Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20150826013454/@comment-26496056-20150827080841

VedranTheII wrote: Clarus Nox wrote: I was begining to think nobody was going to figure it out, is it too vague? Vagueness isn’t the problem, the problem is that you forgot to explain them, and as I’ve demonstrated, what I can find is differs from what you intend, so when writing a character do this:

Vayne Nite (sounds like vein, whose color varies from red to blue)

If that’s what you are going for the name’s fine since it links to his eyes…formerly. Sides, as far as name goes calling a kid Vayne is a better name than calling a white haired girl white in another language or a blond fellow yellow in another language. So yeah If those got a pass I think yours should as well.

In other news yes there is such a thing as to much info when concerning a backstory, you didn’t put the age he learned how to walk in there for that very reason. The backstory is there to give us a rough sketch of his character and as such, should be devoid of things that have had little to no impact on the character itself.

You mentioning his former weapon is fine as it ties in to him having to make a new one. You mentioning his former love interest was a fox faunus is fine since it links to his likes. You mentioning one of them lives is fine since it can be a plot point. You mentioning the weapons of 3 of his teammates is not fine unless he got the idea of the knives from one of those designs, neither are their personalities since that can go…in their own character sheet as opposed to being crammed into this one. If you want to mention the personalities that badly than move them to trivia, but a backstory is not a place for a full life backstory but for a short backstory. ok that helps alot