Talk:Monty Oum/@comment-88.215.47.226-20150307213343/@comment-4010415-20150412093111

RWBY has pretty big flaws, especially in its writing and how its story is executed. Therefore, it is not the best webshow ever. Your personal opinion is that it's the best webshow you've ever watched, and it's one of your favorite webshows, if not your absolute favorite.

I love RWBY, a lot, and I intend to keep watching it as long as they continue to show it. But I acknowledge that it's not the greatest show. I hope they can continue improving, and I hope the quality of writing gets better.

Hell, if I could move to Austin and get myself hired just to work alongside Miles and Kerry and help write the episodes and scripts, I sure as hell would. I have a lot of ideas for how they could make the writing even less bad, especially since I tend to be a perfectionist when it comes to my writing. Not just in the way that I construct the sentences, but also in the way that the story flows and such. I also have a habit of using "Show, don't tell," even in writing for something that is meant to be read, not watched.

For example, if there's going to be a short period of silence between the characters, rather than just writing something like "Everyone sat in awkward silence for a while," I write about what one of the characters is thinking or observing, or what the characters present are doing, so that it actually feels like everything was just quiet for a little while to the reader.

They need to find a balance of showing and telling, and find the right way to tell. So far, their telling is mostly exposition. They need to figure out how to use dialogue to express layers of information. Instead of outright saying and explaining something, they can have a character say something that can imply the message they want us to receive within the context of whatever we're shown, as well as with the way that it's phrased.

By the way, don't take the way that I type up comments and forum posts as how I write a story. It's nothing like the way I write a story. Just a heads up.