Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25555436-20141207154400/@comment-23790511-20141208224501

I have an idea for a graphic novel instead of a show, seems more obtainable that way. I've been going through the works of it for years but only recently I've come up with the name "Iron Desire." It takes place on a world not too dissimilar from ours, but there's three major factions: Majestic13, who colonized the world hundreds of years back for it to house prisoners of their other colonies. However, they found themselves stranded on that world when one day all communication to the outside was lost and no new shipments or supplies came in per schedule.

After years of panic and rapid resource consumption, Majestic13 leaders slips apart forming The Slates (as in a clean slate). The Slates managed to push Majestic far to the north and unofficially won the Civil war. For years, the Slates would turn their prison facilities into cities and slowly recreate a familiar home.

How did the Slates win the Civil war and overwhelm their former superiors? Turns out before Majestic decided to set up their prisons on the world, it was once inhabited by a race of organic seeds that grew and occupied a humanaoid shell: The Golems. An unknown cataclysmic event wiped the Golems and their cities but not their time capsules that remained deep within the earth. These time capsules are essentially data-caches that store a variety of knowledge, and The Slates luckily dug up one that jump started their weaponry and armaments way ahead of their time and with minimal resources to boot. With it, they have become the dominant military force and governing body for the world with Majestic isolated far north in barren wastelands.

However, Majestic found their own time capsule, and arguably a more valuable one. It contained eight Golem seeds, but only one shell. The first Golem to be "born," Wiseman, was a being of unparalleled strength, intelligence, and willpower. He was set loose upon The Slates and caused destruction that ravaged their forces despite their advanced weaponry. It seemed he would single-handedly bring victory back into the hands of Majestic.

But he didn't. Golems require stimuli for satisfaction and pleasure in much different ways than that would apply to humans. While nobody could be sure what caused Wiseman to snap, when he went AWOL he began attacking everything without discrimination. Slates, civilians, men, women, and children were senselessly slaughtered by Wiseman who eventually turned on Majestic. Luckily a fail safe was in place which knocked Wiseman out and allowed Majestic the time to lock him away farther down into the earth.

This setback didn't stop Majestic for long. They soon implanted the seeds into human corpses instead. Under the brilliant and revolutionary mind of Mathias Darko, Edwin was successfully born despite being extremely disfigured. As time went on and each seed was implanted one after another, the newer Golems became sleeker and more refine. Soon the last seven golem seeds would birth Edwin, Ezeckial, Trager, Talia, Lwyn, Jay, and finally the main protagonist Cinthy. While they were not nearly as powerful as the pure golem Wiseman, they proved to be strong well on their own. Possessing strength, speed, and endurance that would make even the strongest man look physically unfit in comparison, it seemed Majestic had finally found their perfect soldiers to take on the Slates and dominate the worlds supply of resources to attempt to go back home.

Ha, nope. Turns out all except Ezeckial and Cinthy (whom had recently been integrated with the rest of them) were fed up of being experimented on, trained nonstop for combat, and being looked at as if they were abominations. Mere days after Cinthy was introduced into her family; Edwin, Trager, and Talia managed to somehow set off a massive lower failure across the research facility and led the others into freedom. When they reached the surface after Trager caused a distraction by releasing all the failed Golem experiments, they found themselves going separate ways, their familial ties disregarded in the face of freedom.

Flash forward a few years and Cinthy has managed to lay low in the tropical city of Diamondhead where she plays off her clearly cyborg features as armor to help her as a mercenary. She has lived in relative peace, wondering where the others went but not paying much mind to it. However, after she witnesses Trager killing abunch of Slates insurrectionists, (Trager joined the people he was trained to hate and kill) she tries to reveal herself to him, but intervenes and saves one of them, Ralis Harlem, by accident by taking the bullet. She and Ralis manage to escape but now they both have been marked by Trager. In the meantime, a now heavily upgraded Ezeckial begins an operation under order of the current M13 president, Elijah Branner, to capture all Golems and reeducate them in their coming resurgence against the Slates.

After Cinthy and Ralis escape back to Diamondhead, Ralis discovers that Cinthy is a Golem. Ralis reveals that she has valuable information that could both overthrow the current commander-in-chief of the Slates, Sullivan Keyes, and reunite Cinthy with Wiseman and possibly get answers about herself which soul-searching couldn't do.

Now what follows is a story I want to tell that revolves around themes of dysfunctional families, endless cycles of violence one-upping previous violence, the price of not paying attention to global events, self-esteem, and emotion in its best and worst forms. Hopefully when I become more skilled at photoshop and fully commit part of my time and energy to this, I can make "Iron Design" more reality through a Graphic Novel.

Any thoughts on my rough draft?