Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25229725-20150128010644/@comment-25396609-20150209062436

im considering readng the first chapter to get a better feel for it. i even tried reading *shuddders* twilight to justify my hatred. (mission acomplished, by the way. only took 2 chapters.) in this case it might help me to critique the character and give advice for improvement. one thing i can say for sure without reading it, though, is REMOVE THE GRIMM EYE. replace it with, say, an absorbed twin or something, make him have two semblances. may not make any more sense, but at least it would be somewhat more unique.