User blog comment:Videorule/I'm Creating My Own Webseries!/@comment-24094460-20150221025249/@comment-28132878-20150221034646

Art style is in the Eye of the Beholder and it seems all beholders agree that you are on the right track but you still have a long way to go, I look forward to improvement but right now I would write this off as a 5 minute work, and I know how it feels to make something and to work really hard on it and have it crapped on by the community (and this one is a particularly cruel one) but they have a point sometimes, my tip if you aren't able to go up to someone and say it’s one of your best work yet and you be proud of it don’t present it to the world, because you are going to get crapped on.

On a less nice route… (or more nice I’m not sure) I’m going to a quick review-like thing (more like questions and suggestions)

Ok first things first, what’s going on? I know it’s a trailer but you need to have something for us to see or hear that will draw us in (what’s the conflict of your show? Is it a comedy? Is it action filled?  Is it satire?) So far the only things that draws me in is the hope that the next one has something to draw me in (what do you enjoy about it?) Secondly, an animation can get away with being simple or at times broken, if it has something that makes up for it (hilarious jokes, great plot, based for something of higher quality, or has amazing characters) so far the character you showed us, Yuto Amamiya, is pretty one dimensional so far (which Is ok at this point in time) he likes comic books, imagines himself as a superhero called ‘something’ (thief mask evener?) has a mono tone voice and to some degree likes pizza, this is a good start basis for a little less than 1 minute, but I think you should use your first official episode to give some more Depth to this (and future) character(s) and that’s about it, you didn’t really give us to grasp onto that makes us want more. Finally the audio, I enjoyed that you had sound in the background (midi soundfont) but the voicing is…flat, voice acting is the hardest part of anything that requires a VO because you have to use a lot of emotion in your voice in order to convey any feeling and many spend months to years practicing and others it comes naturally, and it noticeable you neither apply to you (thus far)

To finish off, you have at least one fan new, mainly because I want to see how you will progress, was this simply a rough start to an amazing new show? Will it get better and better as it goes along? Will you even continue after all the negative feedback? Or will it stay exactly how it is, without any progression? All I can suggest is to work extra hard on your next trailer or part, make it amazing and blow us of the water with how good you truly are and make us feel bad for doubting you. Strive for greatness, and don’t disappoint your new fan and your future Reviewer.

Also sorry if I got carried away, I don’t intend to be mean but I am sometimes.