try toning that down, and making him into a more normal type of guy that people can actually relate to. Most importantly of all, do not be discouraged by what people are saying here - we're all trying to help you here, and the advice you're getting here is exactly what you as a writer need right now to improve. I'd say his semblance fits his pesonality pretty well. And whay would I need to change his name? That ISN'T my ACTUAL name, ya know. That being said, I'll use the advise you've given me to the best of my ability, and THANK you for being the first one to give me a message that I didn't imediatly percieve as blatently douchey. Thanks alot. :)