Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-30530552-20171101175001/@comment-30530552-20171126015847

Yeah, well hopefully this one I'm posting right now will be less problematic. Speaking of which, next up we have SYUTK with Keyara Pengwyn.

Basic Info - 10/10 - No nicknames I guess then. Pretty standard, even with a mixed-handed individual like her.

Appearance - 20/20 - Physique-wise, slimness works but might be easier to see if she dropped a kilogram or so, but isn’t ding-worthy. The links help immensely.

Backstory & Characteristics - 21/30 - Reads Parts 1-3, thinks - ‘looks good so far.’ Reads Parts 4-6, says - ‘damn, that’s dark’ ...but I suppose it fits with what you usually write, so...don’t know that I was expecting sunshine and rainbows. Hmm...slight-canon interaction in Parts 5-6, I’ll let it slide with a deduction because the two were  physically interacting directly with each other, but we never did see what Ironwood did in Vale after his ship crashed and he met up with Qrow and Glynda. Considering how similar surfing and snowboarding are conceptually, I’ll assume she was about as bad as she was with surfing. Her complex doesn’t seem to really fit with her asocial personality too well in my opinion but does fit her life-experiences. I’ll assume it’s just my idiocy based on your wording, or some form of miscommunication.

Trivia - 2/5 - I see what you mean about missing the personality section points. I might allow you to make up a couple of those points if you go through the effort to do it. Nobility is very vague, CNR-wise. “Queen” is also pretty vague, on that same note. By the way, is there a specific age when they moved to Menagerie from Mistral, out of curiosity? Might receive more points if you go for additional explanation, (EDIT: but given your final tally it might not be necessary other than for solidification). Pengu almost makes up for it, but that’d seem too  trivial. Good job sticking with the theme though.

Weapon - 13/15 - First part is a little confusing, but thank you for trying to explain it. I think I understand it, it’s almost like having a pair of scissors, in a general orientation of the blades, yes? Everything else doesn’t need noting for anything problematic.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:14pt;margin-bottom:15pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Semblance - 15/15 - You explained all my questions, nothing of note to add.

<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:8pt;margin-bottom:8pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Combat Info - 4/5 - “While she doesn't stumble or have significant issues with her weapon, <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:700;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">without her weapon she's notably less efficient at it's use. <span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">” My first intention is to say “Well, duh, if she doesn’t have her weapon she’d be ineffective at using it.” Does this refer to her using her Semblance to wield her weapon? It’s slightly unclear.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:8pt;margin-bottom:8pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">(10+20=30)+(21+2=23)+(13+[15+4=19]=32) = 30+(23+32=55)=85

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:8pt;margin-bottom:8pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">Pretty solid...but before you pop your champagne we’ll see what Cyrania and Phantom have next up, in that order. Expect those within the next day or two unless I say otherwise.

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<p dir="ltr" style="line-height:1.38;margin-top:8pt;margin-bottom:8pt;"><span style="font-size:11pt;font-family:Arial;color:#d5d4d4;font-weight:400;font-variant:normal;text-decoration:none;vertical-align:baseline;white-space:pre-wrap;">If this formatting fucks up maybe I'll just switch to actually manually typing the fucking things into this terrible editor which 50% of the time eats the post.