Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26397825-20160518062840/@comment-24534644-20160524013029

I will point out every issue I have with this, in order.

1) Either you're trying excessively hard to emulate the Flash with this character, or you aren't and it's still extremely obvious. Is it really impossible for you to come up with a character concept that's not directly based on ANOTHER character from an anime or TV show or comic series?

2) A scroll does not count as a gadget on the template, literally everyone and their mother is supposed to have one.

3)  “Hey. I’m pretty fast, and I’m pretty smart. Maybe I could use that to get us back on track.” Just... FFS, why do people keep having their OCs resort to Hunting as a means to make cash quick? It does not work that way! These kids will be in training for YEARS before they're allowed to go out on their own and start making an income as Hunters. They will be making NO money in the meantime. Going into training is NOT a reasonable option if the goal is to find a way to make money for a failing family. Plus, it's entirely possible that, at ANY point, they could be considered unfit for the role and booted out, or they could die and that would be the end of it. And even if they DO succeed and graduate, they will be sent out on missions across the globe, for unknown periods of time, and with unknown pay. My god, it's like everyone thinks being a Huntsman is like a Get-Rich-Quick strategy. It's not. It's an extremely dangerous profession that, if you take a step back and look at the larger picture, only idiots would sign up for. The real pay for being a Hunter is the admiration and thanks of the people around you, not f***ing Lien.

4) Could you POSSIBLY be ANY more generic with his likes and dislikes? You're making an OC with a personality, not a freaking recruitment poster.

5) The Semblance. Just no. For one, STOP lifting abilities straight from other characters in other mediums and come up with something freaking original for a change. Second, try coming up with something that ISN'T OP as fuck.