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Second up: Acciaio Tempesta by Maki Kuronami

1)       Basic Info: 16/20 points. A better name for the team might have been AERO, which implies air and is a shade of blue. What colour is her aura though? You don’t say. Tattos go in physical traits, but I love the symbolism behind it. Though, she has tiger strips on her back. Wouldn’t that interfere with the tattoo design? You lost a point for the ‘Dragon of Tempesta’ nickname, because I couldn’t find anywhere in the backstory that actually gave a reason for it. It seemed like something her father would have, not herself.

2)       Appearance: 19/20 points. Her colour scheme makes me think of storms, which fits her last name. Her height is very specific as well – I’m guessing you converted it from feet to cm? You lost a point for making no mention of shoes at all though, which sort of implies she runs around barefoot.

3)       Characteristics: 29/30 points. I like the symbolism in the background which ties in the inspiration rather nicely without making it seem overdone, and I like the mention of the revelation and everything changing her outlook on her family. Still no mention of her nickname though. At least her personality meshes very well.

4)       Weapon: 8/10 points. Nice nod to her design and inspiration, though I’m not sure how well a scimitar would actually work as a bayonet due to the shape. Wouldn’t the curve mean that it gets in the way of the barrel?

5)       Semblance: 7/10 points. How big can she make the dome if it is long range? Or is it just the one size, but she can get a pretty distant range from it? You don’t specify. Medium might have been a better range for this, saying it has a radius of about throwing distance which is still a decent size. Also, it’s dust-only, no effects outside of dust interaction. Hmm.

6)       Combat Info: 5/5 points.  Her fighting style fits her personality, and her landing strategy is the best she’s going to get.

7)       Trivia: 6/5 points. I like the strained relationships that work within the context of the backstory. Pity you don’t mention her team though. Also, really like the abstract dragon theme. Out of the box thinking in this context gives you +2 points.



Overall Total: 90/100

