Thread:SpiritedDreaming/@comment-24857712-20180712124300/@comment-26397825-20190920131028

No roasting. Your base concept is sound, you just need to learn how to execute it. You have a tendency to exaggerate and cartoonise traits of a character, making everything an extreme that they flop between rather than shifting naturally.

For example, you don't make characters who have mild irritation, where they're a bit snippy but still helpful and interact with others. You make characters who go ice cold immediately, straight into 'must kill' territory, even when it seems like a gross overreaction.

I've always been against the Psyche as a plane of existence within his mind that physically affects him because of his semblance. That's not going to change any time soon.