Board Thread:Speculation House/@comment-14138255-20160807005311/@comment-14138255-20160907005524

MiniDaggers wrote: 1. No paragraphs.

2. I disliked Roman's death. However your version also does not make sense as it would be out of character for Ruby to straight up kill Roman, not to mention Roman having enough aura to stop the blow.

3. Ruby vs Cinder scenarion thing seems way too fanfictionny and unlikely to be even remotely possible.

4. Inserting OCs (especially character ports) into the story is generally a no go. 1. Correction: Use paragraphs, as in divided blocks, as opposed to a single wall of text. Much easier to see your thoughts.

2-4. This reeks of a fix-fic, a work of fan fiction specifically made to correct something they don't like. If not properly balanced (or disclaimed as a "What If?" story), it will bend the laws of canon if it means it's favorite characters look good.