Board Thread:Speculation House/@comment-10390252-20141218201832/@comment-25555436-20150212124826

JayHart wrote: Way too much to quote The "Someone Mysterious" part is worrying...we don't know if Raven is capable of dimension-travel with her portals, and the whole "Mysterious Woman X appears, saves RWBY, sends them to another universe that apparently has something to do with theirs"...it all feels....eh, cringeworthy. The first part alone feels a lot like a Deus Ex Machina.

"Grimm Overlord"...it just sounds so...dull and boring. And could easily end up proven false by Canon (unless Miles and Kerry decide to bring an Archdemon). Just...no. Though I guess it does sound a lot better than "Grimman".

I would hate if the characters fought themselves for no reason, which is how you made it sound. There has to be a reason, a good reason, for them to fight just like that once they meet each other. If there isn't, it would feel like terrible writing, and this is an idea for a fanfic, not a fighting game.

There's also the question of why did Raven save them just like that and sent them to that other universe? And why that universe? And what's the connection between that universe and the protagonists's? And why is Adam1 there too, I mean it may have been your mediocre explanation skills, but saying Adam1 is there just like that for no reason feels like just bashing in a popular character for the sake of shameless fanservice instead of for the sake of a good story.