Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25936766-20170228175626/@comment-25936766-20170319234232

Next is Cyrania de Bergerac and ohmygodthattextissowhiteIcan’tseeI’mgoingblindohmygodmypooreyes.

Ahem….Arbusto Strider.

Basic Info= 10/10pts

-……………………Mind telling me just where did you find anything that said “Drus are male dryads in greek mythology”? Because I’ve looked everywhere, and I literally cannot find anything that mentions any druses in anything greek.

Yes, I also looked in the Mythology wikia, and there was nothing there about them either. There was about DRYADS, but not Druses. Not even their article mentions them.

This is important because, well, if I can’t verify that Druses even exist, I’m inclined to NOT count it, and if I do that, it’s the same as you not participating since as far as I know you wouldn’t be following the theme.

I’ll still review and put points. For the moment you don’t count as a participant, but if you can give me a reliable source that explains what a Drus is, then I can count you in and then compare your score with the others.

-…Those must be the easiest-to-explain nicknames I’ve seen in this entire competition. Arb is literally just a shortened version of his name, and Red…just requires some red.

-The Team Acronym, same as with Maki: All T.A.s in the show are English words, and Lapis….well, it depends on what you meant. I assume “Lapis as in Lapis Lazuli”, but Lapis in itself is Latin for Stone. Again, not going to drop points for this.

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Appearance= 10/10pts

-A guy with a name that alludes to something with a distinctive red…wears a green hood. Eh, Robin Hood much?

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Background= 17/20pts

-…And first thing I get is that he preferred to live outside civilization, with "connection" to forests….just like Robin Hood and his pretty Sherwood Forest. Granted, Robin did it because he was an outlaw for the most part, but still.

-…”and spunk”…I see someone checked out their thesaurus recently.

-It’s…rather sudden the way Arbutus suddenly decides to become a Hunter right when they get to Mistral, especially since that involves staying for years in the civilization (alongside it’s people) he didn’t like so much.

I assume Lily inspired him to do it, but if so it would’ve been nice if you had mentioned it.

-And there is the explanation for Red.

-…Oh no, it became a romance novel all of a sudden. Oh my god, this won’t end well. Romance means someone will die.

-“Arbutus had never had a chance to go to one before and he wasn’t going to miss out on the chance and the other three hadn’t actually ever been to one”…So, you mean none of them had ever gone to a Vytal Festival? Would’ve been much simpler to just say that.

-….Kind of an abrupt ending….besides that, honestly, I don’t have many complains for this backstory compared to the others. Probably because the story doesn’t require me to push my suspension of disbelief so much.

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Personality= 10/10pts

-No real problems here either.

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Relationships= 3/5pts

-Mmm…the relationships aren’t as fleshed out as the previous OC’s. With Lily it’s not as important since most of it is developed in the backstory, but for the rest…

-I don’t know about you, but “Pewter” sounds 100% masculine to me. And that doesn’t seem to have a point in her case, like she just happens to have a masculine name for the heck of it. A more feminine alternative would’ve been Zinc (Pewter is possibly derived from Spelter, a term for Zinc alloys).

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Trivia= 5/5pts

-Trivia is fine….except for the fact I still can’t find anything about the Drus, but still.

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Weapon= 10/10pts

-….And he even uses a bow! That’s 3 in a row. Nothing much to say about it besides that though. It’s a simple bow, there’s nothing else to say. Besides the weird choice for a name (Maple Syrup? Seriously?).

-Then there’s a grappling hook gauntlet, and again there’s nothing much to say about it. Alongside the normal bow, this is a pretty “boring/simple but practical” approach, and in a world where everyone uses some fancy tech weapons, the simplicity becomes more special.

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Semblance= 8/10pts

-Name is………weird. “Hide and Seek” sounds perfectly fine on it’s own. Or maybe just “Camouflage”? Since that’s literally what it does.

-I don’t quite understand what you mean by “requires a tree”. The Semblance makes an illusion that makes him look like part of the foliage of whatever forest (or similar) he’s in. I don’t see how that requires a tree, or any kind of specific plants. I mean, he would just make himself look like a tree of the same kind as the ones near him, no?

-Reflection of Personality= 4/5pts For the most part, I see how it reflects it. Except the last sentence, the part of taking care of himself and (later on) caring for others, I don’t quite see that in the Semblance. But I do see everything else.

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Combat Info= 5/5pts

-He’s….basically just your traditional archer + a grappling hook. Not much needs to be said.

Total Points= 10+10+17+10+3+5+10+12+5 = 37 + 18 + 27 = 82pts.

After judging the backstory I had this feeling you could win……..emphasis on could, because I still can’t find anything about the Drus.