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7thSalamander wrote:

1) Basic Info

Name: Midori Maanlig

CNR Explanation: Midori means Green in Japanese. Maanlig is South African for Moonlight. Pick a general area for the name and stick with it. If the first name is Asian, don’t go mixing it with a South African last name, that just makes it sound awkward. Even if you don’t go with Japanese for the last name, at least make it Asiatic in origin.

The canon characters don’t mix nationalities like this; even in the case of Ruby and Yang, where mixing would make sense since Summer has an English name and Taiyang has a Chinese name they instead have the girls use last names that suit their first names. It’s not Ruby Xiao Long or Yang Rose.

Her mother’s last name is Japanese, why didn’t you use it? It’d still have alliteration, but Midori Murasaki flows off the tongue a lot better than Midori Maanlig.

Species: Faunus What kind of Faunus is she?

Physical Traits: She has sharp serrated teeth. She’s got light green scales around her clavicle, the top of her back, and her knees and elbows that are usually hidden by her clothes. She can hold her breath longer than average. That’s more than one trait. Pick either the teeth or the scales, not both.

Outfit: She wears a black water cooled shirt under a long sleeved raspberry colored shirt with Teal Armguards. She wears Malachite pants and Fuchsia shin guards along with static Gray colored shoes. To hide her teeth she wears a Malachite scarf that she wraps around the bottom of her face and loosely over her neck. She has a yellow-brown backpack strapped holster for her weapon when not in use. Malachite and fuschia is a horrendous colour combination, and then you’re mixing teal and raspberry, as well as yellow-brown? Pick two complimentary colours, use one neutral colour to balance it out. And what’s a water cooled shirt?

Landing Strategy: Tuck and Roll! And go splat. Landing strategies are strategies for a reason; falling from excessive heights such as when they launch students at initiation is dangerous and would deplete her aura to dangerous levels upon landing.

She’s being launched off a cliff that makes (at minimum) three story tall trees look small. She’s not going to be able to just roll with the landing. Try thinking of a way to use the anchor for it, perhaps as a grapple?

Fighting Style: Powerful Head on attacks. I actually suggest against this. She has a chain on the anchor, a flail would be a much better use of the weight and range available to her. Powerful head on attacks would simply slow her down.