Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-70.164.251.83-20180411173532/@comment-5430952-20180411201839

For one, I'd push the actual battle back to Volume 6, so it can be given the attention it needs instead of wholly concentrating on one part (the Raven-Cinder battle) at the expense of everything else. I'd use Volume 5 for training and worldbuilding of Mistral, something that was all but ignored in the story. And it could end with the Belladonnas defeating the White Fang in Menagerie, and preparing to advance on Haven in Volume 6. Then it would proceed so much better without having to do too much offscreen. Something like this anyway.