Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20160319212213/@comment-25479664-20160320174003

VedranTheII wrote: A bit late on the money but Phantom, when DC called posting another oc immediately after his rude it was because he thought everyone would ignore his submission in favor of the latest one, which kind of happened…with that said.

DeletedContent wrote: -Name: Legere Nebulosus I’m with phantom on the part that naming an oc’s personality after their name is iffy…willing to let that slide on the technicality that it’s a family name so it’s not something parents had any control over...would have preferred if his hair was grey as opposed to black since black clouds are not a very common phrase I hear anymore but…eh, his appearance sort of links to the name, if barely. Get a better misc trait…people that don’t budge an inch while talking stand out a lot harder than one that does….imOfc.

Physically he’s kind of bland…dark eyes on dark hair just makes me think of Junior’s goons, and without the mask he would be one color change away from wearing the same outfit…also you haven’t fixed the bigger problems of the back-story.

How he lost his arm is unexplained, and the mentor now wasn’t mentioned until after he ambushed his entire team, making him come out of nowhere and not in a good way. Your character STILL got the drop on him AND the entire group he used to ambush him in the first place despite being injured and teamless, and this time he not only managed to do it without lethal force, but he somehow managed to cripple the mentor for life?...also you seem to be under the impression willingly permanently crippling someone won’t send you to jail? Who do you think you are, Nora?...sorry, no, you do not get to have him without any downtime in prison, in fact by all accounts he should stay there more since now the teacher can press charges.

Look, either admit your oc performed a criminal act, jail him, wait till he gets out and THEN decides to get a job, or have him be a runaway gun for hire…I at least don’t think you can have both, in Remnant or otherwise. Well the idea is that he was accused of excessive force and disbarred, but him raiding the hideout was technically part of the investigation (followign up on leads). Also, I may make his eyes green, though the black hair is staying (he's mediterranian, though dark gray may work out well, too). As I mentioned, soem of the backstory stuff is jsut a placeholder, so it is up for some serious change.