Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20170101235836/@comment-26397825-20170117112029

So my three days off work turned into one day off work and two days of organising and setting up an entire basement as a granny flat for myself. On the plus side, I now have my own basement apartment. On the minus side, I haven't had time to get to judging until after work tonight.

But anyways, here's Phantom's character, Sangria Sangiovese

1) Basic Info - 10 points Dat nickname

2) Appearance - 19 points I now imagine him with an afro because you gave a colour but nothing even remotely suggesting a style. 3) Characteristics - 21 points

Accomplished cooper at the age of 12? Blacksmith kids were just learning how to swing the hammer and making small things like unsharpened knives and spoons at that age, why the hell is he an accomplished cooper already?

He lost everything? Despite the village playing host to a Huntsman with a civilian wife who wasn’t hurt in the fight against the Geist, and neither was the Huntsman? I can believe him losing his entire family, the majority of his childhood home, etc, but for the entire village to be gone except the Huntsman’s fiance and him is questionable. There should have been at least a few survivors if Sangria and Lara somehow survived without a scratch.

Not sure why he would have trouble enrolling in Atlas Academy simply because he’s not adopted by an Atlesian couple. They’re designed for people to be able to attend and protect humanity, they’re not really gonna reject someone or give a person hassles on the grounds of ‘you’re not from Atlas and you don’t have Atlesian parents’.

Consistency error; you have an entire paragraph at the end of the Vytal Festival fight that conflicts pretty much everything before, mostly stemming from Xanadu’s involvement as you said earlier that his aura was depleted by the bullet ricocheting off Sangria. Given the ending of it, it’s obviously the first rough draft of the fight.

Personality focuses more on his business attitude and how he runs things than his actual personality, so I’m left wanting to know more about him.

4) Trivia - 4 points

Still not understanding this legal technicalities part; if kids can enrol in a combat school and learn to fight at the age of 12, then Sangria can certainly decide that he doesn’t want to live in an orphanage and wants to migrate to Atlas with his rescuers who are happy to look after him. What government that promotes happy people to reduce the amount of Grimm attracted to their city is going to turn to the kid and say ‘no, you must go to an orphanage where you’ll be miserable instead’.

5) Weapons - N/A

6) Semblance - 12 points

Unfinished activation cue. He’s basically Colossus from the Xmen.

Ehhh, that reflection of personality doesn’t fit him, to be honest. It’s blacksmith focused, which he was taught about it as a kid but it isn’t his passion. His passion is cooking, his personality is strong willed and determined from what I can see, and he didn’t learn his semblance until after he left the blacksmithing portion of his life behind.

7) Combat Info - 9 points But what if he’s nowhere near anything that he can parkour off? Does he just go splat?

8) Day to Day Life - 7 points

He was only in the wine region until he was 12; kids at that age don’t take the time to continue to memorise something that no longer applies to them. And you don’t mention him picking it back up as a hobby later in life, leaving me to believe that somehow he became a wine connoiseur and remembers everything he would have been taught between the ages of 5 and 12, which are the ages that kids start actually paying attention to lessons they are being taught. And this is alongside the blacksmithing he was apparently taught and was good enough for his stuff to be used for proper barrels instead of still learning and making mistakes because his muscles are still developing.

Total: 82 points