Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20160319212213/@comment-24993958-20160328123409

Stuffn wrote: -Name: Benjamin Scath

Basic info: Symbol, although uses black, was worded in a way that makes it use both white and black in order for the symbol to be discernable. As Spirit pointed out, that’s not the case. All symbols are A color on a black background as the base image, though alternate locations can change this (see Spirit’s post again).

Appearance: Kind of boring all things considered. His outfit is generic with nothing in it that stands out, and his two outfits are similar to the point he could wear both at the same time and just take off the jacket in a fight...so consider some alternate outfits.

Backstory...well, going off plotholes alone…

Your bullies don’t make a lot of sense. Granted i’m sure there are some that would pick on a cripple, but those that DO wouldn’t have stopped once he got a new arm because he would still be missing the human one...making them less bullies and more like convenient puppets you can string along to make his childhood miserable. Your grandparents don’t make a lot of sense, not mentioning his dad at all until he showed up...i mean i guess they could be senile and have forgotten to mention it, but something tells me that’s not what you were going for. They don’t seem to have a bad relationship with the dad either since they just let the guy come back and get involved with the kid.

His father also doesn’t make a lot of sense. So let me get this straight, he had enough favors up with the Atlas Military to get him a new arm, but only does it AFTER he finds out the kid was still being bullied post semblance unlock and not after….say, when he saw he was missing an arm? I mean he apparently left him pre amputation, so i think something like that would have caught his eye...and speaking of...

Semblance is missing a range, cost or utility limitation, meaning he could allegedly port from Vale to Atlas to Vacuo in the time it took me to write this...granted this might just be a case of you forgetting to mention them, but if you haven’t set any limitations to it, I would recommend you post it in the semblance thread so we can figure out a limitation that won’t cripple it, but won’t make it objectively more useful than using a jet engine to reach a destination.

TLDR: Make the characters involved in his backstory actual characters as opposed to plot bunnies.