Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20160113034906/@comment-24993958-20160113095630

Malcolm Neill wrote: Name: Braun Garu

 ...But this all changed when his brother who had saved him was murdered as a Grimm...His high intellgence and grades got him into Beacon Acadmey.

... He is extremely cunning and intellgent ...-

 ...Sister - His sister is the opposite of him in pretty much everywhere. Extremely bubbly and hyperactive while Braun claims that his sister is just an annoyance he still cares about her very much despite not really liking annoying pepole. ..

... The Colour of Buugeng Magica is Black and White Striped. Buugeng Magica also contains cirlcer  holes it. When in its sheathed form the blades fold in and is placed in Braun's bag...

...Having found his weapon in an ancient temple he has studied anicent texts he found in the temple using a translation and has devloped his own fighting style based around supporting his team mates through motions. After prforming certain motions which many feel looks like dancing he can support his own teamate through these motions such as buffing an allies attack,defense,speed , The Staff has been modifed by a freind of Braun to include a dust amplifer which allows his offense attacks to do more damage. While he can attack with the S Staff he prefers not do preffering to keep at a distance and buff his allies or throwing out offfense spells through the use of motions.

Ok first off…Microsoft word has an in built English spellcheck that I still fall back on occasionally. I highly recommend you use give it a go before posting…now on to the important problems:
 * Sister isn’t mentioned outside of trivia…this is kind of a big deal since the death of one of them left Braun devastated.
 * No mention on when he got the metal arm in the backstory so it literally feels like it came from nowhere.
 * The picture you gave of the weapon is not a staff by any stretch of the imagination, it’s a pinwheel or glaive, he doesn’t even use it to walk when it’s sheath so I have no idea why you called it a staff
 * You said the predictions from his semblance cannot be avoided, yet can be steered into a different direction…AKA they can be avoided
 * Artifact weapons are currently nonexistent within the context of the show, claiming he found one is just asking for canon to disprove you
 * You claim he isn’t a standard caster that doesn’t cast spells, yet later said he can cast spells…I get you were trying to say he doesn’t cast them normally but the wording is confusing