Thread:Zathronas/@comment-50.153.134.7-20140205041024

Hey, I know you're not a fan of fanfiction, but I've been working on a RWBY story called "Worth Remembering", and If it's not too much trouble, could you have a look?

It's a little more than five pages, but what I really want your feedback on are chapters 1 and 12. Chapter 1 introduces my Original Character, his relationship with the cast, his motivations, and the general plot of the story. Chapter 12 takes all this and throws it on it's head.

All you really need to know about what happened between those chapters boils down to this:

A man calling himself "King" showed up, it's clear that he's dangerous and knows there's a war coming. He's working with Ozpin to build an army to fight that war, but Ozpin doesn't trust him.

Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9819614/1/Worth-Remembering

Thank you for your time. 