Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171207232020/@comment-27447621-20180420030949

Bluewindbag wrote: 1) Basic Info

If this is a bad idea, let me know and I'll get rid of it.

Name: Redmond Rose-Pine Ok. I'm a little… let's say apprehensive about the fact that this seems on the surface to be little more than the result of a ship and potentially fodder for a Fanfiction. But getting into the rest of the character...

We don't know enough about the Silver Eyes yet. We don't know if it's hereditary or passes like the Maiden Powers do or it's a prophetic thing that only appears to one born under a convergence of some celestial bodies- we have no idea. I'd give a hard "no" to the Silver Eyes.

Backstory is pretty flat and tells us very little.

I can only barely see anything that would cause a Sherlock Holmes allusion to make sense. I see that you gave him a thirst to solve puzzles, but that's literally ALL I'm seeing. Sherlock Holmes is arrogant, distant, and prone to sulking if he's not engaged in something that interests him. Your character is smart enough, but compassionate and warm. It seems more like you forced the allusion to fit the character rather than building the character with the Allusion in mind.

And in another 180-degree turn, we have Crimson Slayer and Bloodsheet. Edgiest names I've seen in quite a while, and blatantly out of place. As for the weapons themselves, nothing too bad about them, but a retractable sword needs to be hollow, which will cause you some issues. The sword could be too light (meaning less force in the swing with the same speed) or it could cause durability issues or a host of other problems.

That Semblance description tells me absolutely nothing. Redmond can take down multiple enemies? Most characters who have participated in combat in the show have done that. That's nothing special.

And where is the assassination aspect coming from when you've got a Plasma Cannon? It doesn't fit with his personality either.