Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150111054847/@comment-25555436-20150115212908

LOL. Yeah, forgot to say that if the user's body dies, the Semblance ends and...well, the user dies. So one way or another, you must keep that body alive. Making every use of this Semblance an Escort Mission or Protect Yourself.

Strong enough Auras may allow one to be aware to different degrees of the "Intruder", if strong enough even kick it out forcefully or retain control of their own body to a point. Pain (but not damage) received by the controlled person will be felt by both the Intruder and it's body (if it left part of it's soul behind).

Controlling someone for too long (more than 1 minute) quickly drains one's Aura, and when ending the controlling the user is left mentally exhausted for a few seconds or minutes based on how long it controlled the target, and if the target resisted how much.

There are ways to identify when someone is being controlled:

-Changes in the voice (deeper/higher, blah blah).

-Black markings around the eyes.

-Eyes change to more...weird colors, along with looking more crystalline.

-And obviously, if the victim is acting out-of-character in some way.

Maximun amount of one's Soul that can be left behind: 30%. The less left behind, the easier is to perform the controlling, but the more...stupid, the original body will be.

at 30%: Acts very similar to the user, but more mentally and physically retarded. Can't speak and obeys any order the user tells it.

at 20%: Acts more like an animal than a person, moving and attacking more wildly and chaotically. Likely won't obey the user's orders.

at 10%: The body is just a husk that knows how to use a weapon at this point.

At 0%: The body drops lifeless like a ragdoll. After 40 seconds, it will start to die.

Can't be used on creatures without Soul (as the Semblance is more controlling someone's soul), dead creatures or creatures with strong enough Souls and Auras. Also can't be used if the user is under mental pressure of some kind (like a headache).

Any better? Though to be honest, it wasn't even designed for RWBY, just made some tweaks to see if it could work as a Semblance.