Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26018514-20150401033018/@comment-25396609-20150409205016

Violet: The only real comment I have to make is that it is a bit risky to have an OC with an identical semblance to one of the main characters AND be close enough to one of the other main characters to have been given a nickname  by her.

Onyx:I don't think mentioning Pyrrha in his background is necessary. Besides the fact that this story seems to be an OC insert version of the show, I'm not too big on the background. Don't get me wrong, I love the characters, but I feel like you are wasting your skill by not putting together a completely original plot. the biggest point is you having Onyx be involved in thwarting the robbery at from dust 'til dawn, which feels completely unnecessary. all that said, I like his weapons, semblance, and fighting style, however his class would me best to simplify, since he is effectively a monk with enchanted hand wraps or knuckles. not the best idea to have him close enough to the main character to have any real romantic feelings, I'm mellow about my distaste for it, but other people may be more aggressively against it. Alexander: once again, everything until combat info warrants no comment. Not sure when you made this character, but his semblance is exceedingly similar to Agrus' and shares a name. his weapon is decent, but I feel like having pistols that are 2 feet long is horribly impractical. Julius: Really need to wipe out the connections to main characters, Mad. it just makes the characters look like they're leeching off of the cannon characters in order to exist. All combat details look fine. I really, truly, cannot stress enough how bad of an idea it is to make your characters so close with the main characters, making Julius be childhood friends with Weiss is way too Gary Stu-ish.