Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25396609-20150530163143/@comment-26397825-20150607072851

Hmm. Perhaps it wasn't a case of he wasn't enough like Dionysus and more that he was too much like Dionysus. What you want to do when making an OC based on someone or something is have enough references to make to people think, 'Oh that reminds me of this', but not so many that he just ends up being a retelling of the original story.

So I'd say keep the illegitimate child part. Probably ditch the 'captured by pirates and rescued by Hunters to become privately trained by them' and replace it with 'entire village captured by pirates, but when the Police force releases them, the convoy is attacked by Grimm that Hunters were after.' He can see the Hunters in the distance, decide that's what he wants to be when he grows up (so he never has to feel weak again maybe?) and instead of being privately trained by a Hunter he can go off to a foster home (that treats him well, because hardly any real foster homes are terrible) and then enrol himself in a Hunter pre-academy like Signal or Sanctum when he's old enough.

The vineyard part can tie in after he retires from being a Hunter - he could pick up an appreciation for fine wine in his early adulthood years and decide that's what he wants to do when he retires. He can still love his teammate, Ariadne, and marry her and have ten kids, but I'd cut out the whole part of where she is emotionally traumatised by their other teammates. Just have their other teammates standard, non-dastardly friends that maybe Ariadne had a crush on before he went off and fell in love with some other woman. Dolma can comfort her, and over a course of several years (not instantly) she can fall in love with him and they can get married.

With the semblance - pick one aspect of Dionysus's powers; either to make plants grow or affect the chemical compounds in their brains to turn them mad. Then add in the Aura consumption needed, whether they stay mad after he stops affecting their brains or whether the plants shrink back to normal after he stops pumping aura into them, and a radius and how much concentration is needed.