Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171207232020/@comment-26146765-20180129030016

HookshotHotshot wrote: Shiyilang wrote: Thanks.

That's probably what I get though. I never have good luck

Though even so, I'd like feedback.

[screams internally] If it makes you feel any better, I did something similar back in August: the theme was "Royalty", but I didn't know that at the time. Somebody (pretty sure it was Ray) posted an idea that made me think of a Crook and Flail weapon pair, and I posted them without realizing what the contest theme was, meaning I couldn't use those as weapons for a competitor.

Here's what I have in terms of feedback.

I'm curious about how she started her business while in Sanctum (buying materials etc.) and how well she actually fares in combat having ended her Combat Education early, but the backstory and personality look pretty good

How does she draw to activate spells? Does the tablet read the drawing and the Dust she's using and connect the dots from there? If, for example she draws a tornado and is using water Dust, would a Water Spout appear?

Also, besides being a neat reference to her theme as a designer and its use for powerful sneak attacks, I hope she's a great artist. It's hard to draw quickly with enough accuracy for a computer to know what you're drawing while also doing it in the middle of combat.

Hmm. That Semblance is a tad tricky. I suppose my first question would be "How does she know what she's enhancing?" Would she be able to enhance a complete stranger's Semblance if she didn't know what it does?

The rest of it looks like a really well developed character. Great job!

1.) While in Sanctum, she actually got scraps from her mother, and began sewing smaller garments, but as demand increased her business grew to the point she could actually buy fabric

2.) Pretty much. Off the battlefield, she spends time messing with the code of the thing to try and experiment with spells and ideas she has

3.) She has some pre-saved "shortcuts," for say a fire blast or an ice prison

4.) Her Semblance works on those she has bonded with, similar to Raven. With more practice, she could actively use it on anyone she feels positive emotions for. It was unlocked when she made her first best friend and during combat training realized her friend's Semblance was considerably more powerful.