Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-27082610-20170424154014/@comment-26283771-20170426000751

SomeoneYouUsedToKnow wrote: Agent ND wrote:

I'm not saying that I can't, I just didn't know that was bad when I started. You did say before that you haven't made a Mary Sue, though. That you even checked it and tried not to make one. It was said with a sure-enough tone too.

Then it turns out your OC already has a big MS trait right out of the gate: Pre-established!Friendship with a main character, and in a way that defies the show in the process.

I mean, the OC being already friend from back at Signal with Ruby, is worse than, say, meeting her at Beacon. While both are MS traits, the former is worse.

Speaking of Signal, Ruby had 2 years left to graduate and get to Beacon. She skipped those years thanks to Ozpin. So, how did your OC meet Team RWBY enough to seemingly become at least an acquaintance like you said in the last thread?

I mean, assuming Odin was at the same year Ruby was, by the time he gets to Beacon, if it even is functional, RWBY would be 3rd years, if they are even still studying at Beacon and not, say, saving the world.

Speaking of relationships, you mention that he had a "mentor/apprentice relationship" with Qrow. Since you point it out, I assume it wasn't the normal teacher-student relationship? Yeah, I did say it like that didn't I.

Odin was two years ahead of her at Signal when he met her, so they both went to Beacon at the same time. I haven't gone over this in the fanfic, or a whole lot of the background of Odin in the story, though I probably should.

The thing with Qrow was, as he and Ruby were friends and hung out now and again, Qrow was around (You know, being protective). He got to know him, and Odin began to admire him, even constructing his weapon in a semi-similar fashion. It's nothing huge, but yeah.

One more thing about Ruby, was that in the fanfic I made it so he ended up having a bit of a crush on her, and Yang hinting that she sorta likes him back, BUT HOLD ON before I get shouted into oblivion, I'm not really planning on it going anywhere, not fast anyway. Just to provide a comedic moment now and again.

My goal was to have it stick to the main story line, Pyrrha dying, Yang becoming sans an arm, etc., just with a few tweaks here and there to fit my own team/friends in. It's going to keep the essentials, and after the Fall of Beacon, still have Ruby go with the rest of JNPR without anyone else (probably). That's where I'll really go somewhere else with it.