Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27447621-20160508230102/@comment-27425734-20160518041641

Just redo the character, Kirito. If you really, really, really want Sean to be an OC of yours, I would suggest you change his first name, so he isn't perceived as a self-insert; changing his Semblance to something that fits his personality; changing said personality to be far less perfect/edgy; and giving him a far less cliche backstory (It's an overdone concept nowadays). His physiology is also unattainably perfect for most people, so try toning that down, and making him into a more normal type of guy that people can actually relate to. Most importantly of all, do not be discouraged by what people are saying here - we're all trying to help you here, and the advice you're getting here is exactly what you as a writer need right now to improve.