Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150630215852/@comment-25857155-20150708165900

Our fifth competitor is 73.Anon.52's Redd Serinus.

1)  Basic Info:16 /20  - Ok.  Really cheesey nickname, but alright.  Minus four for no Traits listed (at least put “none” or delete the line, so the points will be distributed).

2) Appearance: 15/20 Minus two for no physique listed.  What’s an Atlesian officer operations outfit?  Minus two.  Tailored how?  Shoes, hat, etc?  Shirt?  Minus one.

3)  Characteristics: 7/35
 * Personality (3/15) – Ok.  Three personality traits is not a good personality description.  That tells next to nothing about the character.
 * Background (4/20) – So little background detail.  How did he die?  What about the rest of his family?  How did he get involved in politics?  What were his motivations?  Come on, you can do better than this.   Wait, the guy attacked the military?

4) Combat Info: 7.5/25
 * Weapon: (1.5/10) Are the blades always there (self-harm risk on holster) or do the fold in and out?
 * Semblance: (2/15) That sounds suspiciously close to mind-control, and is (if anything) terribly overspecialized.  Kudos for creativity, I suppose. Also, no mention at all of limitations or Aura cost or, well, ANYTHING.
 * Fighting Style: dispersed points to others.
 * Landing Strat: (4/5) Certainly humorous, I’ll give it that.

5) Trivia: Next to nothing.  Ergo, nothing.  Kudos for the character choice, but no points earned.

These things combined give 73.Anon.52's Redd Serinus a total score of 45.5/100.

Well, that did not go so well - I was a bit disappointed, truly. Let's see the next one.