Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20150605221100/@comment-24993958-20150607102655

Commander Ghost wrote:

- On handedness, I recommend you use right tominant….the way you wrote it is confusing
 * Name: Akane Hayashi

- Mention the “certain things” that aggravate her otherwise her personality won’t make much sense.



- You wrote her status “Possibly deceased”, her occupation “Dead”…and none of that even remotely comes up in her backstory…huh…