Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20151020211700/@comment-26463535-20151026175234

Creative names and interesting story, however ... So far, Ruby is the only 15 year old to have entered Beacon. Why on Remnent did he get tribal tattos? If his father or grandfather was a tribal chieftian, it would make sense. But otherwise, full on tribal tattos seem exessive even if it was a sign of his rebellion. It seems like if he was still at Beacon he would be forced to join with another team somehow (he could be in the process of recieving a new team at the moment though). That might not apply if he's a fourth year student about to graduate. Stat and fighting style wise, he sounds more like a full or near graduate than someone with semesters left to go through. But Phantom would be the better judge of that. I can see by the age you gave that you're implying he's a fourth year student, but general practice here is to say what year they are in.

TL'DR: The creativity behind the names and basic storyline are great. However, some elements (such as his attending Beacon at the early age of 15 like Ruby) could be considered marty sueish. General practice is to say what year the OC is in. I get the impression of a almost graduated student, but Phantom would be the better judge of that, as well as your weapons, fighting style, and stats.