Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25405817-20160511154306/@comment-25405817-20160518131638

45.37.20.83 wrote: I meant when I said he was in Wendy's old guild I meant have him there wails is was around and join fairy tail at the same time as Wendy

Ok how about lisana or Mira as the main love interest or something

And dude it's a basis nothing more so of course it is basic I proof-read it, so that others can understand what you're asking:

I meant when I said  " he  will be  in Wendy's old guild     ,"     I meant have him  appear there  when it is still around and join Fairy Tail the same time as Wendy.

Ok ,  how about Lisana or Mira as the main love interest or something.

And dude ,  it's a basis ,  nothing more , so of course it is basic .

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Now, the fact that it is a concept only (not a "basis," that's semantics error) doesn't excuse the lack of propper structure and concreteness over your ideas. People have to guess what is it that you want, and because of how imprecise you are we can't guess correctly what do you want to do with this story. Like Cyrania said, it gives little credence to the story concept, because it gives off the impression that you, the person who wrote this, are an Elementary Student, someone who is learning propper grammar. And in Fanfiction writing, you'll be eaten alive unless you improve this aspect.

Your concept is okay, but you need to take into account some things:


 * What you want to do boils down to a Slash-Fic . Some people might like it, but those are too common, to the point that they are not special.


 * If you're gonna thrust Jaune into the Fairy Tail world at the beginning of the canon series, you are obligated to change the course of events . If you plan to just tell the same thing that happens in the anime, only that with Jaune in there, then that's a red-flag that'll tell people to avoid your story.


 * Be sure you have a believeable bridge to Cross Jaune over to the Fairy Tail world. A believeable bridge won't break the suspension of disbelief . "Dust transporting Jaune over" is NOT a believeable bridge.