Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20160425022934/@comment-27888871-20160425054244

SpiritedDreaming wrote:

ThatOneGuyFromNISLTsCommentSection wrote:

There is no holding back on harshness while doing OC reviews,

EVERYTHING WRONG WITH CIARAN SAPPHIRON IN 1600 WORDS OR LESS

Team leader of Team CRBN

-Name: Ciaran Sapphiron

-CNR explanation: Ciaran is a Gaelic male given name meaning "little dark one" or "blacky", Sapphiron is the name of the blue dragon in WoW universe. The reflects his colour scheme of black and blue (midnight blue to be exact).

–I can certainly feel the dark and edgy here- +1 The name is not dark and edgy. It’s a pretty standard name; Sapphiron is derived from sapphire, Ciaran is a normal name. I have a cousin who’s name means little dark one and used to be a stripper and had some pretty messed up shit happen to her. Her name still isn’t that dark and edgy. It's actually rather cute.

-Symbol (Ciaran): A sword with an infinite symbol on the blade.

–Ripping off the infinity blade logo.- +1

-Symbol (Nero): A sword that pierces a flaming skull and three crosses underneath.

–As if we didn’t have enough dark and edgy- +1

-Also, only one symbol per person.- +1 There’s no rule about having one symbol per person. Jaune has two; his family symbol and his personal symbol.

-Handedness: Right, Ambidextrous

–It can’t be right AND ambidextrous, make up your goddamn mind- +1 He means he’s naturally right handed, but he’s learnt ambidexterity. It’s a thing almost everyone in RWBY learns.

Jaune Arc: He believes Jaune has good potential and voices out his disagreement to the statement that he is weak.

–I thought you said he hated shields, And apparently he has an extremely low bar for what to consider weak.- +1 What the hell does hating shields have to do with thinking Jaune has potential?

II) Semblance

-Name: Spectre

-Short Description: Summons a spectral avatar that assist the user in combat.

-How?- +1 Don’t comment on the semblance. It’s already been discussed in the semblance thread. Also, how do you think a spectral avatar assists someone in combat? By attacking his enemies, duh.

Sin Count: 68

Sentence: Johnny Griffon the Nevermore Your sentence after doing this when you yourself have never submitted a character: Seriously, piss off.

I don’t mean to be rude, but you cannot judge him. You point out stuff that you don’t know enough about and you nitpick on the smallest things such as expanding on Ozpin’s relationship with him in the expanded relationships section. And bonus sins for grammar mistakes is just petty. You’ve never submitted a character. All you come off as is just a little brat.

You did not have to. You just decided to.

@Arkantos

Nah, I think if it's part of their semblance it's fine. I mean, Faunus characters can have sense boosting semblances too, even if they get a natural sense boost because of their trait. Spirit, this was supposed to be a joke...kinda....