Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20150301171157/@comment-24993958-20150308232817

Let me just CTRL+F that and …oh…that one…well… since you asked…*inhales*

Semblance…your description suggests it’s a targeted skill with a 30m range..no…just…no; Skillshot or bust; I’d also go with Temptation as a name.

His backstory has a severe case of why syndrome…let me demonstrate:
 * Detective agency whose existence stayed a secret…why? That just makes them vigilantes as opposed to law enforcers. So either they are government funded or against it…that could use some mentioning.
 * Never like Faunus and treats them as criminals…why? Certainly can’t be peer pressure if his family is keeping their trade a secret, and you go to the trouble of mention no one else has it...granted I do know of people that are irrationally racist…but they are all self aware it’s stupid and never pushed it on me.
 * Didn’t mention if the killer was a faunus…why? Was he not one, was he masked…he went there solely to see if he was right this isn’t something you can just leave out…
 * He knew he would likely die but went there anywhere…why? There is such a thing as backup…you have a FAMILY of detectives…you thought they wouldn’t want to stop a killer on the off chance he was a faunus or where you to proud to ask for help against a case you knew would potentially kill you…are we sure he got insane from the explosion or that it only got confirmed after it…
 * He became a detective hunter…you know I’ll forgive him for that one since he is officially loco now…

Overall he’s…well he’d make a decent B list Batman villain…and no his semblance wouldn’t bump him to A…every named character in that series is to screwed in the head to be affected by it.