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DeletedContent wrote: Core Info

1) Basic Info

Name: Rozwainy Grzmot

If you're going to call him Roz in parts of the post, shouldn't that go in the nicknames section? Especially with a relatively-tough-to-pronounce name like that, shouldn't more people just be calling him Roz?

Species: Faunus

I'm assuming Eagle?

Eyes: Dark yellow/gold

Umm, human eyes don't come in gold, which to me means one of three things to me. Either 1) that should be his Faunus trait in itself, as Faunus have one animal trait not several and this guy already has feather-hair, 2) He's wearing colored Contact lenses, or 3) he's a Special Snowflake who has Golden Eyes just to make him stand out, and for no other reason.

Physical Traits: Numerous small white feathers in place of hair, larger feathers around neck

Ok, so does he have a feather mane or something? Describe "Larger feathers around his neck" if you would, because I can't see it.

Gadgets: Short javelins/jarids (2-3 of these)

Where are these kept?

3) Characteristics:

Upon graduating Signal he decided to apply to Shade academy rather than Beacon (he had toured both and decided he preferred the former).

I have to question his decision here. Based on the videos about Vacuou, as well as Sun claiming that the desert gave him homefield advantage, we can assume Vacuou to be mostly desert. I doubt that cavalry would do quite so well in sandy areas.

Personality: Extroverted, optimistic, clever, and extremely charismatic, Roz is a brave, bright, and likable man. He works well both as a leader and a follower, and is able to talk his way out of most bad situations. He also has a strong ethical code which he adamantly refuses to break, though this can occasionally make him seem arrogant. He is also very charitable and attempts to help those he can. Is he an egotist or not? In his Background you mentioned a bruised ego when he wasn't assigned as team leader, I'd thought that would have made it into the personality section.

Dislikes: Bullies, dishonor, terrorist groups, exploitation, prejudice (as a Faunus he has faced some), hypocrisy

Some of these really do go without saying, esp Terrorist Groups. Just a thought.

Notable Relationships:

...not to mention the fact that Selje’s homeland of Atlas doesn’t exactly give Roz the best impression of her... Did I miss something? Why would the fact that Selje was born in Atlas give Roz a bad impression?

Notes: Roz’s family all share the same semblance, similar to the schnee family I'm pretty sure we're heavily discouraging hereditary Semblances of any kind until we get some form of confirmation that the Schnees aren't an isolated case.

- Form 1 Design: Wings fold inward and wrap around the user’s shoulders...

With regards to the wings, I have a few questions. One, How big are they? What's the wingspan? Two, what kind of wings? What's the style? are they more akin to plane wings or bird wings?

B) Semblance

Name: Bound Summon

Short Description: Upon unlocking their semblance, the user has the ability to copy the form of one animal and summon a solid projection...Roz...chose the horse

If I may ask, why is this necessary? I mean, the dude already has a jetpack that he seems more than comfortable with using. I'd say pick one or the other, but not both. And yeah, yeah, I know, he's based on the winged Hussards, but it just doesn't work in my opinion for him to have both. It's just overkill, and you can be using either the Weapon or the Semblance to do something more interesting.

Reflection of Personality: Rozwainy is extremely charismatic and seems to have a great aura around him (pun intended) which is reflected in this ability. It also reflects his family’s long lineage of cavalry service

I would have accepted "Great with animals" or something, but Charisma would lead me towards a Semblance that's more akin to a rallying cry, banishing exhaustion from his allies or something, not summoning a freaking horse. If it basically boils down to "Pick an animal Familiar, summon at will", then why is Charisma a factor at all?

Landing Strategy: Jets to glide down and counteract fall

<p class="MsoNormal">Fighting Style: Using his lance and jetpack to quickly charge enemies (head on)

Once again highlighting the uselessness of the horse summoning Semblance. Based on what you described he uses his Jetpack for most of his maneuverability (as he should because it lets him travel along the Y axis and doesn't take up a chunk of his Aura to use), so the horse is basically just there for when the Jetpack runs out of fuel, for Moral Support, or to be a heavy-handed tie-in to the Winged Hussars.

<p class="MsoNormal">Optional Statistics:

<p class="MsoNormal">Levels are from 0 to 5, with 0 being nonexistent, 1 being low, 2 being below average, 3 being average, 4 being above average and 5 being high.

<p class="MsoNormal">$) Technical Statistics

<p class="MsoNormal">Dust use: 0

But...he does use Dust. He uses Dust in his weapon just about all the time because the Jetpack is fueled by Dust.