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Hi guys, what are some tips for making better backstories in future OC posts? Based on what LiveandSound said here on Dolma, I can see that simplicity is perferable. But for that I was going for as many Dionysus references as possible. He was definately an illegitimate child in the myths. He was captured by pirates with the intent of selling into slavery. I then had to get him out of the pirates' clutches and into Hunter training somehow and I imagined Hunters could also act as FBI/CIA agents, therefore the secret raid that saved Dolma's life. I had a vineyard already in mind so he needed to get into a position to have a vineyard as well as push him towards Hunter training, therefore the adoption by the Hunters' team leader. Ariadne had been abandoned by Thesus when Dionysus fell in love and married her, having ten kids with her. Therefore she went through an emotional abadoning before marrying Dolma and having ten kids (I was meaning that Dolma had only used his sembalence on plants and fungi before, only because he was angry did he accidently discovered his ability to make people mad).

Then with his sembalence, in the myths, Dionysus majorly used his powers to help vines grow, make people mad, and turn people into animals. The turning people was definitely not going to work but the myths mostly had him turn people mad, more so even then grow grapes. I thought having his only power be the ability to make people mad would be too OP and not in line with what we had seen sembalences be. I thought then cell manipulation was the best way to have both the vines and the madness referenced with him rarely causing madness because Dolma refuses to do it and only accidently releases it when stressed, angry, fearful, or trapped in a corner and he feels misserable everytime after he does it. He can't reverse the process, he hates to see even his worse enemies in the madness state he creates, and he might accidently use it on someone he loves. I thought the emotional drain them from using the ability would make it non- OP but I guess I was wrong.

So what are your suggestions on how to do better background stories and sembalence, for starters how I could improve Dolma and what to think about for next time?