Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24993958-20150605221100/@comment-24993958-20150606140803

3rdMercenaries wrote: Well, I've got three OCs with names, two teams and a complete OC. Let's put him up here.

1)Taranis   -you know I want be hard on you for the lego biology…but you’re not the first or the last one to do it…although I’m hoping these questions might enlighten you on why a half faunus looking like that makes no sense: “If a character was a quarter of a faunus would half of one eye be a different color? If a character was on eight of a faunus would he have a quarter of an extra ear”

-Put parentheses and explain who uses the nickname and in what context, helps build the character…although in your case it really doesn’t work…random half faunus helping people that unanimously hate him because…because…because…oh look a puppy, and people are so thankful a 13 year old kid managed to save them from stuff they call him hooded justice…ignoring the unoriginal name HALF OF HIS FACE is uncovered and he frequently goes back to his mother…you honestly expect me to buy no one in the vicinity managed to track him down by now?...really?

-Position/Class is used to equate your character to a videogame equivalent (rpg classes, moba roles, FPS position placement)

-Semblances are set in stone, I don’t think even multiple personality disorder (that he doesn’t have as far as I can see) would give you a fluctuating semblance

-Nothing in his back-story indicates he dances…at all. He spends his time helping people on the street…unless he helps them by dancing in order to get a smile out of them (which given your textbook personality I doubt it) his fighting style having dancing moves make no sense…at all

-Ruby was considered a major surprise to be able to join Beacon at 14, yours is at 13…it doesn’t work within the context of the show because HE should have been a BIGGER surprise.