Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-3965075-20150620202833/@comment-25857155-20150621111217

Alright, let’s take a look at “Maverick Argyris”.

First – CNR? If Maverick fits, please explain how. Looks like you need a lot more detail on him so far. He’s pretty light for being so tall – I’m over 200 at just 6 ft, so he must be thin as a rail. “Diamond” face...? Not sure I get what that means, I can’t say I’ve seen anyone with a face I’d call diamond. Also, mysterious and serious are not physical qualities – physique refers to things like the character’s musculature build and proportions. His outfit is ok... bland, but ok.

Characteristics. “Mavericks has a the standard god complex...”   First, check your grammar and spacing in this section. Second, why does he believe that? It’s fine if not much is known by the characters, but you should at least know his reasons for yourself. Reasoning is important, otherwise you just end up with an enemy nobody really cares about because nobody can relate to them. Flesh him out. I get what you’re going for with him, but you are missing your target.

Combat Info. I’d love to see some. >.>

Trivia. Again, more detail. Also, basing a bad guy off of ol’ Sephi is not a good idea.

Ok, did I miss anything?