Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-30530552-20170831211428/@comment-30530552-20170917205108

Up next is SYUTK with his submission, Rubicon Rivers.



Basics: 9/10 - It all checks out. Personally I had never learned about the significance of the Rubicon even when learning about Caesar x  amount of years ago, so I guess I learned something new today. His personal nickname also has lots of alternative meanings, which if I know you, was no accident by a long shot. Might include a screenshot of what I found later, if you care to see it. I’m hoping to see why he has the “Sardine” nickname in the Backstory or Relationships. Interesting Team Name choice.



Appearance: 14/20 - Checking on the  BMI scale, it classifies him as “underweight,” SYUTK. I even did it with the Metric units you provided for a more accurate look. He must have an extraordinarily good metabolism, since he would have to have close to 0 fat content to show that. Well that, or he’s skinny enough that he’s defined. Additionally, what’s his natural eye color, out of curiosity? What about his hair color? (I’m less inclined about the hair since that doesn’t matter as much to me, as it's something more easily changed). Given a few of his traits, I’m getting a Holden Caulfield vibe from him, which if that gets explored more, is quite fascinating. I’ll assume that bullet point is his true reason for wearing what he does. Mask raises a few questions, which I’m sure you’ll explain later on. EDIT (Mask): Not really. EDIT EDIT (Bullet Points): Yep, bullet points do further explanations.



Backstory + Characteristics: 27/30 - HA! The way you handled his version of events and the soul-crushing reality of the same situations was just awesome. His personality is also very clearly reflective of the sin of Pride, so that takes care of your allusion. One thing I'll mention is that you didn’t really describe the 2nd time he got arrested, since both of the “different times” sounded exactly the same, with minute wording changes. Unless you’re saying he got arrested both times for putting it on, in which case it’s fine, it just needed slightly clearer context. Until you clear that up, a few points lost.



<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Trivia: 4/5 - Do tell what “frusfration” is...I knew of frustration but not of that. The parody aspects and rest of the stuff checks out, though with some of the CNR I think links might’ve helped, since Google was being a prick to me today. I also question whether a Semblance such as Draca’s is actually viable, but right now it’s not relevant specifically to Rubicon, so only a slight ding.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Weapon: 13/15 - Dear God, this guy just doesn’t stop with his fibbery, huh? Well, in any case the weapon’s simple and semi-effective, you having addressed its issues, though me still going to say (inevitably) that he really shouldn’t keep using it if it’s so cumbersome. I do like how it’s supposed to reflect his parody of “Edgelordiness.” The name itself is also really cool.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Semblance: 13/15 - Very strange Semblance, but it’s certainly effective. That auditory cue though...must tear at his pride a little bit. Do the Tiers have a specific range time limits, or does it <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">only <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> depend on concentration and exposure time?

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Combat Info: 4/5 - Better landing strategy than WC’s, technically. Everything else looks good.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Day to Day Life (Optional): N/A - No point recovery.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">9+14+27+4+13+13+4(+0) = 84

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Total: 84 Points