Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20170730125154/@comment-26397825-20170825031545

Next is PisceanWaterbender with Alexander Gulbadan.
 * Spirit takes Someone’s advice and moves on to Piscean’s character before reviewing his.

1) Basic Info - 10 points

It all looks good.

2) Appearance - 19 points

BMI says he’s overweight, but given his musclebound frame you mention in the physique section, it’s a good thing.

I’m guessing the patch of fur is his Faunus trait?

Does...he not wear pants? I mean, there’s nothing wrong with that of course…

3) Characteristics - 24 points

Wait. Are you telling me he only grew 8 inches between the ages of 13 and 39? I can accept being tall, but grow spurts are usually 3-4 inches each at minimum, and you typically have 2-3 between the age of hitting puberty and 20, plus a little extra growing after that. I’d be far more believing if he’d hit 5’8” at 13 and shot up the rest of the way over the next decade, since I do know 15 year olds in real life that are 5’11” - but that was only after hitting a growth spurt that made them grow like a weed.

AVCD just doesn’t have any luck against Atlesians, do they?

Ouch. Pancreatic cancer is a bitch. I know that from personal experience. Though, did Alex keep up the wandering lifestyle after meeting Clementine? Or did he settle in Apella to live there with his wife and son?

You mention in his backstory that he is apparently very competitive - enough to get into trouble alongside his team with Goodwitch - but it isn’t mentioned anywhere in his personality. Somehow humbleness doesn’t suit this man in my opinion, though maybe I’m being influenced by the many portrayals of Alexander the Great in the past. But the enjoyment he gets from proving himself worthy of other’s respect doesn’t strike me as a very humble thing to do at all.

4) Trivia - 5 points

Holy crap that horse is old. The average life expectancy of a horse is 25-30 years old; she should be retired by now and Alex should have a new horse to alleviate the stress on poor Kelly’s old bones.

5) Weapon - 7 points

Sounding cool is the best reason for a weapon name. Not everything has to have some deep meaning; one thing we need to remember is the people making these weapons are teenagers. Cool sounding but ultimately meaningless names is what they do.

I am mildly confused as to what you mean by the ‘top of the blade’. Did you mean tip, thereby having it not be a piercing weapon at all by way of the blade itself being split by the barrel of the shotgun? And these dust cartridges that are inside the blade, do you mean to say that the fuller is actually thicker than the rest of the blade and curved outwards instead of indented inwards, allowing him to place the dust inside it? But then that contradicts the part where you say the dust component is on the handle, unless you simply meant that the dust ‘’selector’’ is on the handle. But then how does the bottom of the hilt contain the click-in slots for dust cartridges…okay, I am very confused.

The weapon sounds good as a concept, but you haven’t explained it very well at all and I’m left wondering just how it all fits together.

Pffft. Dibs. Just noticed that.

6) Semblance - 15 points

...Lol. That’s an amazing semblance. I love it for how silly it is and yet how useful it is.

7) Combat Info - 5 points

It all makes sense, though I’m a touch surprised he hasn’t combined Wind Dust with his semblance when he obviously uses it for his landing strategy. It would seem like an obvious thing to me; create sustained Wind to slow his fall using the pop-ups.

8) Civilian Extension - +1 point

I’m guessing he does end up living in a village after meeting Clementine then.

Total - 86 points