Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20151206235105/@comment-26397825-20151230104927

And now for Maki's character, Azar Mirza Cortez II

1) 10 points Nice name, it's very poetic. And I see what you did there with his team name.

2) 29 points You missed his aura colour, though I'm assuming it's supposed to be yellow because of the sun effect. Nice description of his looks though, I can easily picture him.

3) 30 points I like his backstory. I really like his backstory. It's short, sweet, to the point and describes each stage of his life without skimping on details or waxing on too long. His motivations are explained well, and his personality is reflected well throughout the entire backstory, and it all ties together nicely.

4) 5 points Nice to see some relationships and how he views his parents, though a mention of his former teammates or the infamous superior he doesn't like would have been nice. However, you more than made up for any points you lost due to how nicely you tied the inspiration into the character.

5) 9 points Ooooh. Nice weapon. I like it. Also, the note about Myrtenaster helps me visualize it a lot better. My only question is does it have a stabilizing handle for grenade shots, or does he hold it with one hand on the handle and one hand on the grenade magazine or retracted blade itself?

6) 9 points It's a variation on dominate mind then? I do like that the elemental effects kind of negate the psychic effects. Question; does it make them follow his commands like an Imperius spell, or does it just generate a fear effect? I’m not as familiar with Haki, so I don’t know the effects that well, so the lack of detail about that aspect kind of niggles at me.

7) 5 points Good description of his fighting styles in different situations, and I guess toughing it out for a landing strategy fits with his character well.

Total: 10 + 29 + 30 + 5 + 9 + 9 + 5 = 97 points

So, to summarise.

First place goes to Maki Kuronami with 97 points

Second place goes to VedranTheII with 89 points

Third place goes to Phantomlink959 with 75 points

Congratulations Maki, and good job to everyone else. Hope to see you all in the next contest. :)