Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-30530552-20180502010142/@comment-30530552-20180531200455

Our final submission is from Shiyilang, with their submission Vira Lisianthus.

Basic Info - 9/10 - Loss of a point due to a lack of detail to the description of the emblem. Another thing: typically the first name is where your color association is supposed to come from, but through some research, Vera can also mean “summer” in Albanian, which could imply the associated colors, so no loss there.

Appearance - 18/20 - By technicality, I wouldn’t call her buff, as her BMI puts her smack dab in “normalweight,” whereas by how I interpret ‘buff,’ she’d need to have a higher BMI. Even still, athleticism seems fair to assume here, and the drawing helps me visualize her nicely. The descriptions and outfits themselves also seem fine, so you still retain most of your points.

Backstory - 17/20 - Hmm, the story itself works, even if it does seem a little contrived, yet I do have reason to believe rich parents can be that dickish, so no issues there. I do question how she managed to beat those two boys up so easily...perhaps that’ll get explored later? For now, I’m gonna stick that slightly out of the realm of possibility. Based on how things have been described here, it would seem Vira’s lesbian, which is a nice touch of inclusiveness.

The Rest - 10/10 - All in order, and all makes sense.

Trivia - 5/5 - Allusion makes sense and the rest of the info seems fine. Good job on describing the relationships and explaining the CNR.
 * Characteristics Overall - 27/30

Weapon - 13/15 - I was about to ding you for not describing the katana until I saw the Semblance inventory below. No real issues here, though I feel you could’ve done more. I assume by main-wheel, you mean fire, earth, wind, and water?

Semblance - 13/15 - You did a decent job in trying to balance out the ability, and it fits very well with the allusion. The reflection of character is somewhat “eh” for this particular Semblance, but nonetheless it’s a solid and powerful Semblance in combat.

Combat Info - 5/5 - “Quickly eradicate Grimm quickly”: only way to do it. Nonetheless, all of it makes sense and works perfectly well.

Day to Day Life (Optional) - +1 Point - I was considering offering a second point for the extra details on Vira’s job, but as a bodyguard, it’s a pretty straightforward job, so I won’t. This extra point comes from your earlier drawing for helping out in visualization.

9 + 18 + 17 + 10 + 5 + 13 + 13 + 5

27 + 27 + 18 + 18

45 + 45 = 90 + 1 = 91

Total: 91 points

Now onto the placement post.