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Third in the lists, SpiritedDreaming's Zapeci Braun.

1)  Basic Info: 19/20 Good name.  Interesting cult.  ‘’Very’’ interesting choice of Faunus.  Symbol is acceptable.  …. Minus two for no misc traits listed.  “Menagerie’s Braun” gets +1 back.

2) Appearance: 19/20 -  Kudos for putting both measurement types.  Minus one on the outfit for slight lack of detail.   (I just realized I have a habit – coincidental otherwise – of scoring Basic Info and Appearance the same.)

3)  Characteristics: 26/35 Oh boy, another long one.
 * Background (15/20) Intentionally moved to Menagerie – I thought most Faunus were forced there?  Also, no confirmation that Menagerie is still inhabited.  Minus two for being potentially non-canon (if AU, specify) with the several tons of Menagerie mentions throughout.  Ah – there’s a rub.  Good to see interaction between the two extremist groups.  Bad to see Fylfot being a part of the Paladin acquisition – wasn’t it Roman who acquired that for the Fang, after all?  If Roman dealt with Zapeci in that, mention it.  Minus 2.
 * Personality (11/15)  Fair enough.  I would like to see more details about how he interacts with others – quirks, and the like.  Good list of likes and dislikes, though disliking retreating and using weapons seem to go against one another to me.

4) Combat Info:11.5 /25 – minus one for organization.
 * Weapon: (3/5) Ok, not bad.  It might do to add some detail on the thing’s appearance, though.
 * Semblance: (3/10) Ehhh.  Fitting for the character, sure, but not very well detailed or thought out.  Minus points for it not really ‘’doing’’ anything at all.  It just… well, it does not sound much like a semblance.  (I would have given him a low-intensity hypnotism based on speech, personally – it sounds like that’s what you were going for, but you missed the mark a ways.)
 * Fighting Style: (3/5) Alright. Decent.  Boring, but acceptable, and good for the character.
 * Landing Strat: (2.5/5)  Not like there’s anything else he could do, I suppose.

5) Trivia: +1 - Plus one for extra details.  Good catch with the bit about deportation, especially.  Minus that same one for your reasons to pick a wombat for a character who is largely non-combatant. Plus the same one back for humor.

I won't lie, I was a bit biased toward this just because he was based on Hitler - it's one of the things I was hoping to see.

All of it combined gives SpiritedDreaming's Zapeci Braun a total score of 76.5/100.

Good showing so far, competitors.