Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-24534644-20160802001817/@comment-24534644-20160823230143

Alright folks, sorry for the delay. It's now finally time for me to start handing out judgements for these lovely characters you've all sent in. Again, first time doing this, but I certainly like to think of myself as a fair and honest judge... sometimes to a fault. We'll see how that goes. So let's begin! First up on the chopping block is Sentry616 with his OC Portokall Rooi.

Basic Info: 14/15. Looks good for the most part. I'm assuming that the colors red and orange were chose at least in part due to the association of crabs with the color red (even though they're only that color when they're cooked, as they're actually green, gray, or brown in nature). The naming is a bit simple, but it works. Personally I feel the name would sound better flipped around, as Rooi sounds better as a first name than Portokall, but that's just a personal thing, as the name is fine otherwise. Unfortunately, you didn't put down anything in the Physical Traits section. And while I can assume that you might have done that because there are no physical traits of note, in that case you should have put down "nothing of note" or something along those lines. As it is, I have to dock a point.

Appearance: 16/20. As for the personal appearance parts, everything checks out. Again, red is the theme, and I understand why. However, the issue comes at the Outfit(s). You put multiple, and that is helpful, but the Armor outfit - arguably the most important one and the one that most people care about - is woefully under-explained. "Based on a crab's shell". That... doesn't really do anything to help me visualize it, other than making me think of that weird crab/lobster dude who got killed in One Punch Man. So I did dock a few points here for severe lack of details.

Characteristics: 26/30. Pretty run-of-the-mill stuff. Basic family background, involvement of a business that helps explain where the training comes from without making them super well known. Something I feel is missing is where exactly these people are... it's never specified whether they're in Vale or Mistral or Vacuo or what, on on what coast for that matter. Location is important, if only to get a better idea of how the other traits play into things. For example, the dislike of deserts would be particularly notable if she were from Vacuo. On the topic of the the likes and dislikes, they don't do much for the character since most people tend to like those things anyways, though the mentioning of crab pinching was good for a little laugh. The personality is good, but could be improved by including a notable flaw (unless she's the overly-emotional sort, in which case I suppose tht could be one, but meh).

Trivia: 4/5. The relationships themselves are good, but I would have to ask what the heck she's been fighting in for the past 2 years of her Huntress training if she's only just now being offered armor by one of her friends. Her regular clothes? This is why those details are needed in the outfit section.

Weapon: 9/10. I like them, they're an unusual take on the claw-weapon approach by using crab claws as opposed to razor blades or such. However, an important detail is that crab claws do not slash. They're pincers. They pinch. And unless there are also sharp bladed components (which it doesn't look like there are), then the only thing the claws would do is catch a target between the pincers and either crush them, or guillotine them. The hose component is really fun though; finally a useful application of Water Dust! (I'm assuming it's Water Dust since it's a hose, but in the future you're supposed to put down the type of Dust used as well). If that same water just is ejected underwater to help with swimming, then that just makes it even better.

Semblance: 9/10 I'm gonna go ahead and interpret this as operating akin to Byakugan, just much more limited. All in all it works well. If the Semblance is based off a fusion of her natural intuition as well as her familiarity with water, then it works well for her character. Only nitpick is that the range seems a bit too short to be useful most of the time, assuming that the range you mentioned is for out-of-water only.

Combat Info: 10/10. Yes, I can certainly see how she'd be crowd control with those weapons of hers, XD. The weapons happen to be perfect for giving her a landing strategy, and the fighting style is just... well, appropriately vicious. Crabs can be brutal.

Overall Point Total: 88. Pretty good, but most point reductions same from lack of information in areas.