Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-6863431-20150103062825/@comment-25857155-20150217044109

"You weren't sick, weren't you?" Grammar check; maybe get someone to beta-read it next time.

It feels like an AU, but isn't written like one - rather confusing. Also, stalker Adam is creepy. =) You need a bit more detail in it to help it flow - you know, describe the environment or their facial expressions, small movements ("Her hand still rested next to her untouched cup of tea" kinda thing), and so on.  It just feels like there's not enough substance there.  But, maybe that is my reading preference.