User blog comment:Goddess of Despair/RWBY User Battle Tournament Round 1:Shinu/Torrent vs Coroda Kage/@comment-5732937-20130301012815

I love it! The apart from a few spelling mistakes, and that fact that it isn't very meaty, I love it. There isn't much dialog so next time keep that in mind. Also, when ever someone says anything, make a new line, it's easier to follow. You don't have to do that in the middle of the fight though.

Also remeber to keep it in either past or present tense, other wise it wont flow as well.

Lye is spelt Lie or Lay, so when Shinu said "Lye there and die. It should have been "Lie there and die" or "Lay down and die." To prevent spelling mistakes, you could type it up first in Word then copy, paste it into the blog.