Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-10380701-20180401000752/@comment-10380701-20180423044743

Imma try to finish up all the judging today. That said, it's been a while since I've judged so I may be more or less lenient compared to back in the early days of the OC contests.

First up is Shiyilang and Lucia Marguerite.

1 - Basic Info: ' ' 10 points. Checks out.

2 - Appearance:  12  points.

-5 for not attempting to describe her outfit.

+2 extra points for the artwork. That's the highest amount of bonus I'll give for artwork btw, so as to not make it unfair for everyone else who can't draw.

Also, minor inconsistencies in the artwork and description. Her hair is described to have been tied with a blue ribbon, on the artwork it's white.

Additional -5 since you mentioned in the Trivia section that she no longer wears her armor, but also didn't describe what she wears casually.

3 - Characteristics: 25 points, backstory is okay-ish but I feel like you forced a little too much drama to poor Lucia.

Her repressed bloodlust also feels tacked in since it wasn't hinted/shown that she had that building up inside her over the years.

4 - Trivia: 4 points for the detailed relationships.

-1 since you forgot to add in something in Skills.

Retroactive reduction on the appearance section for failing to mention her non-combat outfit.

Huntsman Extension:

I - Weapon: 13 points. Nitpicking the classification since it's only three words instead of four. Otherwise looks good, just needs more description added into it.

II - Semblance: 11 points. Good in execution, but kinda falls short in the reflection of character since this particular trait of hers wasn't apparent until she started a clinic, specifically the desire to illuminate everything for others. >.>

III - Combat Info: 3 points. Mostly checks out, but no mention of how she handles teamwork.

Civilian Extension:

I - Day to Day Life: +5 points for expanding on Lucia's current occupation.

Final score tally is:  83 Points  She's a solid character, she just has some minor issues you should iron out. The lack of outfit description also damaged her scoring immensely. A picture helps, but that's not fair to the other participants.

Next up is PisceanWaterbender and Lamar Nereus

1 - Basic Info: 10 points. The water's fine. :D

2 - Appearance: 20 points. Looks good.

3 - Characteristics: 15 points.

The backstory's nice and all, but his personality feels like a different character since it's barely explored in the backstory at all. Like, it never came up in the pivotal moments like the saving the drowning crewmember, the Initiation or even the Vytal Festival. Like, reading his backstory alone doesn't imply any of his big insecurities outside of one mention prior to the Initiation.

Also, despite being mentioned by his parents, his religious viewpoint is not described at all in the personality section. Not even as a Misc trait. It sorta makes it kinda tacked in to tie with his basis.

4 - Trivia: 6 points.

Some of the points I mentioned in characteristics is addressed here so I'm distributing a point here instead.

Huntsman Extension:

I - Weapon: 14 points. Again, nitpicking on classification. Otherwise everything about the weapon works. Sometimes simple, but effective weapons work out over the overly complicated ones.

II - Semblance:  15  points. Really solid concept actually. I like semblances that look silly on the surface, but has strong applications.

III - Combat Info: 3 points. He basically fights like a Dark Souls character. No mention of how he handles teamwork though.

Civilian Extension:

I -  Day to Day Life: +5 points for expanding on Lamar's current occupation.

Final score tally is:  88 Points  Well-written overall, outside of minor nitpicks.

And last on the list is VedranTheII and Igni Tambour.

1 - Basic Info: 9 points. Name checks out. Pegboot is also a fun nickname to say. Sadly no mention of it in his backstory

2 - Appearance: 20 points. Looks good. That rocket leg is fun.

3 - Characteristics: 16 points.

Oof. I can tell you had a rough idea what you were doing for his backstory, but sorta rushed it out just to reach the deadline. He's not really fleshed out but the general idea of his character can be seen from both backstory and personality.

4 - Trivia: 4 points. Every trivia checks out, but that amazing roundabout pun nets you an extra point.

Sadly you kinda started falling apart around the Notes section.

Huntsman Extension:

I - Weapon: 15 points. The simplicity of its design is what makes it sorta cool for me, honestly. It's basically a better version of Roy Stallion's weapon.

II - Semblance: 15 points. Das deep. It's also a shadow-based semblance utilized in a way that doesn't make it too OP. Igni's own creativity is his limitation.

III - Combat Info: 5 points. That rocket leg still gets me. A defensive fighting style also suits him since his experience back then earned him a prosthetic, so now he focuses on countering rather than rushdown.

Final score tally is:  84 Points  I feel you could've done a bit better if you fleshed out his backstory. Other than that, his other aspects are well written.

Sadly, not alot of entries this month, so with only three participants, here's the overall result:

1st place: PisceanWaterbender and Lamar Nereus with 88 Points

2nd place: VedranTheII and Igni Tambour with 84 Points

3rd place: Shiyilang and Lucia Marguerite with 82 Points

With that, congratulations on Piscean for winning the contest! Have an adorable raven!