Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-25266931-20161112032800/@comment-27082610-20161114162140

KNN005 wrote:

EXAMPLE: RWBY as told by KNN005 in one long season of 25 episodes each 30mins long. A brief overview.

1) Ruby has graduated Beacon, works with Jaune, Ren, Blake, Weiss, Yang, Nora and Nikos as international hunters

2) Cinder does her plan in Vale working with Torch, Neo, Em, and Merc.

3) Ruby's and friends do detective work to discover who Cinder is and her motive and start hunting her down

4) One by one their Rogue Gallery (Em, Merc, Neo, and Torch) bite the dust but bought Cinder enough time...

5) Cinder gets her other half of the Maiden power and hauls ass

6) Qrow goes with Ruby's group to chase Cinder down but Glynda, CVFY and other Vale co-stars protect over run Vale. Ironwood fans out his army to protect other cities in case Cinder's plans to repeat the process at other towers.

7) Cinder accidently leads Ruby's group to Salem having no where else to go, Salem sics Grimm swarms and her head hanchos(Watts, Tyrian, and Hazel) on Ruby's group.

8) Ruby's group fights well but Jaune, Nikos and Weiss die. Ruby runs off, but Blake find evidence of Salem's intentions (books, lab reports, amoral shit)

9) Ruby makes it to Salem enraged and unfocused due to Weiss' death, loses. Qrow saves her, and dies.

10) Salem escapes. Ruby depressed but decided to make it right and as reinforcements arrive (all the heroes converge on the Salem's base) Ruby finds Salem on the roof, final battle, she wins

11) Fin

1) No, the villains not waiting 4 years to pull their plans off was much better storytelling. Unless you're talking about that being the starting pointi in the series, in which case I call double bullshit because it prevents us from getting to know the characters at their beginnings as we have. Plus like Anon said, they wouldn't have a reason to stick together post-graduation.

2) So literally no change there.

3) None of the cast has shown any ability for detective work. Yang was the closest thing they had, and that was only because she had an informant she could intimidate who ended up being useless because the villains aren't idiots.

4) Yeah, no. We lost enough of the rogues in V3 with Torchwick dying and Neo being MIA. Plus refer to #3 as why they wouldn't have the opportunity to do so in the first place.

5) Again, no change other than the fact that it destroys the impact of Beacon's assault if that's all that happens.

6) Literally what V4 is thus far.

7) How?

8) Pyrrha dying in a group assault is bullshit. The only reason she lost to Cinder was because she tried to solo a demigod. What Anon said about the rest of the deaths.

9) Great, we get the "main character goes into the room unprepared and gets mentor killed" from 90% of combat-based fiction ever written. Fucking great, astounding writing.

10) Wait, I thought they had already converged on the base? What's even going on with this plot?

11) Totally unnecessary.

This is just a terrible way to tell the story, because it somehow manages to feel rushed and slow as hell at the same time. Spread across ten and a half hours this would be fucking painful to sit through