Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20170201003940/@comment-30530552-20170410022023

A little bit of extra grammar would make the reading clearer, but at least I got the point. Interestign background, to say the least.

For her weapon...eh...maybe a real sniper scope could look that far, but so far our sniper shots in show have been within a relatively short distance, so maybe change that. Nothing saying it can't be, just.

On Semblance: That's not a reflection of personality, that's literally just her job. Something like "being perfectionist" or "wants to live up to her image" would work better in that sense. As for the goign blidn in one eye temporarily...how long is temporarily? Clarification would be nice.

For the Landing strategy, you could potentially work in the way Ruby used hers when jumping from Ironwood's ship with the pogo-sticking instead of just hoping for the best.

Keep trying Dude...already seeing some good effort from you.