Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25555436-20150320010432/@comment-24993958-20150323215552

Madninja324 wrote: so, is no one going to comment on my OC Team? They're finally complete, and I'd like people's opinions before actually using them On it, let me just ctrl+f and…found it…guess you liked the old format more…love the team name btw….Never considered makeup on my characters…got to remember that one… ok here goes

Cerise could use some explanation on her disease...and teling us how the dust “fixed” her would be nice, since otherwise it’s just a convenient plot bunny so you can have her injected with dust…I mean if I removed the disease and said she volunteered because she wanted to help people…absolutely nothing changes with the rest of her back-story… god I hope I’m not a hypocrite for saying that. Everything else looks fine.

Flavian’s kit seems kind of overloaded if he’s a first year student…scratch that his kit IS overloaded in every way, shape and form just to make him some sort of Sasuke v2.0 clone… god I’m not even sure where to start making cuts on his kit, I could probably make weapons for over 3 oc’s with the amount of stuff you put in…I recommend you take someone less overpowered to emulate from a show that didn’t jump so many sharks it caused a tornado and try again with the kit.

Also this is a minor gripe but did you HAVE to go with the mistreated hybrid route? This wouldn’t bother me so bad if his weapons didn’t leave a bad taste in my mouth…no, scratch that… stepped on some plot holes... If the bullies where that bad how the fuck did his parents not find out? The bulies obviously aim for the face often judging by your description...and of course you went with the selfless hero route that doesn’t harbor any hate for them at aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaalll…say if you are familiar with Naruto maybe you should consider rereading that part where he was confronting his inner demons that told him to take revenge on the village…and I’m not talking about the fox….oh look he saves a girl before she could be raped …of course he does…forget what I said this character is perfect, go write a self insert fic about him.

Emitt’s is…absolutely fine…great even…not over the top and logial backstory that ties well with him being a faunus, interesting semblance, simple yet efective weapon…I’m legitimately impressed, I wish I would have thought of him.

April…is also fine…you seem to have grasped a good balance on her semblance, not too limited not too broken, love the pixie aspect of her design that links to her everything…she needs a little more meat on her data, especialy compared to the rest of the team.

Overall… it’s 3 thunbs up and 1 down for me…but my god that one really ruin my mood.