Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20160319212213/@comment-26397825-20160325033546

Stuffn wrote: -Name: Kijani Shujaa

-Height: 199cm (6ft6in)

-Weight: 125kg (275lb)

-Physique: very toned Woo boy. He's not just toned with that weight; he's a brick. He'd be a body builder. Muscle weighs more than fat, true, but that weight combined with that height puts him on a BMI of 31, which makes him obese. I suggest making him 110kg (243lbs), which puts him the overweight category by 11kgs and gives you enough leeway to make him very toned without making him super bulky.

Born in Vacuo to rich parents, Kijani grew up being mentored by his father on how to fight. His father taught at Shade Academy up until he was killed by a King Taijitu trying to defend Kijani. Just a few questions. How old was Kijani, how did Kijani end up being attacked by a King Taijitu, and who saved Kijani after his father died? Or did Kijani run away?

After his fathers death, Kijani and his mother moved to Vale, with Kijani enrolling in Signal, where he built Makucha, his war axe/gun. Eventually, Kijani was accepted into Beacon, where he was part of and the leader of Team KBLT (Cobalt). Whilst attending Beacon, Kijani didn't know what his semblance was until his second semester when he accidentally used it against a group of Ursai. Kijani went on to graduate with honours and currently undergoes covert missions along with his team for the Vale Government. Rest of the backstory sounds alright. A bit stubby, but that happens. I've been writing pretty short backstories myself, recently. -Personality: Shy but mostly gets along with others, he has a short attention span but is a very determined person. He is a very talented tactician. Can you explain to me how someone with a short attention span has the ability to focus on a battle and make plans? That doesn't quite seem to work in my opinion.

Everything else seems fine, though I do note that you have given him 58 points in stats...at 26. I mean, I know graduated Huntsmen are meant to be powerful, but 58/70 at only 26 seems a bit much...seriously guys. We need to discuss the stats more. We can ditch them, or we can increase them to out of 10, or we can leave them as is which doesn't allow for much variation at higher levels.