Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25229725-20150128010644/@comment-26018514-20150209060302

JayHart wrote: Kuro Tepes.... Tepes, as in Țepeș, as in Vlad "Dracula" Țepeș, the Impaler? Real subtle, that. His semblance is too overpowered to be activated by only touch - tone it down somehow, and big-time. Also, the eye thing is a bit much. A bit stereotypical, or emo-stuish, maybe? Also, having his blade be able to mimic Adam's ability is OP as hell when combined with his semblance; he'd be unstoppable. Oh, and twenty feet is a LOT of chain. Where does it all go? Chain isn't like Blake's elastic ribbon of awesomeness; it does not stretch.

Does he really need dual handguns/boltguns AND a Variable Chain-Blade Scythe? Too much, mate - these take a lot of skill to use on their own, much less in combo with each other.

The story.... needs work. I'm pretty sure Grimm can't be surgically fused with humans or Faunus, though there's no proof of this, due to the fact that Grimm start dissolving on death. He also sounds horribly unfit to be a leader from what you've told us of his personality. I would rather have my OC, Cerise, lead a team than your Kuro. She may not talk to her team, but at least she wouldn't possibly go on a killing rampage at a moment's notice. Also, who the heck are the Silver Eye, that they have such ridiculous tech to be able to make such a weapon? As far as I know, the only other thing with that ability is Adam's semblance.

Do some work on it, bud, and try to bring it down to bearable levels. Suspension of disbelief is already at play in Remnant, but you have just broken it. Nothing personal, of course; your character just needs work. Oh, and does he even have a sense of humor or ability to be happy? agreed almost 100%(I say almost because I didn't read any of the story so can't comment about that)