Thread:SpiritedDreaming/@comment-24857712-20150927024310/@comment-26397825-20160709110100

It sounds pretty good, though I don't know how viable having CYAN as school students but then having Carmine being assigned as a bodyguard would be. For that to be a viable plot, he'd have to be graduated, which would bump his age up to at least 21. And setting it after the timeskip would bump him up to about 22.

Also, I don't think we've ever seen Beowolves through quills. That's a Nevermore thing. The only thing they have thrown is bricks.

It's a good start though. (And I'll never give someone flak for writing a story, I'll just point out the logic problems I see with it. All writing is to be encouraged so the person can grow.)