Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-6863431-20150103062825/@comment-209421-20150224015524

Actually, on thinking about it, this fic has a lot of potential for psychological warfare on a character basis. You've got Ruby's injuries and the influence that they have on her self-esteem. You've got the stresses on Weiss based on running a company. Yang's violent and bloodthirsty rampage and "lust" over Blake, although the type of lust is debatable. Blake's own thoughts on the "betrayal", and why it occurred.

I still have a issues with the concept. For example, a severed spine? Really? Even a broken spine causes paraplegia. Ruby wouldn't be growing because she wouldn't be mobile without mechanical aid, if at all depending on the location of the break. What, if she loses all ability to use her limbs, she'd get built into a SDC-created Paladin exoskeleton?

Then there's Yang, and the idea of lusting after somebody who attempted to kill her sister. It's too much of a distortion of logic and personality - if she's killing faunus to get revenge for Ruby, why would she lust after the one who did the deed itself?