Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26417457-20190922000524/@comment-26417457-20190922233239

All of your criticism was indeed helpful. This was written as a script, if this was a story I would probably add more content and it would take me ~3 days to write. I'm actually an on and off writer on Deviantart, I wrote this crossover fanfiction (https://www.deviantart.com/derpythetroll16/art/Death-Battle-Peter-Griffin-vs-Adam-Taurus-809140050)  which does indeed have much more personality than the script I wrote. Also Weiss broke Emerald's illusion because she knew that the Schnee Manor shouldn't logically be on fire and she didn't really break it, the illusion was broken but Em's aura wore out. Thanks for criticism, everyone!