Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27144409-20180622162042/@comment-31558062-20181026120341

SomeoneYouUsedToKnow wrote: Bluewindbag wrote: Name: Time Prison

User: Den Starvoid 1) >Den Starvoid.

It fits CNR, but.....it's pretty cringey.

2) Semantically your description of the Semblance is inconsistent. First you say it stops targets from moving AKA Time Stop, but then you say it slows them down. Even if it could do both, you never mention any limitations or cost changes between "Slow" and "Stop".

3) You say "movement speed is X mph"....which is a very questionable way of explaining things.

Why? Because you're talking about Time Slow/Stop. Time is relative. Slowing someone down in time works in percentages, not set values.

Unless you want us to assume that the Semblance always and magically slows the targets down to whatever % would leave them at, say, 2mph, individually. Which would be comparatively more OP.

4) You use "number of targets" to explain the size of the dome. Which is beyond questionable, it's literally useless.

A "target" could be anything. It could be a fly. It could be a person. It could be a freaking Goliath. Saying that the dome would be big enough to "slow down 3 targets" is useless as an explanation when the size of each of those targets and the distance between them could be literally anything.

For example, you could have a bird, a Major Ursa, and a car as the targets. The bird is flying 40Km above, the Major Ursa is in a forest, and the car is miles away. You cast the Semblance, and supposedly it's gonna be big enough to reach all those three targets.

In other words, it will be stupidly huge, as huge as it needs to, and apparently this has no effect on the cost or effectiveness. That, is just ridiculous, and makes the "limitation" of only working for 4 seconds totally meaningless because the user can just cast it again and it will always reach those 3 targets, because it does.

If anything, the 4th tier is a downgrade because now it actually works with a set radius. Or diameter, not sure which one you're talking about there.

5) Why does it not affect "bullets and projectiles"? Why? It can affect anything, since all you say is "targets", not "people without Aura" or "animals" or anything remotely specific. So why can it, say, slow down an iron ball, but not a bullet? It's so arbitrary it makes no sense.

Also, more nitpicky than anything, but......don't use miles per hour. People are not cars. It's a very big unit, a long distance per a long time. It's far more reasonable to use meters per second for general descriptions. Name: Time Prison

User: Den Starvoid

Introduction: Den creates a time dome around the targets, preventing them from moving.

Range: Long

Type: Conjuration

Purpose: Offensive

Visual Cue:

Tier N:

1. Can create a 1 foot long dome that slows down people.

2. Can create a 3 feet long dome that slows down people.

3. Can create a 10 feet long dome that slows down people.

4. Can create a 15 feet long dome to stop people from moving.

General Limitations:
 * Only affects people.
 * Effects last in 1.2 seconds.