Board Thread:Off Topic/@comment-26018514-20150401033018/@comment-25396609-20150429160941

I did.

still seeing a LOT of spelling and grammar issues, but those can be fixed at any time.

the biggest problm I can see i the background and weapon, they don't make a whole lot of sense to me.

For one thing, his origin is so damned cluttered, I can't make heads or tails of it. did he have his weapon when he fought the grimm? how old was he? what species of grimm?if the answer to those questions are no, under 16, and anything other than a beowolf, then he didn't  beat it. he's dead. next, who was it that adopted him? how many siblings does he have? who was the friend? was there a particular reason those rogue white fang kidnapped him, or were they just breaking in to random houses?