Board Thread:Administrative Requests/@comment-27404492-20170421231503/@comment-27106917-20170422000144

"In "Tipping Point", it is shown that Weiss has begun to detest the wealthy people of Atlas. She angrily tells Henry Marigold to leave due to his insensitive and ignorant attitude toward the charity event. Shortly after she completely lost her temper when a couple was talking condescendingly about the destruction of Vale. Weiss yells at everyone about their superficiality and ignorance. She becomes so emotionally shaken that she accidentally activates her Semblance which nearly causes a woman to be hurt."

Most of this paragraph describes what happened in that scene, not Weiss's personality. Wouldn't it be sufficient to say something along the lines of:

*"In "Tipping Point", it is shown that Weiss has begun to detest the wealthy people of Atlas, evidenced by when she yells at everyone about their superficiality and ignorance."