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And now for #4. It's time to look at VedranThell's entry, Alaxander Right.

Basic Info: 15/15. Definitely like the name, as a person who's main OC team gimmick is having them all be named after gemstones, I can give this guy's name an official thumbs up. As for the best of the information, it looks good. I like the sideburns. Magnificent sideburns are magnificent.

Appearance: 19/20. My word, another red aura. Did I miss something? What is this fascination with the color red? Heh... well, the appearance itself all checks out fine. Lots of details in the outfits, which I like. A bit odd that an axe of all things is included in the gadgets section, as I'd think that would be placed as a secondary weapon, even if it is primarily utility. Still, I can accept it being there.

Characteristics: 30/30. A fun background. The personality was tied in quite well with his history. A fun attitude and strong morals, but also severe difficulty maintaining interest with the status quo, which makes it difficult to be on friendly terms with him. I like that this caused a falling out with his team; as jerk of a thing it is to say, it gets boring when every single team has members that are super buddy-buddy with each other. Personality also matches the character basis very well (and in fact almost seems to have been modeled directly after sagittarius), so points for that. Cheers for including the horse riding in there, that also makes for a fun reference to the basis.

Trivia: 5/5. Good all around. Notes helped to clarify a few things, as well as adding some points to other departments (yay horses).

Weapon: 10/10. Quite original, I have to say. I like the idea of people tying musical intruments in with weapons, and RWBY seems like it'd be great for that, but I've personally always had difficulty imagining anything more complex than a guitar/battleaxe (which is so cliche it hurts). ssentially it makes him into a Magic Archer, it looks like. I approve.

Semblance: 9/10. So it's like... afterimages that can be controlled. Interesting, I'm used to seeing such Semblances given to physical-combat characters, not ranged ones. Still, you specify that it costs extra aura to have the echos do a spell... but based on his weapona and fighting style, it looks like he uses dust spells and attacks 90% of the time, which makes that a pretty drastic flaw if it would drain aura that quickly.

Fighting Style: 9/10. So he's like a Bard class, essentially (specifically the variant that doesn't sing, just makes music). Uses a bow, fights from a distance, uses combat spells with dust in the form of musical notes. Which, tied in with his traveling, would make him into the wayward minstrel character. I like it. As for the fighting style itself, it fits the character, though I admittedly have difficulty imagining how one can shoot arrows to make a path in midair... unless the arrows somehow burst into footholds, but even then gravity would just pull said footholds down with him, so they really wouldn't help much.

Overall Point Total: 97. Everthing looks good. A couple things that didn't make as much sense, but by and large just minor nitpicks.