Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150630215852/@comment-25857155-20150708164322

Well, folks - IT IS TIME.

First one up is Phantom, with his OC, Oluja Bogdan.

Please note that I took a few liberties with the grading system on a couple characters.

1)  Basic Info: 18/20 – Only1 point for the name for creativity, but less-than-clear CNR.  Storms can evoke several colors.  Otherwise, no real issues.  Decent emblem.

2) Appearance: 18/20 – minus points for the outfits – well thought out, but not especially creative.  Good thought with the electrical resistance, but that’s about it.

3)  Characteristics: 26/35
 * Backstory – 14/20 - (This is where I start actually paying attention.)  Decent, brief, to the point – could use a bit more detail.  Why was he enrolled in combat school to begin with?  What about his family?  (Oh – I read the trivia about nobody close to him.  That’s depressing.  Depressing can be good though.)  Coworkers?  How is he in interactions with others?  Good to see the likes and dislikes, though.  I would mainly like to see more detail.  Personality, 12/15.

4) Combat Info: 10 /25
 * Weapon: 5/7.  I like it a lot, in fact – creative name, interesting idea – it would be nice to see an explanation as to WHY he does not miniaturize it, though.
 * Semblance: 4/12  His semblance is potentially game-breakingly OP in combination with his weapon.  You did not put a good limiter on it, as you did not describe the process very well.  Needs more detail on exactly what “overcharge and burn out” means.  Does it backfire and cause a discharge, or just make him tired?
 * Fighting Style: 1/6 - You did not describe his fighting style at all; you only said he prefers not to fight or kill.  Ok, that’s great, but you made him combat capable with no described style.
 * Landing Strat: Not included; points allocated elsewhere.

5) Trivia: No comments.

These things combined give Phantom's Oluja Bogdan a total score of 72/100.