Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-24573226-20160623204034/@comment-25396609-20160827034515

(this is a bit rushed and probably makes me sound like more of a vindictive ass than i am intending to be, but i'm getting pulled away from the computer and i don't trust the wiki not to eat the work i've done)

You'll know when i'm not being chill. Believe me.

The problem isn't with having a legendary artifact or anything, it's in the execution based on what information I have available. Everybody and their mother isn't going to immediately go after one random kid because he has something that is supposedly nonexistant; most of them will either not care, not believe it, or be worried about more important thing.

Giving said item to an original character which causes them to be drawn into events involving the main characters is another issue, it's a sign of a gary stu and/or self insert; not good things.

Transforming weapons aren't exactly a big deal in Remnant, everybody has them.

Now, on the topic of macguffins in storytelling; they generally work because the entire series is built from the ground up around them. In your case, rather than building a setting from the ground up to support them, you are attempting to re-write an existing world to accomodate them.

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One of the major themes in RWBY is teamwork and unity.

I would not reccomend listening to people who say defying a theme which the series is based around is a good idea.

It is also inadvisable to put an OC in a position where they are likely to become romantically involved with a canon character; such as working alone together for extended periods of time whilst fighting to survive.

This is probably going to sound WAY more egotistical than it is; but almost every group which exists to give advice on writing fanfiction? totaly garbage. Mostly formed of people who are convinced of their superiority and think more people should write like them, when their characters are god-awful mary sues that anyone with common sense would avoid like the plague.

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You're probably wondering why my opinion on this is so strong too; i used to be like them, and i regret it to a level you would not believe.