Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20161001000406/@comment-25936766-20161011114321

Phantomlink959 wrote:

1-Name does not fulfill CNR (Thunder being a sound): -1 point



2-Inconsistent units for height and weight: -1 point



3-No mention of shirt underneath the coat: -1 point

4-Setting up an ambush is WAY more advanced planning than Grimm are capable of: -1 point



5-Not sure the term “faint soul” works, as faint implies it is weak, while aura is a fairly powerful protective and offensive force: -1 point for unfitting terms



6-Not going to modify points for this, but why wasn’t Kerubiel the leader?

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">7-Nice choice in bird, though I feel like a raven would have been a much better fit (for obvious reasons): +1

<span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">8-Why did this not get put alongside the character in his relationships, when you did so for all of the others?: no change

<span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">9-Reasonable that a folded up spear isn’t great for stabbing, but the weight doesn’t seem like it should really be any more of an issue in storage than it is in active form: +1 point for logic

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">11-How exactly would the earth dust improve defensive effectiveness?: -1 point for lack of information

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">13-A ranseur is actually great at stabbing ...

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">14-The sound caused by firearms and artillery is caused mostly by the powder exploding pretty violently and creating a pressure wave, something that wouldn’t happen with a gravity spike.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">15-If you explained it here, why did you also put that huge note in the character bio?: no change

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">16-That description is most definitely NOT short: -1 point

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:14.666666666666666px;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:normal;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;">18-Why did it start taking a different form? Also, not sure how a fractal cube qualifies as angelic in any way whatsoever: -1 point

1-Excuse me?! Thunder is universally associated with Lightning. It most definitely does fit CNR.

2-Inconsistent.....how?

3-Because he doesn't wear one underneath :P

4-So you say, so you say.....

5-Faint: Not clearly seen, heard, tasted, felt, etc. According to the dictionary. So tell me how does it not work, given their emphasis on not attracting attention?

6-Why wasn't Weiss made the leader? Why wasn't Dove made the leader?

7-I thought about it, and about using a black dove, but because of the Nevermore part, I felt a parrot would work more. Because it would be far less believable if this bird that can't speak suddenly started speaking.

8-The Halphas part? Description was too long. The rest were 1.5 lines long at most, Halphas was about 3.

9-One of the key advantages of small weapons over bigger weapons, is that they are light. Which facilitates their use and makes it easier to perform quick attacks with them. In it's inactive form, Barchiel would be far too heavy for that, as it's both the blade's weight and the pole's entire weight concentrated. Storage is simple, but wielding it wouldn't be as normally practical.

10-I always get confused over what must go where in that template. You should really clarify.

11-I don't know, how would a bunch of Hard Rocks and Stones improve durability?

12-I thought I pointed that out in the personality section. He wanted to make it like an Abus Gun, a portable howitzer, but the weight that caused made the weapon too impractically heavy, so he was forced to take a lighter option.

13-The Wikipedia page said the spearing function was apparent yet not always effective against armor of great protection. I took this as meaning it wasn't as good at spearing as other spear weapons.

14-Have you ever heard the term Sonic Boom?

15-Good point.

16-Here's the thing: With a forcibly-short description you cannot effectively describe in detail the Semblance in question. So I do this: First paragraph, 1-2.5 lines long, that's the short description. The rest is just description.

17-Must every Semblance have a sound effect? If so, remind me when this was said?

18-It was just a name, being a cube-of-cubes is irrelevant. As for the taking another form part: Wasn't it generally agreed that if a person's personality changes drastically-enough, their Semblance would change in some relatively-minor way?