Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-33816423-20180101001645/@comment-33816423-20180124205958

Reminder that some people have lives before they have time to judge. Was hoping to get it done Saturday but then my internet died for the entire day.

Anyways, gonna start from the top with SpirtedDreaming's Llinos Xerxes

1) Basic info: 9

Solid enough, don't see Welsh very often. Only docking 1 because of the lack of mention of colors on the emblem.

2) Appearance: 18

Love the attention to detail in the eye color. Not sure how I feel on the color ensemble, every shade of dark pink my poor colorblind eyes can see just looks entirely awkward next to the rest of the outfit.

3) Characteristics: 27

I'm not entirely sure what you mean by "She asked to be assigned to her uncle." The word choice of assigned is a little awkward. Some minor spelling errors here and there, but nothing too egregious. Overall a good tale with a lot of horse rearing lingo I admittedly didn't know before. PS The rooster totally started it.

Personality is very consistent with her actions, believable as well. Incorporating the misc trait into the backstory at least once would have been nice to do, just as a nod to it being a thing.

4) Trivia: 5

Personally would have liked to see the family named, but I can understand why without big of a family she has. Otherwise the relationships are strong enough in their own right to slam it right up to a 5. Wouldn't mind seeing a full tale of Roisin in the future. The allusion is very plain to see.

I)Weapon 14

Weapon is good and well explained except for one thing, how many shots each dust cartridge gives. If its only one I could see that being a mild nuisance.

For some reason all I can think of when I read the firing mechanism is one of those nerf bows.

II) Semblance 15

Very interesting semblance, reminds me of the very odd sword and board Ranger build I saw a little while back. Protection from Energy is very clearly seen with the dust interactions.

III) Combat info: 5

Fleshed out and reasonable, love the nod to Power Attack in the close range component.

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">I) Day to Day Life: 1

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">Just enough here to warrant a single point of recovery, not like you needed it to begin with.

<p style="font-weight:400;font-size:16px;">For a grand total of 94! Very strong and well fleshed out entry.