Talk:Ozpin/Affiliation/@comment-5430952-20160920052121/@comment-24573226-20160920113254

@Alhazad That whole section is beginning to bug me. It just doesn't flow right, though I see it's put together chronologically. There seem to be two basic parts to it: he watches her, and he appears by her side with advice. The last paragraph would sort of combine the two. There's got to be a better way to put that together so it's not just a list of interactions...