Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20170430155022/@comment-26397825-20170526131036

Well, that week was a bit more hectic than I intended it to be. Here's the ones I have finished judging. I am aware I seem to have skipped Cyrania's and Piscean's - worry not, they each have the backstory to go and they'll be done as well. Then it's just Ahpolki's and I'm all set. The plan is for that to happen tomorrow after work.

So without further ado, SomeoneYouUsedToKnow with Rahorakhty

1) Basic Info - 10 points

Well, I would point out that emblems are meant to be single coloured, but I suppose since he’s from outside the kingdoms that is explained away with that. This basic info promises to make this an...interesting character, to say the least.

2) Appearance - 18 points...I was right, this is going to be interesting. How very...Aegyptian of you.

3) Characteristics - 13 points

There’s alluding to a theme and there’s pretty much directly porting the pantheon into Remnant. If you wanted to make him a god of some sort, couldn’t you at least use some creativity and make your own pantheon and religion like Miles and Kerry did, instead of porting in a pantheon from our world? For gods’ sake (pun intended) they even have the alternate names of the gods from the exact pantheon you are porting in. I’m asking for creativity here, not an Egyptian lesson.

You even rip Haethor straight from Egyptian mythology, as well as her apparent bipolarity between murderous being and peaceful woman. I am not impressed. You could have done something really interesting with a village from outside the Kingdoms that developed separately, but instead you went for an Egypt rip off with all their gods in tow.

The personality itself is fine though, so that’s something at least.

4) Trivia - 4 points

The note about Sekhmet’s tale does not make me feel any more charitable towards that backstory.

5) Weapon - 13 points

Weapon is interesting and different, but easy enough to picture.

6) Semblance - 11 points

Is his semblance a mirror puzzle with construct applications? Interesting, though it sounds annoying to set up. Though I am curious about the constructs; can they be anything, or are there set forms or ways the light is used? Is it just laser beams, can he make walls, creatures, objects, golems?

8) Combat Info - 5 points

Everything sounds alright.

Total: 74 points