Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20160319212213/@comment-27997419-20160320133228

VedranTheII wrote: A bit late on the money but Phantom, when DC called posting another oc immediately after his rude it was because he thought everyone would ignore his submission in favor of the latest one, which kind of happened…with that said.

DeletedContent wrote: -Name: Legere Nebulosus I’m with phantom on the part that naming an oc’s personality after their name is iffy…willing to let that slide on the technicality that it’s a family name so it’s not something parents had any control over...would have preferred if his hair was grey as opposed to black since black clouds are not a very common phrase I hear anymore but…eh, his appearance sort of links to the name, if barely. Get a better misc trait…people that don’t budge an inch while talking stand out a lot harder than one that does….imOfc.

Physically he’s kind of bland…dark eyes on dark hair just makes me think of Junior’s goons, and without the mask he would be one color change away from wearing the same outfit…also you haven’t fixed the bigger problems of the back-story.

How he lost his arm is unexplained, and the mentor now wasn’t mentioned until after he ambushed his entire team, making him come out of nowhere and not in a good way. Your character STILL got the drop on him AND the entire group he used to ambush him in the first place despite being injured and teamless, and this time he not only managed to do it without lethal force, but he somehow managed to cripple the mentor for life?...also you seem to be under the impression willingly permanently crippling someone won’t send you to jail? Who do you think you are, Nora?...sorry, no, you do not get to have him without any downtime in prison, in fact by all accounts he should stay there more since now the teacher can press charges.

Look, either admit your oc performed a criminal act, jail him, wait till he gets out and THEN decides to get a job, or have him be a runaway gun for hire…I at least don’t think you can have both, in Remnant or otherwise. I will also take this opportunity to give my two cents about that character.

He was a hunter at 20, and a mercenary at 21. So either he only did 1 mission as a hunter, the one which he got back stabbed in, or this maths makes no sense. He would have had to start at the academy at age 16 and graduated at exactly...which although not impossible it feels kind of unlikely based on his stats. Because if he was a prodigy at 16 he would definitely be much stronger by the time he finished his studies.

This brings me to his stats....they total 44, when a 1st year student (let's say an exceptional 1st year student) could total up to 45. Now...I'm adamant that he would have progressed past that 45 point threshold by the time he finished his studies. It would be near impossible for him to be the same strength as an average 2nd year student.... How does he even defeat his old teacher and the other fighters on his own if he's that weak??? How is he even a good mercenary? What kind of criminals is he after? Shoplifters?

Summary: The amount of time spent as an hunter doesn't add up, and his stats total of 44 also doesn't add up considering he has been a hunter, defeated his prior teacher and other fighters there, and is now a mercenary.