User blog comment:Jjripper/RWBY Volume 1 Episode 2 Critique/@comment-25555436-20150607235925

Ah, great. You again. -_- First things first, I'd like to thank you for inmediately telling people that this is not going to be a fair, objective, well-done review. That way, it's still a pretty shitty, badly-done review, but at least you warned us about what was coming.

Also, I've noticed a huge increase in walls in this "critique", compared to the previous one. The whole text is basically just 1 long paragraph of words, only made easier to read because the images take some space and separate the sentences a bit. This is bad, you see. N00bs and young people will get tired while reading it, and in the end you will get a TL;DR, ending up like an idiot no one cares to hear about. Try using that sweet Enter button at the right side of your keyboard next time, and if possible keep each paragraph at between 4 and 7 lines of length, at worst 8.

Now, let's see if you made a better job this time........huh, guess you did.

1-True, we don't really see any weapon carried by the shadow people, and Ruby's chibi-moment was just the tip of the iceberg. Personally, I think it was a moment of lazyness by the animation team. They could have just made Ruby put a pose of surprise while swinging her head around, at the very least. Warning people of RWBY's "show, don't tell" problems is also something I'm grateful about.

2-Want to know something funny? Miles and Kerry often drink and get drunk while writing the episodes (obviously not all the time, otherwise this would be a bigger mess). I heard someone say that Monty was more like a back-writer, just giving them the OK. I get it, his true skills are animation, not writing, but he really should have checked twice. You don't need to have good writing skills to know some things were written bad.

To make things worse, he said the 3 of them did an "anime study" before making RWBY. That means, they watched hundreds of shonen animes. Which are, as any person that has seen enough anime can tell you, among the ''most cliché. repetitive things ever made, with boring, predictable plots that develop the same way''. They did watch a few that are better than that, like FMA, but the majority was just that bad. This explains why RWBY is such a Cliché Storm.

3-Waaaait a minute. Where did you get that number? How do you know their YT channel alone makes that exact amount of money? I mean, you're not even giving an approximate, you're saying that's the exact number.

4-She didn't leave with just random males. She leaved with the YMCA people.



5-One thing though, is that in retrospective, the trailers didn't really show us much about their personalities. They showed some traits, but not the whole picture, especially with Ruby and Weiss.

Though I'm actually more surprised about the people's reactions to their real selves. Ruby was shown as cold and almost-emotionless, chilling somewhat, yet then people see the real Ruby Rose and at worst, some are annoyed. Most people didn't truly mind how the real RR was a complete inverse of what the R-Trailer showed us. And yet, Weiss, we didn't really see any part of her personality beyond a few things that are more like "up to the viewer to make their own conclusions". Then she shows to act somewhat bitchy (with a somewhat-good reason in the first case and some later), and practically everyone rages about it well until her Character Development arrives.

6- 2 things to point out at the scene between Blake and Weiss. 1) A student is a student. No matter how cruel their father supposedly is, everyone has the right to education. It's the same reason people like Cardin could get into Beacon. They may not be the nicest persons, or come from the nicest families, but they still have the right to attend school/college and receive education. Besides, Dust is important to the 4 kingdoms, and the SDC is the biggest company that exports it. Controversy or not, they all value highly the SDC for this very reason.

2)  Interesting about this is that we know Blake comes from the WF. She was practically raised there, in her own words. As such, all she knows about the subject, is what she has learned from her time with them. As such, all she said about the SDC must be taken with a grain of salt. Does the SDC really have controversial labor forces? Or is that what the WF has led her to believe? After all, everything you are told comes from someone's PoV, and as such is what they believe, not necesarily what is the hard truth.

7-It's true that from a certain perspective Jaune seems like the writers put more effort into him than the other characters...which may actually be true, I fear. I've been thinking, and some others too, that since Miles voices Jaune, he sees Jaune, consciously or subconsciously, as a Self-Insert of himself into the world of RWBY. As such, it's understandable that Miles would put more effort into Jaune than the others.

Probably a bit too much, considering he got a 4 episodes-long arc, when the rest of the characters got, at best, 2 episodes dedicated to them. To make things worse, Jaune's arcs were extremely cliché, uninteresting, and didn't contribute too much to the general plot more than make Jaune look not so much like a pussy. Hell, because of that, Yang got 0 episodes, she was basically just a secondary character with barely any presence in the Volume.

The fact that Jaune does seem to have some Shonen Protagonist Clichés, doesn't help. For example:1)Great hidden potential, despite being a total noob at the beginning compared to everyone else, 2) Gets one of the best-looking girls in the show, that is also much stronger than him, to fall in love almost inmediately (You know who I mean, right?). And 3) A very powerful/effective hidden ability (we were shown a glimpse of his Semblance in ep 14. It completely healed him, revitalized his energy, returned the damage and pain towards the attacker, and caused a very blinding light to appear briefly, which just by itself is very useful. I repeat, it was just a glimpse. Imagine it at it's full potential).

....Mmm....this review did seem better made than the last one. It did have bad parts though, such as almost the whole review being nothing but wall of text after wall of text, which does annoy others. However, the exact reason for why, I am not sure, as your reaction to the opinions of others about your first "critique" made it seem like you were the kind that doesn't listen to criticism, only praise.

It could be that you did listen and made a better job because of it. Or maybe it was the episode. I mean, this episode does have bigger, more noticeable flaws in general compared to Ep1, easier to notice and easier to bash. In other words, it was an "easier target". I'm just not sure if you made a better job because you got better, or because the episode was worse in general compared to the previous one. But in any case, you did make a better job in this one, which is what matters.