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Second in the lists is LiveandSound's Han Purpureus Lovecraft.

1)  Basic Info: 17/20 Minus four points for no physical or miscellaneous traits listed – at the very least, put none.  Earned one back for explaining the CNR right there rather than waiting for the Trivia section.  (We should make that standard.)

2) Appearance: 17/20 – Decent, if a bit boring.  “Somewhat below average” is not a good descriptor of physique; give something like “fairly small of build with low muscle-mass.”  Minus one for that, and minus two for his outfits, which are fitting, but still boring.

3)  Characteristics: 30/35
 * TL;DR.  No, I’m joking – it was a near thing, though.  Sheesh – detail is nice, but you went a bit overboard.  The first question that comes to mind – why did his granddad tell him such a dark story?  Was he a bit touched?  It sounds like it may have been a bit much for a kid to hear.   “Madness mantra” – please describe.  “A few years later, Han fell due to an overdose…”  Fell?  Fell ill, fell down, fell in love, fell asleep, fell into a coma, fell as in ‘died’… be more specific.  Oh wait, he died – ok. Kudos for being one of the first to write an already-dead character.  18 for background.  Decent personality, if depressingly lacking in detail compared to background – 11.

4) Combat Info: 12/25
 * Weapon: 3/5 – Decent, but could use some more detail on the placement of the cannon and the form of the weapon itself.
 * Semblance: 5/10 - Next time, please put it in the post (I don’t mind the link that much; it’s just a bit of a nuisance). I do like the semblance; it’s pretty good for the character, too.  Decent limitations.  The main complaint I have about it is the lack of detail on potential uses.  Are the figures corporeal (I would assume so, but please clarify)?  You call it buff-utility, but I don’t see any buff or utility listed there – summoning is hardly a buff or utility.  Good Dust application description.
 * Fighting Style: 2/5 Sounds like an artillery/nuker.  Wouldn’t mind seeing an actual description of HOW he fights, rather than just where or when he fights.
 * Landing Strat: 2/5 Semblance use?  Yes.  Jacket parachute?  No, not unless he has a specialized suit jacket for that stuff, in which case you should have put that in his outfit.

5) Trivia: +1 - You misspelled mysterious, but the themes are a nice addition.

These things combined give LiveandSound's Han Purpureus Lovecraft a total score of 77/100.