Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20160331235054/@comment-26397825-20160411010503

Mkay. Here's the first judging, and the bar setter for everyone elses scores.

And I said I was the nice judge. >.>

Phantomlink959, with Onyx Tacitus

1) Basic Info - 10 points Pretty basic, all looks good. As I said when I first posted the grading system, I really don’t expect anyone to lose points here.

2) Appearance - 26 points No points for gadgets, and very simplistic outfits, though you have a large array of them.

3) Characteristics - 18 points

Pretty basic beginnings, all makes sense, though I wonder what kind of glue he was stealing that it stuck pieces of scrap metal together and held. The estate owners would have to specially buy the glue to do that and it’s pretty expensive, which means the estate owners wouldn’t just leave it lying around and not notice when it disappeared and he started making little metal sculptors.

Also, clay is arguably easier to work with and you can kinda make mock clay through dirt and water, as well as just digging in the ground to find it. I also wouldn’t call it more refined personally, just different.

Not even a hint of working things out between them for the first couple of months? Come on, they’re four 17 year olds thrown together who don’t know anything about each other; clashes always happen.

Cute romance story, and at least they’d known each other for 7 years before marrying. Though, seriously. His two hobbies are combat and art, but he gets bored doing the tournament that is based around one of his hobbies? So he threw the fight? And his teammates never had a problem with that? I don’t believe that.

…Your idea of modest is vastly different to mine. A penthouse in Mistral? Yeah, that’s not modest at all.

Background total: 12

You’ve told me about his prowess in his professions, his relationship with his wife and daughter, and only briefly touched on his actual personality.

Personality total: 5

His likes and dislikes don't really tell me anything about him that his background didn't, except that he likes fine things such as white wine and rooms with a view. +1 bonus point for that, at least, since his actual personality was pretty barebones.

4) Trivia - 5 points No mention of his previous team or his family, or the boy he grew up alongside and was his friend for ages? For shame.

5) Weapon - 9 points Nice simple weapon. Why it doesn't have anything more like dust infusion, since he is an adult, I don't know, but it suits him at least.

6) Semblance - 7 points Nice semblance, though a bit lacking on limitations. Does that mean he can fuse anything together, or only minerals and metals, and the purer the mineral the better it works?

7) Combat Info - 4 points Landing strategy is plain and simple and fits his character. If it works it works, though he could use his semblance to fuse the end of his staff to his surroundings to slow his fall a bit.

Overall Total: 79 points