Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171116191014/@comment-4136655-20171126231117

First off, thank you. And I apologize, I was using the template (though some things were merged into other aspects), though I will use the one up top in the future. HookshotHotshot wrote: I'll give you feedback, but for future reference, we do have a template up top. Please use it in the future.

Sinjoh wrote: I'd thought I'd get some feedback on some characters I'm creating. The team name is AGAT (from the gemstone agate). So far, I've got one character finished, with the rest closed to finished.

Core Info
Emblems are only one color and negative space. You can make the wisps negative space or something, but just use one color.
 * Emblem: A purple mountain peak with three white wind wisps.

I hadn't noticed that before for some reason, the wisps will then be negative space instead.

What color Orchid? I Googled "orchid" and got at least three different colors of flower; white, pink and purple. Everything else looks fine for the outfit.
 * Outfit: Aki's everyday outfit consists of an orchid colored t-shirt...

My apologies on that, it used a Color Hex site for colors from time to time, this is what I meant.

EDIT: Though I do have a small personal issue in that nothing besides slightly paler skin makes me think of "Wind" at all. Black hair, Blue eyes, pink/purple shirt and red pants. Her Blue jacket fits, but that's only used sometimes. But that's a personal problem that I had.

I went a little bit of a different route, partially because I was afraid of her looking too much like a Schnee.

Characteristics
I think what you mean to say here is that the grandmother persuaded the Father and Aunt to let them go to Beacon? I mean, persuading the kids to go to Beacon is fine, but they still need tuition money and transportation, which would come from the caregivers, right? I guess I should elaborate more on Aki's home life and family, such as the family live entirely in one home, and the oldest member of the Ishiyama family (which is Aki's grandmother) typically gets the final say on family matters. Also, only Aki is attending Beacon, her brother and cousin are still at home. While tuition doesn't seem to be an issue, as I don't recall any of the academies explicitly stating it, only an exam needed to be passed.
 * Background: Aki is a sixth generation Huntress from Yamayuri in Mistral. One of her ancestors founded the village, and used her abilities to defend the village from Grimm, thus cementing the Ishiyama family as powerful and prestigious in Yamayuri. From an early age, Aki, her brother, Kohaku, and cousin, Manami, were homeschooled both for their academics and their Huntsmen training... Despite her father and aunt's protests about tradition, Aki's grandmother was able to persuade her children to attend Beacon Academy.

Semblance
What's the range of the wind bursts? How far and how fast can she control the winds? Also, we have the problem present with all Elemental Semblances; Anyone can do the exact same thing as this Semblance with Wind Dust. It's fine, but it's not recommended to have an elemental Semblance.
 * Name: Aerokinesis
 * Description: Allows the user to manipulate air.
 * Activation cue: Movements from either the hand or Kaze Denryu and Kiryu. (For example if Aki moves her hand or weapon towards from left to right, a gust will also come follow that direction.)
 * Reflection of personality: Despite her Semblance being hereditary, it reflects Aki's versatility, being a balance of brain and brawn in battle.

Her range is about 50 ft, and her winds can get up to around 80 mph (enough to knock down a person). I guess the main difference between Dust and her Semblance would be range, outside of bullets, I think Dust has more of a limited range compared to freely manipulating the element itself.

WC-83 wrote: I think this template is fine (it's simply the same template but with some source shenanigans making it organized) though it's missing the Likes and Dislikes section for personality.

I was trying to merge them into the personality aspect, since likes and dislikes are typically dictated by a person's personality. Though, I should definitely expand more on her likes and dislikes.