Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27447621-20160508230102/@comment-7742259-20160515023927

HookshotHotshot wrote: RayStrikeAbius wrote: 1) Using a specific Pokemon as a naming inspiration. I personally take points off for that.

2) Minimum age for being a student Hunter is 17. Unless you're trying to be a special snowflake like Ruby (who is the main character of the show and has vastly hidden potential superpowers, so she can get away with it).

3) An emblem is not something that mystically appears on-and-off on the body. It is either a tattoo, or something that appears on clothing to symbolize the character.

4) Being something such as a Hunter typically requires being physically healthy. You're describing this character as though she's anorexic.

5) That's too much background even by MY standards.

6) Cold thief with a troubled past; how very original. And someone who isn't just distant with her teammates, but straight up doesn't bother to remember who they are, should not be on a team of any sort.

7) No relationships with canon characters. That is highly frowned upon.

8) Barrels on the fingertips? Where the f*** is the ammo stored? RWBY may be fantastic, but it at least bothers to keep the weapons visually sensible in how they function.

9) ................did you seriously give her two semblances? No. Just no. Agreed on all counts except for #1.  Especially agree with 6,7 and 8, and practically tore my hair out with the 2 Semblances. Choose one Semblance that does one thing, dude.

Also, How does a weapon "Suppress negative memories"? Is it a reminder of happier times, because that is the ONLY way I can see that working... Right, I tried to justify the 2 Semblance thing with the curse from the wizard and whatnot, and the second is giving a weapon its own artifical Semblance-esque effect with a "mechanical Aura," but... Eh. I don't even like the OC I made myself now that I look at her. Like I said:

"Eh, I will admit she was rushed and admittedly one of my worst OC's to date. I was doing this to cure my writer's block if even just a little... which it apparently didn't help with.

Sorry to have made you read that for that pointless reason. And thanks for at least telling me how to improve upon this rushed, horrid OC. ^^; I'll get back to fixing her and hopefully my writer's block shows some mercy while I do so."

Again, sorry for any offense towards the thread or the Lore for making this OC the way I did. ^^;