User blog comment:Thedrag0n22/I little test script (I think that's the best word for it)/@comment-10380701-20131202060129

Normally I would flip my shit since this is fanfic. But I'll focus more on criticism.

I can tell you don't have much in terms of writing experience. Well, if you wanna pull this off, then I'd suggest reading and writing a lot. Once you get the hang of things, then come back and redo this.