Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20160402201256/@comment-24993958-20160412091616

LucasVerBeek wrote: What's a nice way of putting this, if my characters are flat then most of the character's in this thread are flat...

I don’t recall ever saying your character is the flat one, it’s everybody else in his backstory I have a problem with. Nor do I appreciate you lashing out on every other submitted character ever just because someone doesn’t shower your character with praises in a thread dedicated for criticism and reviewing. If you came here looking only for praises, you’ll have better luck posting your oc on tumblr...on second thought scratch that, they’d probably eat you alive for the way you written the 2 female leads of the character.

My point is that the actions of the side charatcers contradict with their past characterization (what little of it there is) and the only way to make the scenes work is through improbable timing to shoehorn the scenes in there.

In Daisy’s case, she is likely the one person out of the overwhelming majority of people that would attend initiation who would not only screw up saving Oro, but beat herself over it so hard she’d stick around with him for years. Ruby wouldn’t have, Pyrrha wouldn’t have, Nora wouldn’t have, anyone BUT Daisy wouldn’t have because they went there with a purpose, and that purpose is not to follow a conman in his endeavours because he got his foot cut off for acting reckless. This in itself wouldn’t be a problem, every character should be allowed a certain level of suspension of disbelief, and if Daisy was directly responsible for his injury, I would take back everything I just said about her, as she would have a reason to be so overwhelmingly guilty she’d stick with him for a year and presumably get attached to him.

But then that wouldn’t fix the mother problems. Ignoring the fact you are using headcanons for Ren and Nora as justification for foster homes not being a thing, while conveniently forgetting the village Ren really wanted to visit at the end of Volume 2. Ignoring that, you are also writing a mother that deep down cared enough about Oro not to ditch him (by the time he brought money she’d have had years to make that particular decision) but couldn’t drop the mask even when her son lost a leg? Either Oro just saw what he wanted to see (which you are hinting that he didn’t), or the mother did not in fact care for him enough to show affection...at which point raising him when he couldn’t make her money comes into question again.

So, like I said before, try and take better care of your side characters.