Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20171207232020/@comment-27447621-20180129025022

Shiyilang wrote:

Thanks.

That's probably what I get though. I never have good luck

Though even so, I'd like feedback.

[screams internally] If it makes you feel any better, I did something similar back in August: the theme was "Royalty", but I didn't know that at the time. Somebody (pretty sure it was Ray) posted an idea that made me think of a Crook and Flail weapon pair, and I posted them without realizing what the contest theme was, meaning I couldn't use those as weapons for a competitor.

Here's what I have in terms of feedback.

I'm curious about how she started her business while in Sanctum (buying materials etc.) and how well she actually fares in combat having ended her Combat Education early, but the backstory and personality look pretty good

How does she draw to activate spells? Does the tablet read the drawing and the Dust she's using and connect the dots from there? If, for example she draws a tornado and is using water Dust, would a Water Spout appear?

Also, besides being a neat reference to her theme as a designer and its use for powerful sneak attacks, I hope she's a great artist. It's hard to draw quickly with enough accuracy for a computer to know what you're drawing while also doing it in the middle of combat.

Hmm. That Semblance is a tad tricky. I suppose my first question would be "How does she know what she's enhancing?" Would she be able to enhance a complete stranger's Semblance if she didn't know what it does?

The rest of it looks like a really well developed character. Great job!