Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27144409-20170705210718/@comment-25936766-20170706235020

Hunter4894 wrote: 1) Handedness: ambedextrice

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 2) Misc Traits: tapping fingers on a table



3) Skills: Green thumb

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4) Name: Ragnaroks Bane

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5) Semblance

Name:  Puppet teer

Short Description: It allows those of weakmind to be his slave temporarily and only one at a time

1) Is English your 3rd language or something? The whole character is filled with bad spelling and grammar. "Draginfly" instead of Dragonfly, "Lightling" instead of Lightning....

But what caught my eyes the most was that shit. "Ambedextrice"? It's Ambidextrous. "Am-bee-dex-tros". Ambedextrice sounds like Am-beh-dex-tris.

And I assume you meant Ambidextrous, because "Ambidexterity" is even more different in both spelling and pronounciation.

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2) The hell are you trying to say?

3) The hell are you trying to say?

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4) The hell is the name supposed to mean? "Something that gives Ragnarok much distress"?

Did you do it for the sake of being "edgy"? Anyone who bothers to look up what Ragnarok and Bane mean will be confused by that name.

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5) First of all, "teer" is not a word. "Puppet Teer" is nonsensical.

Dividing it in 2 parts is not even necesary. "Puppeteer" is fine enough as it is, and is something that actually means something, and actually makes sense.

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Have you ever heard the phrase "K.I.S.S."? "Keep It Simple Stupid"? It's a good idea that you should follow.

For the names, for the backstory, for the weapons and Semblances. Try too hard to make things "Amaaaaazeeeng", and you'll only make something laughable, not impressive. Sticking to simpler things is more practical when you're starting out.