Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25405817-20160511154306/@comment-25405817-20160511185242

Okay, "spoiler trigger" was a poor choice of words, I'll admit that. Though the "As far as I gather" part should've been a bigger clue.

Also, there's no need to try and infer the emotional state of people. You perceive me as "whiny," but that couldn't be farther from the truth, and it is very rude. I sure have not implying anything hurtful or negative about you, have I?

So I'll state this now as to avoid another incident (with me at least): Zero Spoilers from any game in the Persona Series. Thank you very much.

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Now, more on topic:

I've found a RWBY Fic that is a reimagining of the canon series in the setting of Avatar: The Legend of Aang. The idea is creative, and the two shows actually can blend just fine. The concept is to basically change Huntsmen with Benders, and Beacon Academy in particular arranges teams so that they have all four Bending Arts (Air, Water, Earth, Fire = Ruby, Weiss, Blake, Yang).

However, the author fails to pace the sequence of events and doesn't have a good concept of "Cause and Consequence," causing them to skip esential moments in the narrative; i.e. Ozpin offers Ruby to assist to his academy without a cause (Ruby saying she wants to assist to Beacon). The foreshadowing is painfully obvious, even more than the "Penny is a Robot" deal; Apparently in this story, Ozpin is the Avatar, but he's apparently dead, and Ruby is the new Avatar... apparently (Note, that Ozpin still wears green, yet he "started" as a fire bender, so the color matching makes no realistic sense).

These are minor nitpicks, but it is still valid critique: The author doesn't spell team acronyms, but instead writes down the pronunctiation of the names. And finally, the author repeats descriptors too many times, to the point where they don't vary at all; Jaune always is "that blonde boy from the ferry" until he states his name.

So yeah, 10/10 in concept. (-1)/10 in execution.