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What are some ways to improve this character?

1)Basic Info

 §   Name: Eleanor Blerta

 §   CNR Explanation: Eleanor: Greek for bright or light; Blerta: Albanian for Green

 §   Character Basis: Pisces

 §   Age: 13

 §   Race: Faunus (Cat)

 §   Gender: Female

 §   Emblem: Two gold trees, one the flipped and mirrored version of the other, with their branches intertwined with each other's roots, in the form of a circle

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Handedness: Right

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Physical Traits: Grey tabby cat ears

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Misc. Traits: A white cape with a silver clasp of her emblem, a tendency to wearing white

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Nickname: Ella (family and few friends)

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Current Occupation: 1st year student at Signal Academy

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">2)Appearance

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Aura Color: Gold

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Aura Effect: She seems to fade into her surroundings

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Height: 5 ft.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Weight: 94 lbs

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Eyes: Sea-Green

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Skin: White

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Face: Oval with sharp cheekbones and pointy chin

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Hair: True Gold, wavy and held in a half pony tail

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Physique: Average, sort of muscular but not really developed yet

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   Combat O <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">utfit: A brown leather breastplate over a white knee-length tinkerbell dress with white shorts underneath (hidden by the skirt). With the whole ensamble are brown buckle flats and her white cape

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">3)Characteristics

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Background: Born the fifth child of the Blerta household, Eleanor loved to play make-believe with the others and her parents when they could join. Tierra and Gimli, the two eldest, never seemed to care much for the games but would join in until they started receiving lessons from father and mother, then most their time was spent practicing their lessons and homework. Fintin had fun pretending to explore ancient ruins with her as a way to stave off his frustrations against some of the stricter rules of the house then let Ella help him take care of Lupadin. Lily enjoyed the games for a bit, then she started making things all about romance and boys, while Ella still wanting some adventure and fighting, and so arguements would break out and they stopped playing often, Lilly instead mostly hanging out with friends from school.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">     And so Ella ended up imagining by herself and found she rather liked it, going into her fantasy whenever she wanted to. Books, movies, and games added fuel in the forms of characters to utilize and possible scienerios. Sometimes the books, video games and movies helped her interact with others, but more it helped her to withdraw into her own world or to watch the outside world to look for similarites to the fictional ones. Her mother tried to encourage her to connect with the real world more and so arranged for her to pick any instrument she liked and she would be taught. Eleanor choose the harp and found that it actually wasn't that bad.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">     She kept up with her schoolwork though and always sought to be there for her younger siblings and the others if they wanted. Her father taught her aura use and fighting styles, but nothing excited her as much as when she first tried Dust use. They both could see that she was a natural, taking to Dust use like breathing. Many hours were spent together honing this skill and Dust became another major passion for Elleanor, giving her a strong connection with her father. "Doc" Lambert though shared a similar inclination towards healing as mother, connecting him to her and causing a small, jealous rift to settle between the two.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">      The private home lessons though made it so that she skipped one year of Dust studies at Signal academy and caused her to create a weapon that maximized on her Dust use. None of her friends from her grade school ended up going to Signal with her though and so she faced her trepidation of meeting new faces without any familiar ones to offer solace. And after all she's read/heard about the high school sweetheart marriages, she was hoping that it would be easier to connect with her potential Prince Charming with a friend by her side. But she could go it alone if the worst came to worst, she could survive high school without a boyfriend or friends if that's how it turned out to be.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Personality: Sedate and shy, she prefers to watch the world around her and often stays in the background of whatever's going on. If she knows she can do something and not mess up, she'll do it, (ex. homework [generally]), but otherwise she'll wait until told to do something. Also, if she sees any kind of cruel behavior for the sake of being cruel, a protective instinct rises up in her and she ignores the reasons she normally wouldn't act to come to the aid of the victim, whether animal or person. Sometimes she jumps to the wrong conclusions and always feels ashamed afterwards, with a vow to pay more attention next time so that she's not mistaken again.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">A hopeless romantic, she can't help but wonder and daydream about when she's going to be swept off her feet and find true love, going so far as to gather her impressions of the boys in her class to guess who is handsome, yet also desirable husband material. She's too shy to actually approach them and get direct impressions, and so relies on what she can observe around her or from when they interact with her. She spends a lot of free time in her dream world and with family members, doesn't have friends yet at Signal and she doesn't go out of her way to make them.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Likes: Playing the Harp, Books (particularly romance/fantasy), Daydreams, Movies (particularly of the romance/fantasy genre) Sunshine, Fish (Salmon in particular), Video games, Dust

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Dislikes: Awkwardness, Embarrassment, Uncertainty, Creepy Crawlies, Cruelty of any kind, Doing the wrong thing/Being criticized for it, Meeting new people, Going by herself to Socials

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">4)Trivia:

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Notable Relationships:

