Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171116191014/@comment-33722408-20171122070025

HookshotHotshot wrote:

Ask and ye shall recieve. Be warned, I'm kind of wordy sometimes.

First of all, if you're using this character for a story or something, the surname of "Black" may not be the best idea, because people might see that and think "Oh, so she's related to Mercury?" If you're not doing anything with this character, that surname should be fine.

Generally, it's a good idea to include at least a paragraph or two on the character's backstory, rather than just 2 sentences. What led her to becoming a volunteer soldier? Why is that phrase written on her glove, and who wrote it there? What happened to her real family? I think all these questions should really be answered. And even if there were no questions, a flushed-out backstory helps develop the character as a whole, at least in my experience.

To the first, I didn't even consider Mercury's last name, will adjust.

To the second, I wasn't sure how much to include. I'll include a summary of the bit I have written. Note that those questions are mostly answered in the complete backstory, just didn't want to make the post too long. Including the leadership thing.

To the emblem thing, It's the lack of blue that defines the shadow, both the shadow and the bow would be black, think negative space definition.

The weapon is due to the near soundlessness of a compound bow. She still knows how to use a rifle, but is more proficient with her bow. Initail training teaches basic skills, specific occupations would recieve different training in addition to that, and stealth is the focus in her training. Up close she carries seperate daggers, mainly due to the dificulty she had making the bow originally. She also carries a pistol for absolute stopping power at a short range.