Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20180128214516/@comment-27447621-20180221024452

Phantomlink959 wrote: Our fourth contestant is HookshotHotshot with Leah Glynn.

3) Characteristics

Background:

What, exactly, was Collis impressed by? Leah’s sheer dumb luck in not getting herself killed playing with explosives? Because she obviously wasn’t showing any sort of skill which a teacher would find unbelievable; just fucking around with some spare bits of Dust and got lucky.

I could accept her being a prodigy with Dust manipulation, IF she was only able to do it after starting her training; because direct manipulation of Dust very specifically requires Aura. Without having Aura skills to control it, Dust is effectively elementalized explosives.

Relationships:

Who are Rowan and Chryssa? Characters not even given passing mention in backstory ARE a bad thing. I skimmed a wiki page about Nino, looks like you took a few cues from the character but didn’t overuse her allusion.

Score: 4/5

4) Huntsmen stuff: Weapon:

I don’t see why you couldn’t just give her a Dust channeling dagger… I said distributed the points for this category between background and fighting style, but looking at the character I really feel like you would have been better served giving her a Dust-based weapon like Myrtenaster; or, heck, even something like Leo’s shield since she focuses on Dust spells and doesn’t rely on her Semblance.

Score: 15/15

Combat info:

Boring, not very informative, not what I meant when I said put extra effort into combat info to compensate for lack of weapon, as there’s barely anything here at all. I'll lead by saying my original two ideas (Xander and Leo from Fire Emblem Conquest) fell through because the Fire Emblem Conquest team had no regard for continuity in Characters, especially in Xander's case. So top 3 really isn't bad. That said... I guess I'd figured Dust could be used without access to the person's Aura. I don't know why, but I did. Collis was impressed by the fact that a girl who hadn't trained with Dust at all up to that point had used a Dust Spell without channeling that Dust through anything, which is, I would assume, tricky to do. For the previous point, I had envisioned Leah scrounging flecks and chips no bigger than Bang Snaps that had stuck to clothes or shoes of the workers during refinement, but I guess it's my own fault for not specifying. Fair, but where is it mentioned that Dust manipulation requires Aura? Is it in the WOR on Dust? It's in the WOR about Dust, isn't it? Rowan and Chryssa are supposed to represent two characters that Nino in the original game can share a relationship with, the mage Erk and the Pegasus Knight Florina. I didn't mention them in the Backstory because I had fallen into a bad habit of just bringing up teammates from the Upper-level school in the Backstory as they're typically a character's main friend group. A stupid oversight on my part. Fair point. I guess I just really wanted to make a mage-based character a pure-Dust Mage. Creative decision that didn't go so well. If you don't mind my asking, what DID you want here to balance out the lack of weapon? You said mention why, and I did, but you told me to put more effort into both backstory and fighting style. What should have gone into Fighting Style?