User blog comment:Gundam Legilis/How to improve RWBY: an opinion./@comment-11188061-20141114054000

I don't think so. I actually think the writing of RWBY is pretty good. The problem here is the conversion from novel format to anime format.

For example, I really like it that the villain's plot is multilayered, and that the mastermind (in this case, it seems to be Cinder) do not throw childish fits or growing unexplainable rage for minor setebacks. I've mentioned it before, but people grow the wrong expectations when they watch Breach. If you think about it logically, the 'invasion' was totally doomed to fail in the first place and could not possibly succeed. The main objective for this move here has always been to ensure the breach happens (they even put it in the title as if to emphasis the point) only, and any extra destruction are only secondary or minor. Any other speculated rewards from a more successful breach such as an excellent distraction of the main forces, panic, leveraging their own reputation possibly by being the 'first' to arrive and reap the position of a 'hero', infiltrating Atlas troops with White Fang etc are all, in the end, just secondary.

Get the breach, and drop Ozpin's reputation. The council will do the rest of the damage and as a result, he was dropped from his position as Head of Security. Ironwood and Ozpin now has a fractured trust; the two forces are not united as they now plot against each other instead. Like really, the stroke was masterful. I believe this would be absolutely entertaining to read in novel format, and without constraints like how the anime suffers now. The complain that the plot was concealed too much is only because most people simply aren't thinking hard enough.

Better writing does not solve the problem, because the format they've chosen could not fit the level of depth they've prepared. It might even increase the number of problems, because they have in their hands a list of things so big they simply could not fit into an anime format. Take the PG-13 rating for example - it might as well be baby level rating honestly, because everything we've seen so far is so tame and the consequences so minor, that it actual jarrs with the plot they're presenting. It's like writing a full blown, adult mature novel and then presenting it in a children's picture book - you can't appreciate either side of it.

At the very least, their level of converting from text to anime is simply not there yet. What RT needs is a bunch of experts in tailoring the line between graphic and story and text, and I dearly hope the Japanese crew RT hired does not only help with the production of Jap translated RWBY, but also with the show's presentation itself. If there's anyone out there who knows how to do it, it will be them.