Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20160331235054/@comment-26397825-20160412024514

I'm back at it again. Here is number five.

VedranTheII, with Milii Ibara

1) Basic Info - 10 Huh. Interesting name. 2) Appearance - 30 points Love the outfits, nice and cute, well thought out and something different for each part of her life. Lol. She basically bought a watch as her gadget. I dig it. 3) Characteristics - 26 points

Sheesh. That’s a cute but sad backstory at the same time. Personally not surprised the clog designs never took off outside of the kingdom, since it is a very niche market and I’m glad you reflected that in her childhood circumstances.

Okay, at first I thought Mac was just a normal hunter, as in someone who hunts animals for their food and skins, but then you refer to Milii wanting to be a Huntress, which makes me wonder if he was in fact a Huntsman, which is the proper term for the males. Just slightly confused because of the terminology. It is confirmed later that he is indeed a Huntsman, but the early incorrect terminology confused me.

Did it take her three days to wash the blood off the pin, or three days to stop crying enough to wash the blood off the pin?

Backstory total - 18 points

Personality is short and to the point, though how she deals with things like grief and how much it takes for her to actually get annoyed isn’t mentioned.

Personality total - 8 points

4) Trivia - 5 points Relationships mention everyone that was mentioned in the backstory and explain themselves pretty well. 5) Weapon - 7 points Well…that is an interesting weapon. Where are the daggers stored? Do they unfold, or is the buckler extra thick to allow for the daggers to be stored inside it? Or are the holes around the rim of the buckler, instead of on the clock face like I initially thought? And is it just a specific dagger which can be removed and wielded in the off hand, or can all be removed like that?

You get bonus points for thinking about the order the daggers shoot in and the fact that the clock does tell time instead of being purely decorative.

6) Semblance - 9 points Honestly, this might be the best time semblance I’ve seen. I mean, it works, it’s not OP since it’s restricted to things without aura, which means she can’t slow down people, weapons attached to people, or aural slashes, but she can slow down Grimm attacks like the Nevermore feathers, bullets, standard elements with no aura in them and thrown weapons. It’s also got a size restriction which I like.

7) Combat Info - 5 points I see how she slows time on her clothes, since she is consciously letting her semblance affect them despite her aura protecting them from damage which is something you specified in the semblance limitations. It all makes sense. And that fighting style sounds very nice. She would be good in a duel arena, I think, despite the note you made about her semblance not being very handy there.

Total: 92 points