Board Thread:Speculation House/@comment-10390252-20141218201832/@comment-209421-20141219152131

To be honest, the new path is good. It's set up, people like the story, and I've had a few good comments in the few places where I put up the first chapter of the original next to the first of the new.

As for this story, no. The original prompt was the same - Yang still killed Jaune in a dueling accident. However, it wasn't an immediate kill, but more of a slower, wasting-kind of death: internal bleeding and organ damage that was so severe, his Aura couldn't cope. Two days after impact, he passed away, but by that point, Yang was already far beyond the walls, heading for anywhere that she could in order to drown her fear, grief and pain.

That's the concrete plan so far, goes up to about Chapter two/Chapter three, with the full reveal of Jaune's dying insistance not being fully shown until Chapter Five, when Yang listens to messages she thought were from Pyrrha on her Scroll. It's also in this point I introduce some of the five factions - the Council of Vale subverts a large group of Hunters away from Ozpin by blaming the accident on his teaching methods, which is simply an excuse to maneuver a way to fire him. These hunters are attracted by a bounty placed on Yang's head, and slowly people from other nations come. Also ties into a second subplot that the original prompt suggested - something that Jaune says pushes her into the red zone before he cuts her hair to send her into a full berzerker frenzy. This line, in the AU, lines up with something that was used in bullying Yang when she was younger, with the bully group joining team CRDL as my mascots for this group.

The teaching staff, as well as Yang's friends and a few of the other hunter teams, form the second faction, who have sworn to uphold Jaune's dying wishes of helping Yang through her grief, but first they have to find her. RWBY, NPR, SSSN and CVFY are key icons here.

The third faction is Torchwick, who was sprung from an Atlesian prison by Neo, in order to try to convert Yang to their point of view and make her one of his subordinates by playing off her grief and open emotional state. Cinder has little to do with this, but does offer occasional assistance.

Fourth faction is Raven. Nobody else, just Raven. She thinks she can find her daughter faster than the others, and intends to do just that.

Fifth faction is the Grimm, which remains an ever-present threat to Yang, especially since they're drawn to negative emotions.

Once I've got the first chapter up on my Google Docs, I can post it to be read. Hell, I can do it now, but I haven't got the duel between Jaune and Yang started yet.