Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20160518062840/@comment-27425734-20160519043613

Kirito Rose wrote: I'll DEFINATLY try to follow the feedback and try to fix his "Flaws". And yes, I did edit him from the first time I posted him.

PS. Could you and anyone else plz point out where I MAJORLY fucked up? If you do, I'll REALLY apreciate it. The character itself is ultimately the problem. The way he's described is simply too perfect to be believable from his looks to his personality. Very few people can relate to someone with such a beautiful body, and an equally pristine personality. His schizophrenia adds very little to his character, and is one aspect of the problem, but another is giving him your name. I understand it was not your intent for Sean to be perceived as a self-insert, but giving a character the same name as yourself is generally a bad idea; especially if Sean is one of the main characters. His Semblance goes against the basics on how Semblances work; they're tied to the user's personality. And no, the reason you provided for it before does not make sense. I strongly recommend you just trash this OC (Painful as it may be to do so), or revamp him, so he's almost completely unrecognizable from your original concept.

I understand you wanted someone to point out the specific area where this OC is flawed, but there are simply too many problems with him, for one in particular to stand out amongst the others. These are all flaws that need to be recitified, and are too intrinsic to the character itself, for one to simply not be mentioned.