Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25857155-20150630215852/@comment-25857155-20150708165352

Our fourth competitor is Cyrania de Bergerac's Ronald Ruaidhri.

1)  Basic Info: 17 /20 Alright, works for me.  Aura does not affect people like that as far as we know, so minus two for noncanon. Horseback riding belongs under likes/dislikes.  If he has weak eyes and ears, what kind of injury was it?  Is there no scar?  (minus one)

2) Appearance: 17/20 More hair detail, minus one.  Formal and casual outfits need more detail, minus two.  Does the suit have a white shirt under it, for example?  What kind of light blue shirt?

3)  Characteristics: 26/35 Oh thank god, one that doesn’t take up multiple pages.
 * Personality (11/15) – Ok, sounds decent.  Needs more detail, especially about how he interacts with other people (minus 2). What about likes/dislikes? (Minus two.)
 * Background (15/20) – Rough grammar, work on that a bit.  How did he get his announcer job to begin with?  Why was he pulled into the movies? (minus two)  What kind of injury did he sustain that damaged his hearing and eyesight – was it poison, was it clawing, does he have scars? (minus one) How did he manage to get involved in politics?  Did he have  a degree or some other qualification for such jobs? (minus 2)

4) Combat Info:  9.5/25 - I have no idea what Etrian Odyssey is.
 * Weapon: (2/5) One part boring, one part done before – decently functional, I suppose.
 * Semblance: (3/10) – Ehhh, not sure about directly effecting emotions, but I suppose it works.  It would be especially useful if we had canon info on the effects of emotions on Aura.  Since we don’t, this one kind of lacks substance.
 * Fighting Style: (1/5) - Hm.  Very nonspecific.  Also, no prior mention of medicinal skill.
 * Landing Strat: (3.5/5) – Wow, detail.  Nice work.  Pretty plain, but kudos for detail.

5) Trivia: (total minus one!) Add a point for the additional background (put it in the background next time), and subtract two for not having any CNR explanation.

All of this combined gives Cyrania de Bergerac's Ronald Ruaidhri a total score of 68.5/100.