Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-30530552-20171101175001/@comment-30530552-20171130050832

Alright, here's Cyrania's submission: Elysia Kloris. I'll have Phantom's done by tomorrow, hopefully, that's enough time for theme brainstorming, whoever wins.

Basic Info - 10/10 - With the names combined, it’s “blissful green.” Elysia comes from Elysium, effectively Greek Paradise, so I suppose white could work there, but you failed to mention it. I’m also curious as to what this bundle of leaves looks like - is it a certain type of leaves? Are any dispersed from it? Overall, solid, but a couple minor details I’d have liked for that. (EDIT: You explain her first name more later on.) 

Appearance - 20/20 - You really nailed this section, and I’m also curious as to where she received her scar. I hope you explain that later. (EDIT: Sadly, no.)   Backstory & Characteristics - 24/30 -  Trivia - 4/5 -
 * Neat location, but where is White Beach located? Sanus? Anima?
 * I think I found CNR explanations for the parents and her brother- William has potential royalty associations but it’s stretched pretty thin, Vossia either refers to a genus of grass plants or a genus containing a mantis-like insect. Vaucherio seems to be a corruption of Vaucheria, <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> a genus of yellow-green algae.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Momma’s reaction is reasonable, but I find the prospect of them clinging there for hours on end (unless “hours” meant just 2) a bit unreasonable unless there was a tiny flat section they could huddle on for safety.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">And then we see the first influences on her becoming a Huntress-in-training. Cool.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">The idea she’s stronger than the other kids from her active lifestyle seems reasonable.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">This meeting with Shasta all well and good, but I’m wondering: what kind of Faunus is he? (EDIT: You explain this later on.)
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Wait, wouldn’t it be darker in the library? Is it that you mean unnatural lighting hurts his eyes? (EDIT: <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">OH <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">, okay...so he’d go under a tree while she’d read in the sun. Gotcha.)
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Riley seems like a bitch, but I bet there are reasons for it.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">So, is there any explanation as to why they randomly assaulted men guarding a door? Why was Riley going there in the first place? And how can you “peacefully” take someone out? Did you mean <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">gently? <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> If you did, it would’ve worked much better contextually, because current wording has me confused.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">That was a very underwhelming ending.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Characteristics - All seem relatively consistent. Never heard the expression “bright-eyed and bushy-tailed” used before, but given it’s meaning it makes sense.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">As a first name, in my research, Riley as a surname has also meant “rye clearing” in old English, with fields of rye typically being golden, which lines up well.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Thank you for clearing up Shasta’s Faunus type, still wish I had seen it when he was first introduced.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Riley’s hang-ups are still unexplained, so you still lose points in the backstory category above. This section is often a good way to explain important aspects of other characters, so I’m docking a point for that, but outside of that, it’s good.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Oh, so that’s where Elysia’s first name CNR explanation comes from - her animal allusion. I wish you’d mentioned that up top, but at least I know now.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Weapon - 15/15 - All’s good here, from what I can see.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Semblance - 6/15 - I have numerous questions and issues.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">How long would it take for someone who lost their Aura completely and just got it back up and running (less than 1%, I’d presume) to recharge under the best lighting conditions?
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Is there a specific amount of time she has to spend in the light before the effect begins? And by extension, does moving out of the light mean the effect stops working at that intensity immediately?
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">The biggest issue I see here is the concept is that--assuming that Aura is spent or taxed through Semblance--you’re essentially spending Aura to save Aura, which seems a bit ineffective.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">The idea is nice, and it certainly reflects the choice of animal, but overall it just doesn’t really work power-wise, in my eyes. <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Combat Info - 5/5 - All seems good here. <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Civilian Section (optional:) - +1 Recovery Point

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">10+20+24+4+15+6+5+1

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Total: 85 points.