Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26173711-20190509052121/@comment-25396609-20190622161030

Malcolm: I like the core idea (it's one of those Semblances that falls into the category of cranking up a basic ability of Aura to 11) but your description is bloated and a bit scattered

Drop the list of what element Dust corresponds to what color of coating, as it can be easily inferred and adds unnecesarry length to the sheet.

General limitations is written in a very cluttered manner; break it up into individual items and try to trim them down to the minimum word count that gets the point across.

Define a set size limit for the Semblance; ideally a function of surface area in square feet or meters; allow Dust to increase this, but not make it unlimited.

Try to be more concise in general when writing weapons/semblances, as it is easier for others to read and analyze on a technical level.

Reserve more drawn-out phrasing for writing backstories, since -when compared to the rest of it- they function more as a self-contained fanfic with the technical aspects provided elsewhere contextualizing and providing a reference.

Rebin: I'll get around to re-writing that big post giving you some examples and advice tonight, gonna be out of the house or otherwise occupied for a good while today.