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">    Father (Egbert Hamish Blerta): He's away more often then either of them would like because of his work as a Huntsment, but they have developed a bit of a daddy's girl sort of bound. When she has questions about the world or about life, she'll go to him and he'll answer them as soon as he can do so. Often, such conversations happen in his basement workshop where they further develop her natural flair for Dust use and she helps him with his experiments.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">    Mother(Rosabella Seren Blerta): A nurturing force in her life who strives to encourage her daughter to not always have her head in the clouds and interact with other people as well as curing her wounds from practice, teaching her some first aid in case of emergencies, and being one of the best cooks of the town.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;">"    Aunt" Pearl Sterling: The two enjoy each other's company whenever they meet, Pearl always being able to energize Ella with fun and stories from the circus then the two having a shared taste for romantic fantasy. Wonders often why Pearl didn't marry Uncle Otineo and live around permanently.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">    Uncle Otineo Seren: Mother's twin brother: Is a bit silent and grim even when he tries not to be, so they aren't the closest. But then she notices how he does actually seem to relax when around "Aunt" Pearl, his former partner, and wonders why they never tied the knot, he probably would have learned to be less somber sometimes.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">    Siblings: Gets along with Tierra, Gimli, and Fintan; sometimes practicing with them or hanging about reading while they practice; but they're set on becoming hunters and are more focused on their training and their shared goal, making Ella feel like a bit of an outsider since she's not sure if she wants to be a Huntress or not; also they seem to share a secret with the adults that they won't tell the rest about that makes them a bit paranoid like someone could vanish in the blink of an eye.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">      Lily seems to be distancing herself from everyone in the family in her rebellion against the parental rules, though Ella probably gets along better with her than most the rest, they at least talk civily sometimes. Lambert is a bit of a mommy's boy, meaning that there's a bit of envy on both sides about the easier time the other sibling has relating to the other parent. Periwinkle is a ball of energy and since Ella isn't usually busy and hates to refuse Periwinkle anything, Elleanor ends up playing with her a lot, sometimes enjoying it and sometimes being really annoyed by it but participating anyway. And with the unborn sibling, Ella hopes that they'll get along and is somewhat eager about it being born, imagining in the meantime what the new sibling might be like.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Notes: Connection to Pisces: People born under Pisces are said to be musical, gentle, fearful, desire to escape reality, oversensitive, indecisive, lazy (though she's only lazy to an extant) and compassionate. Among their likes are being alone, sleeping, music, romance, and visual media. Among their dislikes are being criticized and cruelty of any kind

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">    <span style="color:white;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;font-size:11pt;">Hunter Extension

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">I) Weapon

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Name: Dust's Vambraces

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Wielder: Eleanor

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Maker/Smith: Eleanor

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Type: Silver Dust Release Vambrace (SDRV)

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Weapon Derivation: Weiss's rapier, Yang's bracelets

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Design: A set of steel vambraces with half of her emblem traced in gold in the center of each in such a way as to make a full emblem if the two were laid side by side

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Holstered/Inactive Form: The vambraces fold up to become bracelets, with the emblem halves  still prominently in the center

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Fighting Form: The bracelets fold out to become vambraces and the Dust release chambers become visible in front, circling around her wrists

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Features: Releases Dust

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Dust Capacity: Typically uses the four main types (fire, ice, lighting, air) plus gravity and earth, but can use any type she can grab a hold of

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Ammunition: Dust (powdered form), loaded in the back towards the elbow, can have up to twelve different Dust types at once (at one type per chamber and six chambers per vambrace) but typically uses six different types at a time (each vambrace having the same Dust types in the twin chamber)

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Usage: Releases the Dust using aura control to be used either for Dust spells, remote Dust activation, or to bolster an ally's semblance

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Planned Upgrades: Make Dust release mechanisms more efficent, possibly add a second function that doesn't interfere with its primary one but allows for direct combat in case user is discovered/aura runs out

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Notes: The name is both sort of true and something a romantic fantasy lover might come up with

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">II) Semblance

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Name: Cloak of Light

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">User: Eleanor

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Type: Conjuration

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Purpose: Utility

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Short Description: The user seems to fade into the background though really the light wraps around her in such a way as to camouflage her to the background. Lasts until she moves or chooses to dispel the illusion.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Activation Cue: It looks like to anyone viewing her that's she's fading into her surroundings

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Range: Personal

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">General Limitations: She needs to as stay still as humanly possible for it to work, Can still be heard, Still has her heat signature, Dispels if she is touched by anyone

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Passive Abilities: Tier 1 ability can trigger subconsciously if she's intensely daydreaming, frightened, embarrassed, or asleep

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Active Ability (tier 1): Camouflages herself to her surroundings through the wrapping of light around herself

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Active Ability (tier 2): Camouflages something touching her (ex. her weapons) into her body

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Dust Interaction: Ice: Cools the area around her body, masking her body heat somewhat

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Notes: She tends to be still and keep to the background, hence her semblance blends her into her surroundings while being still; Name describes how the light "cloaks" her into her surroundings and is a bit of a pun off of the common cloak of darkness item of fairy tales used for invisibility

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"><span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">III) Combat Info

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Class/Position: Runemaster/Support

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Landing Strategy: Shoots wind Dust from her vambraces towards the ground to slow her descent

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;text-indent:-0.25in;"> §   <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">Fighting Style: Remains in her position, hidden by Cloak of Light and/or with help from the environment itself (ex. going behind a rock or staying up a tree). She then releases her Dust using aura control (usually doesn't cause her semblance to dissipate since body movement isn't necessary for the type of aura control she uses) and either imparts it to allies, remotely activates it, or unleashes a Dust spell <span style="padding:0in;font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:white;">