Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24994749-20160215224136/@comment-24994749-20160216201815

@Jeffrey

I think the "GrimmSlayers" and "AbyssWalker" could just be written as separate words.

Maybe you should develop a bit more the part about how each of them fell. I get Artorias being corrupted by the Abyss (though I think you could develop a bit more on what the Abyss is exactly, where it's supposed to be, etc) but I don't get to how it connects with the rests of the guard leaders.

Yeah, as @spirited said, spears are not used to slice things in half. Also, the detail of his guarding the king's daughter came outr feels kind of irrelevant? Like, it doesn't connect to the rest? She doesn't do anything it seems...

@Ahpolki

I like it. It reminded me to an horror movie that came out when I was in Primary School... Dreamcatcher, I think it was called.