Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20160402201256/@comment-14138255-20160423145043

TheCipherNine wrote: Kirito Rose wrote: Whatever the heck this thing is... By the Force... Spirit covered anything I would have said but that frakking weapon. There so much nonsense going on from chain sword to duel chain swords, to pistols, and copying Raven's weapon. I know RWBY's weapon run on the rule of cool but this thing breaks one standard (no weapon so far has more than third stages, not counting a storage form), to illogical ( how in the hell does this thing able to split into two swords with cable yet still able to use it?) to copying. Weapons can easily have more 3 stages if it can designed well enough (though it might be a bit unwieldy). However, that does seem to be much, having essentially Raven's weapon.

Also, why would Sean's parents be killed by the White Fang? They're all about the Faunus, why would they randomly murder Faunus (and if they did kill his parents, why wouldn't they just take him and brainwash him?)

Did he have his Aura unlocked when he was shot? If not, it'd be a miracle if he survived, I'll let it slide (worse things have happened in other shows, but it's treading on thin ice).

Also (a rather petty gripe, but one that needs to be adressed for past and future OC's, including mine), his weight (146lbs) is VERY unhealthy for someone as tall as he is (6'6), he'd be like a scarecrow. Which is why (if you can go back and look at my OC's from the previous thread [Team FLAG: Finnegan, Lin, Altan, Gwyn]) and use this guide I would like someone to tell me if some of my characters don't fit the guide.

Mostly all I can think of at this moment, I try my best to give constructive criticism (without being a jerk about it) and you are kind of new here so...yeah. see what you can do.