Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-3965075-20150620202833/@comment-26397825-20150715041230

Okay, I'm typing this as I read it. First thing up is - you might want to seperate him into three Character Sheets. Entry to Beacon, Early Hunter Career and Current.

Do we actually know that Qrow works directly under Ozpin? He was a teacher at Signal and gives Ozpin information, but I don't know if that means he actually works directly under Ozpin's command.

...Why would he be employed directly under the Headmaster of a Hunter Academy if he dropped out?

Do Aura change colour? I thought the colour was synonymous of your soul - and your soul doesn't change, even though your personality might. I could understand if it went black because he threw away his humanity or something, becoming a really negative and agressive person, but a pallete swap doesn't really mesh, in my opinion.

What's Dust Contamination? Considering Dust can be infused directly into the body, I don't see what this could be...

Why do his eyes change to silver when he gets older? Silver is Ruby's colour, a very significant fact at that.

Does he dye his hair? That's the only acceptable reason I can find for his hair changing like that.

Oh wow. Prodigal older brother, parents neglect Auryn to make sure he grows up to be perfect Hunter. Semblance at five, when your personality is still developing. And he managed to keep it form his family, then somehow knew his brothers Semblance before anyone else knew it, and used both Semblances against his brother to win a fight, and the parents called him a cowardly cheat and disliked him further.

Then his brother gets killed (Yay! Auryn gets everything he wanted handed to him on a silver platter, just like he always dreamed!) But wait, it's not everything he thought it would be, and somehow he knows Summer even though it isn't explained, and she helps him upgrade his weapons, and stuff happens like him losing an arm at the elbow and getting Dust Contamination (Which, seriously, what?).

Then wax on poetic about how he'll die a weapon, pointed at the enemy, so someone else can claim the victory. Great.

I'll leave the weapons and actual Semblance to people who know a bit more about them. I'm a people person, not a super power or weapon person, myself.

Oh, he was friends with TRQS (or QRTS, I still don't officially know the team leader yet), and Summer helped him out because he was friends with everyone. And he was raised by his familie's cat maid.

Oh my Gosh, the Tropes section has become the notes section. But the explanations of the meanings need to be condensed. And example would be "Blakaz Negling is named for Beowulf's sword, Negling being the sword, and Blakaz meaning burned or black." Shot, simple, gets the point across.

Now, seriously, split this guy into three character sheets. Beacon Entry, Early Hunter (which is kind of impossible for him since he dropped out of Beacon instead of just doing his last year...not that hard, even without an actual team) and Current.