User blog comment:LastZephyr/RWBY OC Fanfic: NOT Court Royale/@comment-68.38.215.106-20130312034239/@comment-24180428-20130312204758

I'm sorry but this character is really unintresting. He uses a random dagger that may or may not even be an affective weapon due to you not specifying if this is a targe or a katar for example. "Dark matter magic" requires a ridiculas amount of assumtions since you don't specify what powers it grants him (such as enhanced durability, intelegence, projectiles, etc). Your grammer could use some improvement as well. Now I know this is not my fanfic, nor can I deny your character, but I feel the need to reccomend you edit him to make him more intresting. (I am not attacking you I merly wish to help your character be less boring.)