Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-30530552-20171101175001/@comment-30530552-20171201013523

Well, technically it's December 1st now, but I got Phantom's done.

So without further ado, here's Phantom with Kanika Rutto.

Basic Info - 8/10 -
 * Do you have a link to where you found the name reference, by chance? All I’m finding is that it’s a Hindu/Sanskrit word meaning “atom, seed (specifically for wheat), gold.”
 * Not that you’re missing a CNR basis, just I’m not finding the right source.
 * Depending on the source, the last name contains an element of Japanese kanji referring to lapis lazuli, so.

Appearance - 15/20 -
 * So, on the side where the leg is cut off, how far up does this cut go? Is it Vernal level, or is it high enough the whole legging is gone and she’s effectively got booty shorts? Can one still tell there was a legging there sans the knowledge she’s wearing pants?
 * Researching some of these colors, I’m finding that the shades vary a lot - particularly with avocado green. Is it supposed to be a dark like the skin (which I’m presuming), or pale like the inside?
 * Either way, the colors I’ve been picturing I find don’t really work together that well, in my mind, but maybe I’m just picky...and maybe that’s supposed to be indicative of her personality...for now, I’m docking points but will add them back if it makes sense. (EDIT: Hmm...I’m not sure that an inability to express herself would tie in with it that closely, but even still, 1 point back since I see other ways as to how it works.)
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Also, what color is her armor and the color of her symbol she spray-painted on it? Just the general steel color along with some random spray color?
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Note to self for future reference: never search <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">cuisse <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> without adding the word <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">“armor” <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> to it...pulled up some nasty images for me, even with SafeSearch on. <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Backstory + Characteristics - 27/30 - (Did it as I went.) <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Trivia - 4/5 - Most is good here since my name searches turned up good results. You did neglect to mention what the team names meant though.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">And already, I’m imagining wearing the charms and seeing some vibrant colors...I find the concept fascinating...I’m also thinking that the oysters, clams, etc. see the Dust as an irritant, which is why they’d form the protective layer.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">So her mother is a HtH and Aura specialist...and we can see how this influences her daughter. Quite nice, though I question how strong her attacks would be.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Ha, destiny sometimes has a funny way of doing that, except for the fact that as the writer, you make their destiny, so...good job.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">I hope you explain some of these terms, otherwise, I’ll have to go and look. I assume ARGN = Argon, as in the elemental gas, and VLCN = Vulcan/Volcano? As for LZRT, I don’t even know.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">One would think that there would be disciplinary action for a brawl like the one you describe, but given how liberal Oz was with his students and Vacuo’s general atmosphere, I wouldn’t be surprised if that were not the case.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">That was a neat way to end. Overall, solid backstory.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">I do like that her personality has evolved somewhat from her first-year self. Each experience brings new challenges and opportunities, after all.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">She doesn’t like bacon? What a monstrous soul she must be. Or a holistic one who has a love for piggies, depending on your perspective.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Allusion is noted and acceptable.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Looks like you didn’t have time for names, so time for me to go on a search for their meanings. Here’s what I found:

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Weapon - 15/15 - Nice, simple, and effective transformative weapon. <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Tyson - from old French <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">tison <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> meaning “firebrand.”
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Lalli - closest I found was a possible connection to <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Lauri, <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> which eventually refers to laurel flowers.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Kairu - “black one” in some African language.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Lapis - Probably refers to the blue-colored <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">lapis lazuli.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Zal - Persian word that means “albino,” usually referring to white.
 * <p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Argus - Presumably relates to the Greek <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">argós, <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> meaning “bright, shining.” Combined with the German last name <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">grau <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> which means “gray,” it’s effectively saying “bright gray.”

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Semblance - 12/15 - So, rest assured, given kinetic energy is retained, she’ll just burst through walls no problem...gotcha. Overall, I like the idea, even if it seems like it’d be very taxing on her body, as that is <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-style:italic;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">a lot <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> of strain. Personally, I don’t think the ice and earth interactions are true Dust interaction, since, from the way it sounds, you make the weapon first and just launch the pre-existing weapon.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;"> <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Combat Info - 5/5 - All checks out here. Neat use of Semblance I hadn’t thought of.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">8+15+27+4+15+12+5 = 86

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:0pt;margin-bottom:0pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#cccccc;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Total: 86 Points