Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20161205132101/@comment-27966940-20161221183545

HighCastle67 wrote:

Kirito Rose wrote:

HighCastle67 wrote: I remember saying you should make the personality section more than one-word descriptors. But I didn't mean write an essay on it. Is it better or worse? It's not the worse, but it could definitely be better. The neutrals you use to describe him vs. what you later say is very contradicting. And I'm glad you put effort into describing his personality, but you overdid it now. I try to be as decriptive as possible so the reader knows what my character's shtick is.