Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27447621-20160508230102/@comment-7742259-20160515035849

HookshotHotshot wrote: Isaac223 wrote: Right, I tried to justify the 2 Semblance thing with the curse from the wizard and whatnot, and the second is giving a weapon its own artifical Semblance-esque effect with a "mechanical Aura," but... Eh. I don't even like the OC I made myself now that I look at her. Like I said:

"Eh, I will admit she was rushed and admittedly one of my worst OC's to date. I was doing this to cure my writer's block if even just a little... which it apparently didn't help with.

Sorry to have made you read that for that pointless reason. And thanks for at least telling me how to improve upon this rushed, horrid OC. ^^; I'll get back to fixing her and hopefully my writer's block shows some mercy while I do so."

Again, sorry for any offense towards the thread or the Lore for making this OC the way I did. ^^; Here, I'll give you what I would do in this scenario, if that would help. Take this with a grain of salt, but I hope I can help you along.

I'll go numerically.

1) Meral will raise hackles with some people.  Pokemon-based OCs and Semblances have worked, but they're generally named something besides their Pokemon name.  Spirited made a whole team based on Charmander, Squirtle, Bulbasaur and Pikachu, so it's been done, but I'd take caution.

2) This one's simple, as are #3, 4, and 5. Change the age and weight and cut out a bit of backstory and you're fine.

6) Yeah, that personality and background need some revision for a few reasons.


 * "Cold _____ with a troubled past (be it assassin, theif, mercenary, etc.) generally screams edgy character, which are a huge no-no here.


 * You're basing this OC (however loosely) off a fairy-type Pokemon. It seems to flat-out contradict the source in my opinion. If it was a dark, ghost or steel-type pokemon this would make a bit more sense, but that's something that I personally have an issue with. But that's just me.

7) Again, just hack out the relationships with Pyrrha.

8) about her weapon.  You could make them single-shot or Metal Storm, but I would suggest just changing the weapon. if you really want to go with a glove, I recommend a gauntlet or brass knuckles or something and giving her a sidearm if you must...

9) Just pick a Semblance. "Wizard's Curse" makes the character SUCH a 'special snowflake', which isn't good.

Hope I could help! Oh nonono, you misunderstand. I didn't base really anything off of a Pokemon. Her name, Meral, which comes from Emerald, sounds homonymnal to Merril, a Pokemon, which just explains how I made the connection to "Luris," from a portmanteau of Ruri and Lapis Lazuli.

But yeah, I didn't like any of what I wrote either, but your advice, while I would normally know myself, seems to have... eluded me. Thank you. I think keeping some of this advice, which I am beating myself up for not remembering this time around, in mind will help with my writer's block.